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The Dante Shy


Fluttershy has a crush on a certain someone but has no idea what to tell them but does know what to get them for Christmas

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Comments ( 13 )

This is cute, but it could use a lot of editing.
There's some parts that don't quite lead into others like Sunset asking Fluttershy "what did you want to ask me?" when Fluttershy didn't mention any question - only that she wanted to speak in private.
It has a lot of potential though :twilightsmile:

Cute Story.

But oh my God the grammar is just... bad. Like, alot of readers would turn away from this due to them. In which of course there'll always be errors but when they're noticeable, fix them!

This story though imo, was rushed insanely bad.
Do you have any proof readers???
On the bright side though, this story alone has the potential to be a multi chapter story and not a one shot.

The other thing though was that, you made things too obvious. The title gives it away and makes the term secret crush non existing and irrelevant to this story because it has no value or uniqueness.

Why are you making aj sound evil :applejackunsure:

AJ is totally mean when it comes to relationships…anyway that was a AMAZING story:rainbowkiss:

How did this get approved with no description?

Just another generic one-shot that's painful to read and barely squeaks past the minimum word count. This story shouldn't even be on this site; this is literally a tumblr-tier drabble.

You can't even spell the word perfect.


You should make a sequel where AJ finds out

need more of this chapters

SS knitted into one of the corners


I'm a terrible person.

Fluttershy loved Christmas and it wasn't because she had less animals to take care of, oh no it was because this was the time of year everyone was kind to one another, well more than usual. But this Christmas Fluttershy had a special plan for someone, Fluttershy was going to get her big time crush a present and confess her love.

I feel the same when Christmas comes, especially to see many people with smiles on their faces. :pinkiehappy:

"I... I made this for you" Fluttershy said very quickly her face was covered by her hair and from what Sunset could see she was bright red. Sunset took the box and opened the top, inside Sunset found a knitted lime green colour scarf with SS knitted into one of the corners in yellow string.

Very impressive fluttershy. :twilightsmile:

After the two left the back of the school they were met by the rest of their friends Rainbow Dash and Rarity had massive smiles on their face clearly Rarity had put two and two together and Rainbow well she was glad her best friend had finally confessed to Sunset but she was also glad that as soon as Applejack finds out about her and Pinkie she's going to get Sunset involved with the torment as well.

Proud of you fluttershy. 😊

Back to comment that the cover is SO FRAKKING CUTE!

I could be wrong.
but it's like a cliché, for the hard-headed country bumpkin, who doesn't accept homosexual relationships, because he's very conservative.

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