Epilogue
Sweetie Belle had made her way home just in time, just before Rarity had returned. Luckily the door was unlocked, so getting in wasn't too difficult for the little unicorn. She still wore the crown, but just as Rarity came in to check up on her, she was putting it back down where she'd gotten it from.
"Well, looks like it's all resolved now. No more wings I see!" Rarity said gleefully.
"Yep, and I suppose we'll ship this crown back to Princess Celestia, huh?"
"Yes, I'll take care of that." And with that crown went Sweetie Belle's day as an alicorn, but in the end, she got two new friends out of the ordeal. Friends that she needed to keep secret, sure, but one of them was one she'd sought to gain for a very long time. Tomorrow would come, and Sweetie Belle and her friends would be bothered yet again by Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon as usual. However, during recess that day, Sweetie Belle would sneak to the back of the school where nopony played, and meet up with Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara once again. For the longest time they'd meet there day after day just so that Sweetie Belle and Silver Spoon could see each other again and again.
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The description doesn't really represent the contents all that well. Picture and romance tags feel misleading for anyone coming in expecting some adorable three-way romancing. Still cute as short Silver-Belle stories go, but it just didn't go far enough in my opinion.
Liked everything leading up to the jacuzzi though. Pretty solid.
A sweet little story, I loved it
6114076 I see what you mean with the desc. Went ahead and edited it so that it matches the story a little better. Thanks!
This is...
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A series of plot points without the plot. "Sweetie Belle becomes socially powerful. Sweetie Belle leverages her power against her bullies. ??????. Sweetie and Silver are in love."
That was a fun and cute read. I could see Sweetie Belle doing what she did if she ever had the powers of an alicorn princess for a day. Anyway, there were a few typos I noticed. I'll draw from a few examples I noticed in the second chapter:
I think you meant "here" instead of "her" in this instance.
In this passage, "what's" should be "that's" here.
And one more thing I wanted to mention, which also occurred in the second chapter:
While there's nothing technically wrong with this sentence, I bet you could add a little more pizazz to it. Maybe show Diamond Tiara panicking by mentioning her body language, having her stutter or gasp, and so on instead of just mentioning from the start she was panicking. I think such a tweak could help in some places in the story such as the passage above, but that's my own opinion. You're more than welcome to disagree with my suggestion.
Also, maybe you could extend the story in the future if you ever felt like it. Maybe Sweetie Belle causes more shenanigans as an alicorn. Or perhaps we could learn more about her new relationship with Silver Spoon. You're more than welcome to keep it as is, however.
Anyway, I found the story cute, funny, and worthy of an upvote. Keep on writing, and I wish you the best of luck on your future projects!
6114437 Yeah, I had thought about extending the story, but I was going for a chaptered oneshot. And it's been awhile since I've been in the game. Kinda rusty, so you'll have to forgive me if the describing of things is a little lackluster.
6114412 Wasn't it magnificent?
6114477 It's okay, and I understand why you'd want to keep it as a chaptered one-shot. Still, you did a fine job on this story despite being a little rusty at the moment. I hope your future writing projects all go well!
6114322 Looks good. And forgot to mention but I love the new avatar. Bunnyjack. Makes me wonder if there's an AJ dresses up as Angel in order to cheer up Fluttershy or maybe AJ losing a bet to Fluttershy xD
Well, that was certainly an interesting read if nothing else. Fun, but ultimately felt like a lot of story was missing, or fluffy porn without any actual porn. But I digress, have a like.
I just read the description and I can already tell this story ain't gonna end too well
This is probably my fav Sweetie Belle story i read so cute !
Nice one. But i was kind of waiting for the next day of school for alicorn sweetie bell. Or a spell that took longer then a few hours to undo.
6116073 And you have received four (4) in return.
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Cute but I have to agree with 6114412 , especially near the end where Diamond Tiara and Sweetie become instant friends even though sweetie threatened to send her to the moon.
6117382 I had considered just making it all a dream... perhaps that would've been better after all.
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I have to agree, I just don't see Sweetie Bell hanging out with those two while they still hate AB and Scoots.
Awesome story!!
6117717 I think it would've been fine if Diamond and Silver made an attempt to, you know BE BETTER PONIES, but they really aren't. They're gonna keep harassing Apple Bloom and Scootaloo, and Sweetie Belle's not gonna even stand up for them because they're "friends." and basically being a double agent.
Yeah, don't mind that your new friends are possibly causing emotional damage to your current friends at all. It also really irks me that Sweetie only giggles when they flat out say it's gonna continue. There's nothing funny about that, even remotely. This is just REALLY out of character for her to not stand up for her friends.
I loved the story, and I loved the fact that SB is a secret friend with Silver, freaking OTP there