A web developer whose writing process occasionally looks like Pinkie's infamous Party Of One thanks to characters deciding to derail his fics when they feel they make more sense that way.
Applejack didn't expect her crush on Rarity to actually be mutual. Then again, she also didn't expect Rarity to condemn her soul to Pony Hell.
Rarijack with a tiny side dish of Flutterdash.
Written for the BARCAST WRITING CONTEST #2: Make Rarity Not Garbage. Because nothing says "not garbage" like "I just ensured your eternal suffering, darling."
This fic finally has cover art, thanks to the always-amazing Earthsong!
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What's BARCAST?
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A MLP community interview podcast thing, apparently! I only learned of them through this contest (I'm really not as active as I'd like in the fandom, so tons of stuff flies under my radar), so I can't really say more about it, unfortunately. You can click the contest link in the description to get to the group, or you can just check out the podcast for example on YouTube.
The transitions are rather abrupt, but aside from those, a hilarious read. Thank you for it.
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Thanks for the kind words! The contest had a 5,000 word limit, and the fic in its current form clocks in at 4,959 - I wept for every word and non-essential scene I had to cut.
Huh. I guess this was some kind of speedwrite?
But Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy both have an even number of vowels (not counting the "y")?
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Yes, but their in-game characters' names have odd vowel counts, hence Rainbow's note lamenting the fact that the "y" doesn't count.
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Oh, got it, that makes sense.
This is why my Ponesian Hippogriff OnO character is named Hoaalohakupa'a Moliakalaniikeola
This is amazing.
This whole thing is amazing. I'm glad I'm not the only one hanging on to stupid jokes from 2011 to write stories about. XD
I think I got a third of the way before I had to drop it. The dialogue feels...very stiff and awkward.
Uh, that was a bit crazy.
Still, if you want to get more views, you might want to think about adding breaks in between scene transitions.
You can has review!
I love the concept of people confessing their love to another while tryng to break a curse that is actually just a part of a D&D campaign someone misplaced
Hold on, are we counting all vowels from both first and last names, or only first names? Because if we're doing only first names, then Aruruhirh is actually safe from the curse. I could see that being a rule that Twilight would be very pedantic and obsessive about, because it's Twilight so I'm surprised it's not actually clarified. Also, I am very, very interested in knowing exactly how Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy trolled Twilight's last campaign, because I'm having a rough time picturing Fluttershy willingly trolling a campaign in any way, shape or form without context being given. I'm also curious as to what caused Applejack and Rarity to be unable to get into Donjons & Dromedaries. Seriously, you can build an entire world from just what's missing in this fic. I would so be here for a continuation or a longer multi-chapter piece set in this universe. Especially since there seems to be a depressing lack of new FlutterDash fics lately and a surprising lack of completed multi-chapter pieces that reach over ten chapters in general for the pairing.
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(And your enjoyment of FlutterDash is noted - I don't get around to writing much, but I do enjoy these two, so who knows what the future holds?)
Hey, first of all, thanks for the kind words, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
This was a fic for a contest that had a 5,000 word limit. This fic clocks in at 4,959 words. In addition, there was a time limit, and I had already rewritten most of it to change the POV character, so there was not exactly an infinite amount of time to tweak it.
Re: what counts, it's heavily implied that full names count since only the last names contain the letter "y", and the note explicitly noted that only A, E, I, O, and U count. I also vaguely recall counting those letters a dozen times while writing the fic, so my count better be right. XD
Re: Fluttershy trolling Twi's campaign: I tend to write Fluttershy with a slightly mischievous streak hidden under her meek and cheerful personality. Nothing mean or actively prank-y, but she vibes well with Rainbow Dash.
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It's not so much that I think of Fluttershy as not being capable of mischief, as I fully believe she very much can do so if the mood strikes her. It's the how exactly she went about it. I'm trying to think of a way that she possibly could have that isn't just spending all of her actions to seduce Rainbow's character when not in battle. Because yeah, I can see her doing that. And I also see every roll ending in a nat 10 or 20 so that Twilight can't possibly stop her from doing so. I can see her being so focused on Rainbow that she derails the campaign at every given opportunity and Rainbow rolling with it because she'd be insane not to. Gosh now I really, really want to see how she did it xD.
Re: Yeah if we're including last names then Aruruhirh is susceptible to the curse. She actually has nine vowels with her last name included, whereas Anahecd has five, though Anahecd would be cursed either way, as her first name only has three. Only her last name would make her safe, as it has two since y doesn't count. So I don't believe your count is off, you can rest easy
I only mentioned it because due to Twilight's slightly obsessive nature it seems like something she would definitively spell out and I was surprised to see she didn't. However given your word count limit, I can see why you wouldn't waste a valuable sentence spelling out something that is rather heavily implied, just felt a little odd of Twilight not to do.
So yeah, this was a nice, enjoyable piece that works well on it's own, but also has a lot of potential to be expanded into a full universe, even if it's only in oneshots now that the contest is well over. You have the potential for something really great on your hands here, along with something that is already very good standing on it's own, though your naming of Pony Hell and Pony Satan could use some work
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Well, you never know when the muse decides to strike, so I'll keep it in mind!
Yay! Very sudden but so adorable flutterdash! Amazing fic!