I like SCP, FNAF, Mlp, BaTIM, D&D and Undertale. I use Grammarly a lot and I am solo author with 1 crossover so far.
This is the story of 4 friends who end up as the four animatronics in the alleyway in the FNAF pizzeria simulator. This story was inspired by the tweet I found about that there might be a new FNAF movie coming out in 2020 and it was also inspired by my friend fnafdragon.
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/491719/a-fnaf-displaced-story-rewrite
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9/10!
Grammer could use a bit of work, but overall a nice story!
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Thanks I am going to bed now.
Thanks gotta keep the spirit of FNAF alive in this fanfiction. Because most people gave up but I still keep going and I really like this, please keep going I like where this is going so far.
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Thanks for the motivation, but you were the one who inspired me to make a FNAF book.
Seems interesting. I feel like FNaF 6 is underrated.
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Ok then, but I will still write about it.
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It’s a compliment. I like FNaF 6.
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oh sorry, many people say that because they think FNAF 6 is bad.
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I think overrated is the word? I thought underrated was more nice than the other.
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sorry, I thought you said overrated I think I need more sleep.
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You’re fine.
Usually, when it comes to naming a chapter, its a quote the character says later on, or a reflection of the focus of the chapter.
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Meh, and ok I will use that in future chapters.
You forgot a ".
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Thanks!
Pathetic warning. Really. We not children.
I wouldn't use the red text when describing the blood, kinda ruins the scene, along with the "warning". I feel like the past was really fast and that fourth wall bit made no sense.
Once again, feels extremely rushed. You can always go back and fix things. The characters suddenly getting weird powers feel really put there. Like no sense out there. I suggest if you rewrite this chapter is to explain how they get their powers and such. Hell you could spend a chapter or two on the powers themselves. I can understand how you wish to keep this story on FimFiction due to the whole, if there's no ponies, begone thing, but at least fresh things out and make them make sense.
I really want to like this story, I do. But it feels like your forcing things to happen and they feel unnatural and unnecessary at times. You have a wonderful idea and cast of characters so far but it really needs to stop feeling pushed. Especially the times your forcing the token thing. Most author's are past their first displaced arc to send out tokens, or they meet another displaced who suggests them to make one. The second chapter in feels way to fast.
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It was rushed and I am trying to slow down the pace. Please forgive me.
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Don't rush things, it usually leads to the work translating weirdly. Bit as I've said before, I do want to like the story. And you've chose on hell of a hard crossover. So good luck.
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How did you know I was doing a cross over?
Wha-buh HUH!? WHAT JUST HAPPENED!
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Crossovers are op!
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Oops sorry for the typo.
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Np
hay when will the next chapter come out?
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Around this month.
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Because I work on my stories only when I have time.
Nice twist dude.
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Thanks
Is the title kinda racist-
Let me see... Oh the “BLACK” creatures. Well I didn’t mean for this to be racist.
? The reason why I follow the story was cuz the interesting thought of a story with the abilities of four characters
I'm not sure if I'll follow if it's with other characters
ok, give me time to re-consider, I just have a lot of things on my mind.
The rewrite is deleted!?
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Kinda? I started to write it and then I got a few cold feet, writer's block, and I overall got a little shy. Maybe one day I will write the rewrite and post it. But who knows?
Springtrap is scrap trap in fnaf 6
Ok nightmare_me I really want more of this story but here's a piece of advice spring trap is scrap trap in pizzeria simulator spring trap got damaged by the fire in fnaf 3
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This is fanfiction, the exact place you go when you want to see alternate universes. However, even though you are right, Springtrap has a better ring to it.
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