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A clopfic that is barely a clopfic, but instead a decently written and well-structured story?
Cloperella could learn many things from this writer. Ha ha ha!
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The Weed, the story before this one, was rated T but the mods forced it to be rated M. It wasn't a clopfic. Neither is this. It just happened. It does deal with mature subject matter, I suppose. Both of them do.
7250487 Don't give a crap. Story is good stuff. Better than smoking pot.
Never actually tried pot, not gonna start it any time soon either, but ifI took people's word that it was indeed the 'good shit', then this story is my 'good shit'.
That means it's good to read, it's not shit.
Sorry. It's just hit midnight here and I'm too tired to make witty compliments. Look,your story is good, okay? What more do you ant from me? Sheesh!
7250487 AND your avatar is Derpy. This greatly pleases UniqueSKD.
*sigh* that poor dog... I hope they let him down. And here i thought Limestone actually wasn't taking heights badly... And she wants an airship!
7250500 welcome to super-happy-fun time reading! We have cookies, songs, and fun times! Enjoy your stay. it never ends.
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An airship is solid and sturdy beneath her hooves.
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extra space between 'step' and ','.
So far, it's all bark and no bite; a true shaggy dog story. But I don't have bone to pick with you.
7250576 ... touché
7250582 ?
"..had nothing to defend themselves"
Yeahp....... Well except for their inhuman physical strength that, at norm seems great enough to crack rocks and tear down doors in a town built by earth ponies to begin with.
Aaaaaaaaand trixy is leading them.
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And Diamonds Dogs bodies are natural weapons, not counting the weapons they do have and even if Earth Ponies are insanely strong, they aren't indestructible. Also the fact Diamond Dogs are strong enough to dig through the earth, and that includes any rocks in their way, at high speeds.
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You know, there is something called unreliable narration. Just because a character walks into a square room and says the room is a circle doesn't make it so. Under most circumstances, a reader sees this, accepts it as face value, and moves on. There is always that one though, that goes shouting in the comments, "THE ROOM IS SQUARE! CAN'T ANYBODY SEE THAT? WHY IS THIS WRONG! WHY!"
And everybody then sort of does this --> <-- all at once.
7251039 A writer communicates the rules and mechanics of their world through theri characters. Basically they describe the shape of the room through them before opening the door.
So you have your character saying the room is round here, and have no reason to think the room is in fact square (also i do not know how much you change the mechanics of each world between stories, and you gave them earth ponies the short end of the stick in some of them).
Though if he is not taking into account the raw strength of earth ponies despite his relationship with the very pony who showed the bronydom that yes, earth ponies has super strengths, then he is kinda having a brainfart here.
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Still, a character can make an assumption, especially on a subject they might not know much about. For Tarnish, he is literally doing something he has never done before, and has nothing to go by for reference. He's encountered one diamond dog, and she's nice. Harmless even. These are all details that an observant reader can take into account when assessing Tarnish's view of the situation.
While the idea of danger exists, he isn't familiar enough with the subject matter (diamond dogs) to make an accurate assessment. In this instance, the reader has more knowledge than the character they are reading about, and one has to be careful to see the world through the character, not the reader. I can't acknowledge what the reader knows, they don't exist in the story. I can only formulate what Tarnish knows, which is very little.
In this case, the room is round. But that doesn't make it true.
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I could've sworn the room was octagonal though...
7251117 That..... isn't exactly true. We do not quite know how diamond dogs are in your story here. EAch one has their own take.
For example, my take is that diamond dogs have a few similar attributes to earth ponies, kinda like a relation between griffons and pegasi. They ahve imilar strength and ahve claws, but earth ponies are tough and them charging someone down is like standing in front of a pissed of rhino.
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What I said is true enough to get the point across.
In this instance, Tarnish and the reader will be learning something together at the same time.
At first I was miffed that this ended on another partial cliffhanger, then I thought about it* and realized this is well paced to increase tension and suspense.
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That was my intention.
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Awesome new chapter~
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Tarnish: Yes. And other associated sensations as well. **Raises eyebrow.**
Very nicely done! I like the fact that a M rated fic just deals with mature topics not JUST clopping....Thank you!
I just spent the last 11 odd hours reading The Weed and this, and. I. LOVE IT! This is now the only Maud ship I will consider ever. I love the way you portray the Pie family much more than the show too.
This whole epic has hit me with so many feels, I can't even explain. I am a little disappointed that there's only two examples of fanart for this though, but oh well!
I applaud you on your (in my eyes at least) extremely awesome Weedverse saga!
That is all
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Thanks!
DAMMIT now I'm caught up with this TOO
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New chapter coming soonish.
Tarnish, don't you have a magic communication mirror? You could have called this situation in to the Princess, and potentially gotten reinforcements before storming a dozen diamond dogs with three ponies and a sword.
Interesting to see the sunfire barony (as we will come to know it), or part of it anyway, from a different angle
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I believe we have established already that Tarnished has moments where hes less then bright
also of all the ponies in equestria, lets face it trixie is at this point int he timeline the last pony that twilight would want to save, depending on weather the alicorn amulate has happend yet.
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Wrong area. This is much further south.