Commission for Ankaru.
Octavia wasn't always a musician: she had a past life that she rarely talks about, as part of an organization that researched and developed technology in secret under the watchful eye of Princess Celestia. A life she thought she had left behind; but when she comes across a severely-injured Changeling after the invasion of Canterlot, she feels both a desire to help the creature, and to challenge her own skills as a scientist.
But things become more complicated when Octavia realizes the Changeling is more than just a drone, and how it struggles between the safety of being just another Changeling in the crowd, and the desire to be its own person.
Chapters (7)
oh snap
new BRR story
this will be fun
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I hope you enjoy it. It was a really interesting theme to write with, especially since it's more of a character development story than it is my usual punching-things kind of story.
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Will this be a daily update thing? It's not, like, 300,000 words or something, right?
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That would have gone a tad overbudget, I think. No worries, it's only six chapters, and I'll be posting a chapter a day.
Yeah I think 300000 words would have been a little bit expensive.
This is a very compelling story so far. I look forward to seeing where this goes.
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Thank you kindly. It was a really interesting idea to work with and I just hope that I did it full justice.
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It gets better! Though of course, I may be a tiny bit biased lol
A world where Moonbeam meets Miss Take would be a strange one indeed.
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Whom?
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I have no idea who that is.
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Miss Take is from another story of mine. She's a half-Changeling who is sort of detached from her Hive, but she still does work for the Queen Mother on occasion. She's very confident and sultry, a former assassin for the Hive turned thief who steals for the challenge of it.
That was an epic finale. I hope this isn't the last we see of Moonbeam...
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Thanks, I'm glad to hear you enjoyed the story.
Ankaru and I have already discussed the possibility of a sequel, so I'm sure that in the future we'll be seeing more of her. I just hope I continue to do justice to his ideas.
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That was a strangely perfect lullaby from your other comment. That would fit things pretty well.
And well, adding an epilogue here would be a little trickier than usual since it's a paid commission and all, I can only write what I'm told to.
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An epilogue was actually something I was considering to show changes inbetween this story and the next so the readers aren't so confused.
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No buts, really. I just never got around to asking for one since we had started sequels. I did however realize that people would probably be momentarily confused as to the whereabouts of the actual Moonbeam and why and how the changeling made its own form, as well as possibly a few other things if needed. So, I am talking with BRR to complete the first story to fix that little oversight.
Quite an engaging trip. Octavia being developed the way she was was interesting enough, but then it turned out to not be her story so much as “Moonbeam”’s.
I will say, though, that you could be a little clearer with scene changes. The previous chapter especially was a little disorienting at first.
Poor changeling... Couldnt they have just used some healing spell or something Instead of cutting its legs off?
I lost it for a second. You REALLY need some separation here. You think you separated the story? Nope, not enough. One paragraph I'm reading how they are coming to Celestia to talk, next I'm suddenly on a special operation. With absolutely no warning.