Long story short, I went to a Convention; which was my first time; as Springtrap from FNAF 3 and some creepy guy called the Merchant forced some gray lenses on my eyes and the next thing I know was that I was in that Equestria as Springtrap. Why me?
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A displace Springtrap? Hmm lets see where this goes.
6293979 Well I hope this will end well for me.
6293991 Yeah
6293998 I know.
wow, another FNAF displaced. The FNAF gang is really coming together now. First with Sir Freddy the Golden!, and then with Freddy Fazbear and Friends' Displaced Adventures in Equestria. All we're missing is Balloon Boy, and the Puppet, and then we'd have a displaced of each type of animatronic (not including the replicas of the original 5, like the toys or phantoms).
Also, as a word of advice, this really hurt reading. I'll track it, wondering what the story will be, but my suggestion is, don't have the story go by so fast. Your character didn't freak out at all, or didn't react. He just acted like this was a normal day for him. You could possible have something like; 'Oh god! What the hell happened to me! I'm going to be sick!' But that's just my advice, you don't have to follow it.
more plz
6294029 Thank you for the advice and I don't mind but if this happend in real life, I would mostly stayed calm since I had to do that a lot in my life. Besides I didn't really know how I should describe my reaction. But if it would be alright then could you give me some advice when something needs to be changed?
6294041 I try to be as fast as I can.
6294068 no just take your time to make a new ch
6294073 Ok but expect that the chapters aren't going to be long.
6294085 ok
I just noticed something.
When he wakes up in the forest it is exactly like when in my displaced story, The Metal Condition, wakes up, don't believe me? Click on my avatar and you can find the story on my page.
That aside, this is an interesting set up and I will follow this story and give you some advice for each chapter if I can.
6294236 Thank you and I read all chapters you have made so far.
AWESOME!!! Can't wait to see more awesome chapters, keep up the good work!!
Someone else using Sprigntrap... Hmm. I'll give it a read before casting judgement...
6295045 I am unimpressed. The writing and the grammar are rough, the guy got Displaced in the exact same way as one of my own (hell right down to the exact item purchased!) and there's multiple misspellings scattered around it. I'd suggest getting an editor at the least, to help with some of that.
Nice chapter and things are getting interesting. I would suggest that before you publish a chapter that you read over it to spot any mistakes or find an editor if you can. If not then just be a little more vigilant when it comes to grammar.
6312111 Ok. Thank you. But how do I get an editor?
6312124 there are groups that specialise in editing, I don't use an editor myself but if you were to look up 'editors' in the groups page you should find a decent number of willing groups.
6312180 Thank you.
oooh! more please!!!!!
6315883 The new chapter comes tomorrow, maybe.
6315905 YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!
sorry but i have to give a tiny bit of hate on you (im sorry) WHY DID YOU MAKE THE CHAPTER SHORT!?!!?!?!?!??!?!?!? wooh got that out of my system
6316300 Also please dont hate me
6316305 Why should I? But most of my chapters are going to be short so don't be surprised.
6317369
"HANDS!" Screamed someone and I barely dodged my attacker, which was a mild green unicorn and had a harp tattoo on her ass (if i was a human lyra) HOOVES! (lands on lyra)
more please!
... Uh...wow...that was...awesome...get me some popcorn and a coke, I'm gonna be here a while
6333989 You really found that awesome?
6333995 dude, this is the first story that has springtrap punch nightmare bonnie in the face, I am pretty sure that deserves my like
6334070 ...YES!
6333989 Oi dont forget me i'll have a big mac some coke with that as well and dont forget the fries
6319957 I KNEW UNICORNS WERE REAL!!!
shining armor got wrecked hahahahaha good story tho
6374951 Thanks
I require more chapters. Great story, btw
6390239 Thank you for the compliment.
Um...was that Metals Token at the end there?
6534671 ...Maybe?
6534694 is that why there hasn't been an update?! Did I promise a crossover?!
6534719 No. I had no idea for the next chapter, forget to tell you about that and to be honest, I thought leting you write that crossover since you're better in that.
more plz
6545036 Why I haven't updated in a while was because I had a bit writer's block and school got in the way.
6545314 no worries man, I gotcha covered
I'll send you a gdoc so you can view how it's going
You are still up for Springtrap and Metal meeting right?
6545802 Of course I am.
6560279 You got that right buddy.
Can I point out something really quickly?