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Shovel was a credit to team. He will be missed.
I'm the best person when it comes to comparing writing styles. However, I can say I enjoyed your combat writing in this one very much. The action flowed, and I was able to follow who was doing what, when. It wasn't too much and it didn't get boring. Over all, I was happy with it.
Oh, and Maud, I really hope you didn't kick that one dog in his diamonds with the same force you throw rocks. There's offensive combat and then there's AAARRRRGGGGHHH!
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Eh, he likely didn't want to have puppies anyway.
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Right in the stones. Kerpow.
Agree with cogwheelbrain, exciting, smooth, not too complex, not too simple.
7258923 The family jewels were reked.
I liked this style, very nice.
A not overly complex battle sequence. Flows well too.
Well, no puppies for him.
Honestly, i can never tell when you do something different till it's to late for me to care. I prefer the Horus Heresy combat style but that is painful to write when you're not writing about Angels of Death and carnage. Plus it wouldn't work unless you have bloodshed and a big or at least leanthy fight.
I agree with cogwheelbrain too. I very much like your style.
As for Trixie, seems like she might have a broken leg. At least Maud and Tarnish have PLENTY of knowhow to help with that
At least there'll be less Diamond Dogs in Equestria, because that one is not making any.
I just hope poor Limestone isn't traumatized by that, that'd not be good, not to mention Igneous' and Cloudy's fury
All-in-all, a great addition to the Weedverse Saga! Looking forward to the next one!
This is a better way to write combat.
Buckminster is pleased with the deviousness of these ponies. Much pleased
Why would a diamond dog need a shovel to begin with?
7259030 if she really bucked him that hard i think he hip bones would ahve split in two.
I have to admit I think this is your best combat scene thus far. My one complaint with The Chase is that the story builds up repeatedly to these epic battles and they feel like they're over too fast and without enough detail put into them compared to the buildup itself.
This battle, while perhaps a minor one compared to that, reads well and I can visualize the flow of the action easily in my head. I look forward to more. Maybe you might want to consider applying the same style to your other stories too?
I'm getting a vibe of that one spoof hero movie that had the Shoveler and the guy that turns invisible only when he isn't bwin watched.
Not the most dangerous unicorn in Equestria eh Tarnish?
Hehehe, fronk... nice job man~
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Who said a diamond dog needs a shovel?
The ponies they capture might. Did you stop to think about that?
And a memorial shall be raised to the shovels that sacrificed themselves to the liberation of the innocent.
I really wish somepony would be like "It isn't violence. It's percussive maintenance of diplomatic relations."
7260007 Limestone is best Shovel Knight.
7260097 I love this idea!!~
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kind of implies its for the diamond dogs to use.
Well thats one dog thats not haveing puppys any time soon
7526333 Well, yes. Presumably they made it.
The combat writing was pretty good. A few more details and thoughts about his Tarnish's feelings might be nice.