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Mmmm... what a chapter, full'o feelingz...
A cup of tea makes the bad go away.
All these different reactions, life experiences, and how they make them act in this situation... fascinating.
Kudz, this was wonderful.
This... and scenes like when they were cleaning Trixie's wound, or the last few chapters of learning of the horrors the Diamond Dogs inflicted upon their people but that were over... That deep somberness, but one where what is needing to happen is happening, and you're pushing through the hurt parts to find healing, even if it's unpleasant, is one of the things this story does well that is absent from many others.
This exploration of what these fights do to people... But without this pessimistic idea that this will corrupt them forever. I don't get that sense from this, but that this is something that must be healed from anyway.
Edit: I removed a bit that felt uh... condescending.
Here
We
Go
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Where are we going? Do I need a coat? Should I pitch in gas money?
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Everything was great until the edit.
Was Octavia raped back in her city?
7553554 we're taking Tarnish to the rehab center!!
I doubt it, but why not?
And no, we're walking. .-.
I'll take the money anyways, though. :V
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No.
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But I'm not an alcoholic. Alcoholics attend meetings.
7553568 (accidently posted on a misclick.. revised comment)
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Oh I edited my post because I said something that felt condescending... hangon editing again.
7553572 I think it was fine as is.
Ya can't please everybody.
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If you just saw it, my phrasing at the end was "Edit: a bit condescending."
Which made it sound like I was accusing him of being condescending.
7553594 yu were editing your edit comment?
Gg, get rekt m8.
XD
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Funny thing is, there was a part in here that I deleted, because it sounded as though Octavia was being condescending to Twilight, and that just wasn't what I was going for. So, I read your post and it scared the shit out of me, because I thought I had fixed it. I went into full blown panic mode.
,,,,,, yeahp my body wasn't reayd XD
good chapta
It is because of writing of the sort found in this chapter that I consistently Favourite your stories. Your ability to convey emotion is... Truly, you cause anguish in my heart for these ponies.
I admit that in the past that I have been among those who posted, pleading with you not to follow such-and-such a route. With this chapter, I am reminded once again that I should trust you as a writer, that you have a sensitive touch that is equal to the challenge of your chosen subject matter.
TL;DR Five stars, would read again
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You weren´t kidding when you said Tarnish and Starlight wouldn´t ever get along, even after she got into the side of angels. I suspect Maud isn´t exactly found of her, either.
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And this goes along with part of the reason why a Warden paid Tarnish a little visit.
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Honestly, last time there was an argument about how I feel about the wardens... so I'm sorta loath to bring it up again...
But what you've said here seems to confirm my fears: that essentially the wardens are going to visit Tarnished because he has PTSD. That his PTSD, and, to be frank, his inability to not shrug off his trauma like it's nothing, makes him a bad person who deserves more emotional pain.
Or is it just his grudge with Starlight that does it? I guess what you said here was unclear, though.
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Grudge. Hatred.
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... Alright.
I'll keep my speculation to myself until the time actually comes.
Yeah, i can see why tarnish really doesn't like Starlight. Wonder if the other 3 came around.
Can I just state what many others have said that I love how your stories make us think?
Ok, these are the chapters I love. Seeing what goes through the characters' minds and how they react to it and how it affects others...can't wait for the next chapter.
And a lot of pieces from various chapters and stories all fall into place.
That's some poignant anguish.
**Slowly exhale**
The build up here is that GlimGlam is a Bad Pony (tm) who does REALLY Bad Things (tm). But somewhere in the next five years she and Twilight reconcile and become friends and master and student (as per over in Sumac's story). And thus, GlimGlam will become a Good Pony (tm). But I'm almost feeling that GlimGlam is going to have to do some serious work on the good side of things to make Twilight like her after this. I honestly wonder if Twilight actually has forgiven her? Friends are allowed to carry grudges against friends - nobody/nopony is perfect.
This will be interesting to see how this plays out.
You never cease to amaze me Kudz...and thank you for the warning in your blog post because I needed that to brace myself for this. I have to commend you for conveying the feelings and mental state of a mental/emotional abuse victim in a disconcertingly accurate way...
I'm going to go have some tea and read fluff for a bit to balance out all this angst and the philosophical conundrums
~Lady Sugar Violet Hooves & family
7553739 Why do the wardens need to visit, Luna is right there to be able to help him?
OK, something going on between Tavi & Spike we don't know about?
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- wat?
7554757 Just sayin!
Yikes. I think that calling what happened to Tarnish 'rape' might be going... not too far, but doing a disservice to what really happened. Tarnish was emotionally manipulated and his mind was effected. It is like... mind rape? I just feel that equating what happened with rape doesn't convey the right idea, but I literally have no alternate suggestion of how it should be conveyed. He WAS raped, but it I feel that most people reading equate that with a physical violation. Mind rape isn't a thing in this magicless world, just physical rape, but in Equestria the idea of rape might be a description of a wider type of violation. It just... I wish there was a way to convey what Tarnish went through that serves the heinous act he experienced. It's not exactly enough to say he was raped. It was mental violation. Mind-rape. Pretty horrific, and it puts a lot of Starlight Glimmer's feelings of needing to atone in other stories into perspective. She's done some REALLY BAD things.
Super great chapter, though. Heavy topic, and conveyed well and a wide range of character reactions to explore.
Damn this was good stuff. Thanks kudzu
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You will notice that never once in the chapter is the word 'rape' mentioned.
It is left entirely up to the reader to make a connection and fill in the blanks.
If it quacks like a duck and it walks like a duck, then it must be a...
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Something trying and failing to pretend to be Gosling?
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Who's a pretty pony?
Solid. A very solid chapter. Like, I can feel the density in it. I wouldn't worry about anything negative people might say, this was very impacting, and not just to Tarnish. There are things to be learned here.
Oh, do the pieces ever fit together...
So this one was a bit of a jolt, but it certainly does make sense, that it does.
7554971 mind rape is a thing in our magic-less world. I know people who have been tormented like that.
WELL GEE WHY THE FUCK WOULD THAT BE YA HEARTLESS BITCH?
Y'Know Kudz, I've been a fan of yours for a good long while. Been reading your stuff since about the time you released chapter 52 of The Chase; the wedding and following consummation of Bucky Beauregard Bitters, Derpy Hooves, Berry Bunch. I've noticed in a lot of your footnotes you have a consistent pattern of what you will say. It will either be: an excuse for delays relating to your own physical pain which makes me worry for your well being frequently, a pony emoticon, or something relating to breathing (which is starting to lead me to believe you have some sort of asphyxiation fetish). Just something interesting I wanted to share, keep up the good work friend.
7568084 Omake Idea! (Please keep in mind I never read PTSSFFF, so the characters might be a bit off.)
Tarnished looked at Starlight, unsure if he had heard right.
"Pardon?" he said "What did you say?"
Starlight looked like she regretted speaking, but she refused to let her will go weak "I asked you why you don't like me."
Tarnished blinked twice.
"Why don't I-" he sputtered before talking clearly and pissed off "Why would I like you?! You traumatized me!"
"Well, yeah, but-" Starlight backed off, surprised at the druid's outbursr "You know I had a reason! I know Twilight told you my story."
"What, the one where you started mind-fucking ponies because you didn't think to write to your crush?!" Tarnish shouted "Oh yeah! If that's not a good reason to traumatize somepony that was perfectly happy before you came along, I don't know what is!"
The sarcasm only made it worse, Starlight realized.
"Tell me, did you at any point just stop and think; 'hey, maybe I'm going a bit overboard'?
"No, you didn't, and everypony just forgave you! 'Oh sure, she was a horrible witch who tormented and stalked Tarnish and killed an entire village of Diamond Dogs, but we hang out a while and now everything's fine.'
"Well tough shit, it's not that easy. You almost made me a murderer, so you know what?
Fuck you, Starlight."
Tarnish said those last three words in absolute calm, before walking off to his family. Starlight, tears on her eyes, looked at him go.
(On hindsight, this is kinda harsh, but screw it.)
This is the story that Lauren Faust never told. These are the characters that Equestria never made home.
This is a world in a mirror; it is reality, yet it is fictional.
This is how you exceed expectations.
7810165 You nailed it.
I have greatly enjoyed Friendship is Magic, but I have always felt that it did not reach its full potential. The world it shows has vast potential that goes unused most of the time due to its nature as a "kids show" for lack of a better term. I think the Weediverse really captures what it could be with all restrictions pulled away; it shows off the potential of the characters and of the fantastic world that we only have just gotten a glimpse into.
It also has an insane amount of innuendo, which somehow fails to take away from the maturity that the rest of the story shows. That is an accomplishment in itself.
On an unrelated note, I got way too excited about ley-lines and thaumic energy flow and might have drawn up diagrams and defined some terminology, all describing how magic would flow cyclically like the water cycle or tectonic plates sinking and rising.
I really, really want to integrate this into a game in some format or another. Hopefully someday I'll have the opportunity.