I had a good life if you ask me. A loving and caring mother, a good father, a older Brother I always could count on and lived in a good house. So why me? Oh I forget to introduce myself. I'm not proud of my name but my name is Dominic Duerr, I know it sounds funny so you can laugh, I don't mind at all. I remember that an old classmate of mine used to call me Domination, you can propably guess why but I'm geting Off-topic.
Anyways it had taken a while but I finally got the courage to ask my parents if I could go to a Convention. Hey I'm only 16 so don't say anything. Anyways they said that I can go but only with my Godparents and they said yes. I wanted to go as Springtrap of FNAF 3 so I tried to make a costume of him and to be honest, it turned out well. I was surprised by that afterall I'm usually not good at things like that.
When we finally arrived, I couldn't believe how big that Convention was. You see it was my very first one and I wanted to know if a Convention something for me is. And it was until at point some creepy guy waved towards me. I ignored him at first but was starting to get annoyed by that old man. I finally went over to him and he talked like a nice guy but I had a bad feeling about him. I always never trusted by first sight when I didn't know them but that something normal. Anyways I wasn't really paying attention to him until he said something that he had something that could fit to my costume. He then pulled something out that was nothing exciting or what I would need anyway. It was a pair of gray lenses. I don't need glasses anyway and why gray? He said that they would make my eyes look more like Springtraps but I said no. I don't waste my money on something I would use only once but he didn't shut up about that. He continued to annoy me with that and I said that I don't want them. He said I could test them before I buy them and before I could decline that offer, he forced them on my eyes. Luckily he didn't hurt my eyes. As I was about to yell at him, everything around me began to spinn before all I could see was darkness.
When I woke up, I found myself near an entrance of an forest. I rubbed my head because of that stupid headache I got but when I touched my head, I heard some kind of metal clank. Looking at my hand, I saw it colored in a greenish-gold and was made of Metal. Not wanting to believe what I saw, I looked around to find a Lake nearby and ran towards it as fast as I could. I got there faster because of my new body size. It's hard you know, being 16 and People think you are a child because of your body size. Atleast I don't have to deal with that anymore. Anyways when I looked in the Lake, instead of seeing my face I saw the face of Springtrap. I walked closer and saw that my entire Body looked like his. I think I saw some of the organs of Purple Guy alias Vincent when he died in that suit. I opened the mouth of the mask and even the dead head was there. If I could throw up then I would have at that moment. I fast closed the mouth and shuddered at having that Head in me. I would be alright with the organs but not with that. I let out a sigh and looked around, to see if there was a town nearby where I could ask if they knew this Land.
After a few minutes I saw one that was actually close. I don't get how I could oversee that. I know they would be scared if they see me but it was worth the try. I slowly walked to it, taking everything around me in. As I got closer, I saw a few people. Well I wished it were. In reality it were horses or what were they by that size? Ponies? I dunno. What surprised was that they were multicolored. Each one of them had a color of the rainbow. Actually they had all kinds of colors. A few were normal, a few had horns and there were some with wings. What were they called again? Unicorn and Pegasi? I guess that was it. Anyways as I got closer, I got more nervous. I mean, who would know how they would react. They would think I'm a freak only because I look a Zombie-animatronic. And I was right. Most of them gave scared looks, not that I blame them. Some gave me dirty looks, which is a bit too much if you ask me. But all did the same, they ran into their houses and hide.
As I turned around to leave, a purple blast or whatever that was flew past me. Looking behind me, I saw a group of six ponies running towards me. Well one was flying. There were two normal, two with wings, one with a horn and one with both a horn and wings. Orange, cream-yellow, pink, sky-blue, white and purple. Those were the main colors of them. Funny, one of them is purple. Reminds me of a certian serial killer. The sky-blue one, which had a mane? that was rainbow colored and rushed at me. By the speed, I thought I met this worlds Sonic the Hedgehog. Skittles, yes I gave her that nickname, was still flying at me and I barely dodged her attack and landed on my back. As I stand up, I was hit by that purple beam and again I slowly began to see only darkness. Before I closed my eyes, one final thought ran through my head.
Why Me?
wow, another FNAF displaced. The FNAF gang is really coming together now. First with Sir Freddy the Golden!, and then with Freddy Fazbear and Friends' Displaced Adventures in Equestria. All we're missing is Balloon Boy, and the Puppet, and then we'd have a displaced of each type of animatronic (not including the replicas of the original 5, like the toys or phantoms).
Also, as a word of advice, this really hurt reading. I'll track it, wondering what the story will be, but my suggestion is, don't have the story go by so fast. Your character didn't freak out at all, or didn't react. He just acted like this was a normal day for him. You could possible have something like; 'Oh god! What the hell happened to me! I'm going to be sick!' But that's just my advice, you don't have to follow it.
I just noticed something.
When he wakes up in the forest it is exactly like when in my displaced story, The Metal Condition, wakes up, don't believe me? Click on my avatar and you can find the story on my page.
That aside, this is an interesting set up and I will follow this story and give you some advice for each chapter if I can.
6294029 That being said, take any freak out realistically.
I can't even begin to count how many times a freak out ended so over-the-top I had to physically step away from the story.
One Nitpick I Have Is That You Called William Afton "Vincent", A Name Long Since Dissociated With Purple Guy.