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I don't know why, but I'm hoping twilight is pregnant.
*flask
*his
....... God dammit Celestia.
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Fired harder than my load.
........
I'll see myself out.
Edit: And typing exactly 100,000 words for the first Act. You are the strongest of writers.
8816712 Bullseye!
Alright, now get the 50 cal ready, I want you to try and kill that building over there with act 2.
Act 1?
...
Damn
Looking forward to more, keep up the good work my good man
I love these lines, hey make Shining seem so thick, in an adorable way.
You just couldn't stop yourself, couldn't you?
The whole scene with Cadance look like a corruption of Velvet and Night's arc, and I for one i'm intrigued. Now i'm just wondering, Is this going to be the last chapter today, or will you post another one like you said you would do? I ask because of this whole "end of act 1" thing.
Speaking of the "End of Arc 1" picture, I think Homestuck broke me, because I couldn't see that without getting triggered.
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I was hoping for that too, and I was sorely disappointed by the lack of mention.
The marines.
Okay Boromir.
Wait, I just thought of something.
The Fellowship of Twicest!
Trademarked!
Shakes, we need 7 other people for this.
This was a weird chapter, mostly cos it goes from Twilight being a teen at the beginning, to having her in a scene from when she was a filly, to her being an adult again about to leave for ponyville. It felt a bit rushed and I was kinda hoping we’d be staying with Velvet and Night Light longer since for me they’ve been the most interesting part of the story so are.
Also now that we know Twilight is heading to ponyville I’m said we don’t get to see Spike get brought into the family. I even imagined a funny scene where Twilight asked her parents to adopt her baby , and after some hilarious antics thinking Twilight is pregnant and how they shouldn’t have taught her sex Ed the way they did Twilight finally reveals that she was talking about her baby dragon.
I dunno I just think you miss a big opportunity not bringing in Spike to be a part of the family, see Velvet and Night Light once again halve to be parents, maybe have them teach Twilight how to look after him.
*hopeful tone*
Update part one?
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Tomorrow. Guaranteed.
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Patience, my lovelies.
Oof ouch owie. Ego hurting words.
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mare's
Twilight just subtly leaned back against him.
Wouldn't RD and Flutter still live at Cloudsdale? At least until they grow up? Or is this "already in the future, right before Season 1"?
Period, not a comma
his
No, no, not quite now...
*here
To quote every Star Wars character...
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Could you maybe mark where there are time skips in this chapter? I ask because the jumps were rather sudden and I had to go back and reread just to make sure I wasn't missing anything. We start with Shining and Twilight as teenagers, jump to Twilight as a filly, then end with them being adults with Twilight about to leave for Ponyville and Shining being promoted to captain. It was actually pretty confusing.
chafed, not chaffed
Chaffed has an entirely different meaning.
bravo bravo
exultant story.
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Shakey, your work is excellent as usual. I am absolutely loving this. ^_^
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Also, did you plan on making it exactly 100,000 words? I just noticed that.
8818947 Yes. And I planned on making 'cupcakes' the 100,000th word.
I just about died from asphyxiation because I laughed so much. Fucking amazing writing.
I was half expecting that to end wit Shining calling out Twilight's name and Cadence calling out Night Light's name.
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No matter where, I always enjoy seeing these kinds of clever manipulation.
Hmm here it seems you are missing something
at
martial
HMM... this is QUITE the punishment... That it is even considered a credible threat implies some REALLY dark side to this Equestria...
Sweet Celestia, end of act 1, and I have such a plot boner right now.
... Take that how you may.
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uhhh...
Looking forward to how this wraps up. But my only issue is the almost verbatim way some scenes are written as if it's the episodes from the show, but just in written form.
Nice, I better get some practice at sounding seductive for this.
Quite looking forward to seeing this start to integrate with the show's plotline from here on.
Okay it's recorded.
It's just a shame that from here on I might have to have a lot less music and sound effects with the loss of the Artlist.io assets.
First Cadance, than Twilight and finally Velvet?
Shining Armor the Alicorn breeder
Murphy: *Hysterical laughter*
*Murphy continues laughing*
CELESTIA... you clever mare