A SunShyne Christmas

Fluttershy has a crush on a certain someone but has no idea what to tell them but does know what to get them for Christmas

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seventeen

seventeen #1 · Dec 15th, 2015 · · ·

This is cute, but it could use a lot of editing.
There's some parts that don't quite lead into others like Sunset asking Fluttershy "what did you want to ask me?" when Fluttershy didn't mention any question - only that she wanted to speak in private.
It has a lot of potential though

SadisticFluttershy

SadisticFluttershy #2 · Dec 15th, 2015 · 1 · ·

Cute Story.

But oh my God the grammar is just... bad. Like, alot of readers would turn away from this due to them. In which of course there'll always be errors but when they're noticeable, fix them!

This story though imo, was rushed insanely bad.
Do you have any proof readers???
On the bright side though, this story alone has the potential to be a multi chapter story and not a one shot.

The other thing though was that, you made things too obvious. The title gives it away and makes the term secret crush non existing and irrelevant to this story because it has no value or uniqueness.

Color Nova

Color Nova #3 · Dec 15th, 2015 · 1 · ·

Why are you making aj sound evil

Nightmare mare

Nightmare mare #4 · Dec 15th, 2015 · 2 · ·

AJ is totally mean when it comes to relationships…anyway that was a AMAZING story

Dubs Rewatcher

Dubs Rewatcher #5 · Dec 18th, 2015 · · ·

How did this get approved with no description?

Toxic Spill

Toxic Spill #6 · Dec 18th, 2015 · 1 · 8 ·

Just another generic one-shot that's painful to read and barely squeaks past the minimum word count. This story shouldn't even be on this site; this is literally a tumblr-tier drabble.

Jimbo Saggins

Jimbo Saggins #7 · Dec 18th, 2015 · 1 · 8 ·

You can't even spell the word perfect.

Downvote

Nightmare mare

Nightmare mare #8 · Jan 29th, 2016 · 1 · ·

You should make a sequel where AJ finds out

brony448

brony448 #9 · Jun 9th, 2016 · · ·

need more of this chapters

Karakorum

Karakorum #10 · Jul 9th, 2016 · · ·

SS knitted into one of the corners

tightrope.cc/catalog/images/knit-cap-ss.jpg

I'm a terrible person.

ScisetShimmerEvan

ScisetShimmerEvan #11 · Nov 28th, 2021 · · ·

Fluttershy loved Christmas and it wasn't because she had less animals to take care of, oh no it was because this was the time of year everyone was kind to one another, well more than usual. But this Christmas Fluttershy had a special plan for someone, Fluttershy was going to get her big time crush a present and confess her love.

I feel the same when Christmas comes, especially to see many people with smiles on their faces.

"I... I made this for you" Fluttershy said very quickly her face was covered by her hair and from what Sunset could see she was bright red. Sunset took the box and opened the top, inside Sunset found a knitted lime green colour scarf with SS knitted into one of the corners in yellow string.

Very impressive fluttershy.

After the two left the back of the school they were met by the rest of their friends Rainbow Dash and Rarity had massive smiles on their face clearly Rarity had put two and two together and Rainbow well she was glad her best friend had finally confessed to Sunset but she was also glad that as soon as Applejack finds out about her and Pinkie she's going to get Sunset involved with the torment as well.

Proud of you fluttershy. 😊

Captain_Cosmos