• Published 16th Apr 2016
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I'm So Sorry! - RhetCon



Sunset learns an important Friendship lesson. Never steal Fluttershy's man.

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Forgiveness?

“Fluttershy…”

“What is it, Sunset?”

“Are you angry?”

“I’m not angry.”

“I think you’re angry.”

“What makes you say that?”

“You’re choking Angel…”

The girl let her bunny go, allowing him to catch his breath. Her facial expression didn’t change as she grabbed her drink and proceeded to slurp it down.

“C-can you talk to me?” I asked.

“I am talking to you,” she said. “What more do you want?”

“Forgiveness?”

“Forgiveness comes to those who earn it,” said Fluttershy. “Return what you stole.”

“C’mon, Fluttershy…” I said. “You know I can’t return a person.” She sipped silently. “I’ve said it before, and I’ll say it again. I’m sorry.”

“Are you really sorry?” asked Fluttershy.

“I’m really sorry,” I said sincerely. Fluttershy seemed to be satisfied and gave me a smile.

“Now tell Magnet you hate him and that if you ever see him again, he should prepare for castration.”

“What?” I asked. “Why would I do something ridiculous like that?”

“Well…” she said. “Right now, he likes you. If you tell him that you don’t like him… m-maybe he’ll start looking at me…”

“So you want me to break a random dude’s heart so that he’ll fall in love with you?”

“Yes,” said Fluttershy plainly.

“He’s not worth it, anyway,” I said. “You can do much better.” Fluttershy turned away and patiently started sipping her drink. “F-Fine. I’ll do it. Not like it’s the first time I’ve turned someone down.” I walked away from the table and set off to find the guy that approached me earlier that day.


The whistling is what caught my attention. Not his constant effort to lean against a wall while in front of me, nor his deliberate dropping of objects. Nope, it was the whistling. I can’t whistle. Why can’t I whistle?

Fluttershy seemed uncomfortable as I looked up from my phone, the sound causing me to adopt an annoyed face. I looked back to see a guy with bright orange skin and steel colored hair smiling at me goofily.

“Uh...” I said. “Can I help you?”

“Yes!” he said. “I see that you’re, uh… walking down this hallway. So, uh... do you come here often?”

“That is the smoothest thing I’ve ever heard,” I said sarcastically. “Who are you?”

“Magnet Blaze is the name. And the game is…n-nevermind,” he said. “So, what about you?”

“Sunset Shimmer,” I said. “Nice to meet you, Magnet.”

“Nice name,” he commented. “So… How would you like to go out with me to a-”

“You know, I think I’m good,” I said, slowly turning away.

“W-wait!” he said. “You didn’t even let me finish!” I sighed and turned back.

“Let’s hear it,” I said.

“Will you go to the Wildlife Conservation Center with me?” he asked. “I heard they’re having a really cool opening ceremony and-” This time, it was Fluttershy who cut him off, getting in his face in excitement.

“R-really!?” she asked, energetically. “I didn’t think they’d be opening until May. I've been waiting for them to introduce the new Shiba Inu everyone is talking about.”

“O-oh, really?” he asked. “That’s nice, but I was really talking to her…” He pointed to me.

“I’m not really an animal person,” I admitted. “You might have some fun with Fluttershy, though.”

“B-but…” he looked at me and Fluttershy. “I-I’m not saying there’s something wrong with you, but I really wanted to go with Sunset…”

Fluttershy’s face, right then and there, was one of pure melancholy.

It was one of those faces you see and feel. Like when your friend stubs their toe pretty nastily and their face is plastered with pain, and somehow, you also feel that pain. That’s how her face looked and how I felt.

“O-oh,” she said. “I-I guess I’ll just leave then.” Fluttershy departed pretty quickly after that, slipping past me and running down the hallway in the opposite direction. As if nothing happened, Magnet continued the conversation.

“So, uh… are you going?” he asked again. “Cause the place is gonna be pretty packed, I hear. At least 12 people, Sunset Shimmer. 12.”

“Look,” I said. “I don’t want to go to your Wildlife Conservation thing, okay?” I turned away without seeking an answer and took off to find Fluttershy. By the time I got outside, however, she seemed to have vanished. It took a while to find her, but when I did, I found her sipping on a drink at a cafe downtown, choking Angel Bunny to death.


“Ah, Sunset Shimmer!” said Magnet with a wave. I knew he saw me approaching a while ago but acted like he didn’t see me until I was close. “Have you reconsidered my offer?”

“No, I came here to warn you,” I said. “Look. I don’t like you, I don’t want to go on a date with you, heck, I barely care about animals.”

“W-what? Really?” He asked.

“Yeah, really,” I said. “Hey, I might not like you, but there's definitely someone who does. She’s kind, sweet, and really loves animals. I feel that she’d be a perfect match for you.”

“Are you serious?” he asked. “Who is it?”

“Fluttershy,” I said. “You know, the one who really wanted to go with you to the Center thingy?”

“Fluttershy…” he looked like he was thinking it over, then beamed. “Okay then. I’ll go ask her.”

“Great,” I said with a sigh. “And here I thought that I’d have to threaten you with getting your legs broken, or something like that.” Magnet stopped, turned and placed his hands on my shoulders firmly.

“Are you… into that kind of stuff?” he asked.

“What? What are you-”

“Sadism and masochism,” he said while fidgeting slightly. “C-cause if you’re into that, you just got that much hotter...”

“No!” I yelled, breaking his hold on me. “W-what about Fluttershy? Weren’t you thinking about her?”

“Well, I was, but then you said-”

I barely avoided the flying glass cup that was flung towards my head. Frozen for a few seconds, I turned towards the broken glass and saw the iconic lime that Fluttershy had in her cup while she was drinking. I turned the other way and found a livid Fluttershy.

Yes, livid. That’s two degrees past pissed.

“Uh, F-Fluttershy,” I said. “Just calm down. It’s okay to-” She looked at me, sending a chill through my entire body. She turned away and started to walk to Magnet, who was frozen in fear. Once she was close enough, she softly grasped his hand in hers and began to walk, half-leading, half-dragging Magnet to what I assume was the Wildlife Conservation Center opening ceremony. All I could do was bow my head.

“I wonder if Twilight has a friendship lesson on this.”

Author's Note:

No, this is not a dramatically alter version of the first time I asked a girl on a date. What are you talking about?

Anyways, that was "I'm So Sorry", which was inspired by the picture for this story. I'm actually really upset I couldn't find a source for it. If anyone could find the source, please tell me so that I can put it up.

Comments ( 34 )

Wow, look at you, Mr. Makeitrainoneshots. Didn't even know you started on this one. I rather enjoyed it. However, I should warn you now:

If you make fun of my inability to whistle one more 'gain, we are going to have both issues and problems. I will fight you, Conj.

"IT'S A TRAP!!!"
-Admiral Ackbar

7129764 *Drowns out complaints in whistle song*

*Starts to whistle while I work it*

7129791 I'm really tempted to make a bad joke here, but I'm going to refrain. Only because I know nothing about Star Trek or Wars, though.

I came across your story and found it relatively amusing, thanks for the chuckles.

By the way, the art you have is twilite-sparkleplz's Sunshynesketchtest, which you can find here on the artist's DeviantArt.

Yandere Fluttershy?

Poor Sunset. Poor Fluttershy, too. Guy seems like a jerk.

7130110 Both Thanks, and thank you!

7130513 Nope. It's definitely ketchup on her shirt...

Yep.

7130645 Guy's the worst.

Especially if you turn down Fluttershy. Nobody turns down Fluttershy.

7130925 Okay then... But why is she holding a kitchen knife?

Oh wait, I'm without my glasses. I must be seeing things.

7130927 Yup. You can't turn Flutters down. As a matter of fact, it was a picture of Flutterbat that got me intetested in the main series. A vampire pony! The embodyment of cuteness and badassness.

However, Sunset still my favorite character.

7130970 I think I've just realized how cool Sunset is. She's been in a lot of my recent stories and will probably be in more to come.

7130645 I'd say Fluttershy seems like the jerk here. If he's not interested in her he's not interested in her and trying to bully him and her friends to get her way isn't a great sign really.

7131335 Oh, she's not blameless either in all this. I'm just saying the guy's being very stupid and this'll end badly for her.

7131374 Hm, seems just a case of not interested or her interest is so subtle he didn't pick it up. It's Fluttershy, remember, not generally the bravest of ponies humans

7131575 Maybe, but guys can be massive idiots. I speak from experience, being a guy.

This was entertaining!

7129791 Women. There almost always a trap. Just like my friends gamer girlfriend.

good but needs a sequel

7162100 I don't know how, though...

7162131 here's an option if you want:
magnet tells fluttershy why he loves sunset and not her, then he leaves fluttershy and gets sunset.

Flutters is a wee bit OOC, don't you think?

7199011 Yeah, I can see that.

Great story! Have a like! :twilightsmile:

I love how everything worked out perfectly. Fluttershy got Magnet to go with her to the opening. Plus Magnet loves Sunset even more, so win-win!:yay:

Not bad but...

Fluttershy…”
“What is it, Sunset?”
“Are you angry?”
“I’m not angry.”
“I think you’re angry.”
“What makes you say that?”
“You’re choking Angel

…”

What? I'll admit, I never thought I see the day where she ever do that(in cannon). Was a little confused but otherwise not a bad story.

i actually feel sorry for angel after the way he treats her

Artwork is from twilite-sparkleplz at deviant art.

here is the page

“Now tell Magnet you hate him and that if you ever see him again, he should prepare for castration.”

What. The. [BEEP]! :pinkiegasp:

Dang. I actually like this kind of characterization of Fluttershy.

And by the way, to the dude that doesn't want Fluttershy...

You're dead, bro. Very, very dead.

No one rejects Flutters. No one. Her friends won't let him.

Yes, livid . That’s two degrees past pissed.

Missed this one.

Yeah. It's definitely beyond pissed. Yeesh.:twilightoops:

Oh my God. Fluttershy is hard core!

“You’re choking Angel…”

Ok, now there's something I never thought Fluttershy would do.

“He’s not worth it, anyway,” I said. “You can do much better.” Fluttershy turned away and patiently started sipping her drink. “F-Fine. I’ll do it. Not like it’s the first time I’ve turned someone down.” I walked away from the table and set off to find the guy that approached me earlier that day.

agreed, it'll just make everything worse.

The whistling is what caught my attention. Not his constant effort to lean against a wall while in front of me, nor his deliberate dropping of objects. Nope, it was the whistling. I can’t whistle. Why can’t I whistle?

I can't either.

Fluttershy’s face, right then and there, was one of pure melancholy.

poor fluttershy.

“Look,” I said. “I don’t want to go to your Wildlife Conservation thing, okay?” I turned away without seeking an answer and took off to find Fluttershy. By the time I got outside, however, she seemed to have vanished. It took a while to find her, but when I did, I found her sipping on a drink at a cafe downtown, choking Angel Bunny to death.

Kinda was expecting she'd go off crying this time. Guess not.

“Fluttershy…” he looked like he was thinking it over, then beamed. “Okay then. I’ll go ask her.”

That went better than I expected.

“Sadism and masochism,” he said while fidgeting slightly. “C-cause if you’re into that, you just got that much hotter...”

Nope, I change my mind about what I said. 😳

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