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Oh man, I can't wait to see what happens when Twilight finds the REAL Shining Armor and they head off to stop the wedding then.
Oh SHIT!
I wonder how Shining Armor and Celestia are going to react to this? Twilight was basically raped by Chrysalis using a form Twilight trusted, at least she revealed her true form after the fact. I hope the child will not be too bad.
8989178 Chrysalis did not succeed in impregnating Twilight.
Yet.
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Don't you dare soil Twilight!
Shining needs a harem.
Oh boy.
Chrysie...you just signed your death warrant.
that was way to close.
Hmm It seems that horses actually GET to go into the womb... So as long as they are still somewhat anatomically similar to horses that should not be so traumatic...
So I recently found out I [somehow] have more subs than the Ultra Fast Ponies abridged series so I highly doubt anyone else will have gotten this stuck in their head from Tainted Love.
Either way, check out UFP, it's stupid... in a good way.
Oh yeah, I forgot all about this chapter. Whoops.
Ms. Twilight, your progress astounds me. (start at 2:44)
I dunno why, but the fact that she says the exact same thing, just changed a bit, absolutely kills me. Why is this so funny?
Oh hell, at least Twi'll have a chance to talk to Shining now.
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*separated
Also, will you call faux-Shining "him" or "her"? Either way, you should stick to one.
Super choppy sentences
Put the first part in quotation marks (or in italics, like you do later)
our last
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I'll admit that I struggled a bit with the pronoun game regarding Chrysalis while disguised as Shining Armor. It created an active mental dissonance as I tried to write it.
I settled on an uneasy mix, with he or him describing what Chrysalis was physically doing as Shining Armor, or as he was perceived by others. And she or her regarding her inner thoughts or feelings.
It isn't a perfect, or elegant solution. But I thought it worked well enough once I finished. Call it a writing experiment.
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That makes sense. I didn't notice if you did that, but whatever, it's not that big of a deal.
Ignoring the incest, Chrysalis replacing Shining just makes so much more sense for the plot.
This whole story is playing out great. There's been a few things I thought would come up, like if Twilight noticed Shining smelled different (since she's so familiar with it); then she'd realize it's the same 'dead bug' smell from her entomology assignments. Then later in the cave you could've had Twilight explain the part about her pain and the numbing effect.
There's been a few things left forgotten or by the wayside; things I thought would happen, but didn't. Overall I'm really looking forward to seeing how Shining reacts to the truth of everything; if it ever comes up like it did with his parents. Or maybe Celestia wised up, and realized the times have changed and she can't be as open or honest with the next generation.
Velvet's bonsai and all that symbolism has been great. There's more I could say, but I've been too into how all this ends.
"Hiya Princess!" Applejack greeted.
"Please, just call me Cadance," Cadance said.
Perfect spot to have added the FIW "Hiya Princess princess princess!"
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I assure you, I was sorely tempted.
This Chrysalis is incompetent to a ridiculous degree.
Like holy shit... How did she survived that long? Let alone rule.
Did you make Chrysalis Shining Armor just so you can use that song?
Worst infiltration ever.
If this Chrysalis had not shaped shifting on her side, than i say she win a Darwin Award a long time ago...