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Roranicus


The adventures of Shadowdark the alicorn shouldn't have to wait for a passing grade in english class!

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When Radiant Wish learns she's pregnant with a colt, she and her husband, Cloudshaper, are ecstatic. Every parent wants what's best for their children, so rumors of a village where everypony is accepted as equal piques the couple's curiosity. How great would it be to raise a foal without fear of adversity? Starlight Glimmer, the village mayor, seems like a nice pony, but the price of equality is great. Can Radiant make such a sacrifice?

Proofreading and typography by Derpypaws
Artwork by Nekotigerfire

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Comments ( 51 )

Wasn't bad, but wasn't good either.

This is a truly sad story. It is a shame that Equestria doesn't have LASIK for Cloudshaper.

5849794

Haha, it would have made things simpler, wouldn't it.

You know, I must read this later. This is the first really unique concept for Glimmer's Marksism that i've seen on this site (I'm silently judging you, all you Glimmer clop stories that popped up within an hour of the episode). And just ignore Starla. Even when he/she makes a nice sounding comment, they always mean it in the worst way.

5849801
Thanks, I definitely wanted to try a different approach. Seeing the episode made me think each of those background ponies must have a unique story on how they ended up in the village. I hope you enjoy the story.

this was a great story, It is interesting to see the effects of the equal mark on handicap pony. this was, in my opinion a slightly different teak of the town.

5849829
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it :)

5849799 Yeah it would have, it would have made it way too easy.

5849574 Um, you're not helping.

Explain please.

5849574
5850250
So often… half decent?

~SquiggleSquiggle~

5850250
Explain to you? You aren't the one who wrote it, kek.

5850306 No need to be a dick, kek.

Kinda wish this had an epilogue, after the events of the episode of course.

5850546
I thought about it a bit, thinking what would happen to them after, but I decided I prefer to leave it as a mystery. I would imagine they both stay in the village and live happier lives after the events of the episode. I also left exactly when the story take place intentionally vague, so we don't know how long before season 5 this takes place. For all we know, Starlight has been running this community for a decade.

This was a fun, twisted read - I like it.

5851380 Would you be interested in some discussion on things?

5851384
What do you mean?

5851395 A discussion, we talk about themes of Starlight Glimmer, her town, the = cutie marks and other things related to it like your story.

5851421
I'll be happy to answer any questions you have, lol.

5851459 It's not really questions but alright, I admit that I'm still interested in the idea of Starlight and this village of hers with all sorts of things present that are just up in the air for us to interpret.

What do you think about the character and the concept behind her village?

5850501
Sorry, I don't conform to hugbox communities. I do as I please. Plus, all I said was it wasn't bad, nor good. Which would place it average, why is people coming into defense when I literally said nothing that was being a dick, now my reply that you replied too is the only thing so far, but, that doesn't answer the previous question.

Just a little heads up that while I don't mind people giving negative feedback, pretty much any hint of flaming other users will just make me block people. :)

5851475
Only thing I have to say about it that hasn't been said a gazillion times is that there was nothing political about the concept. The episodes were about celebrating differences, even if your friends like things that you don't. The soviet union references were definitely fun for adult fans, and I had a lot of fun playing around with the concepts here. In the end though, MLP is still a family show. If you think back about kids in playground, they often judge anyone who's different. This is what this episode was about.

5851619 I see

Ever wonder how things could of gone if Fluttershy never found out Glimmer's secret?

5851526 Jesus fuck I was asking for you to explain why you think the story was average, to say what could be improved and such. Being an asshole in the comment section of this story, refusing to say anything mature or helpful is just, well, idiotic.

Also, this is all I need to show how you were being a dick.

Explain to you? You aren't the one who wrote it, kek.

I do as I please.

5852267
I've blocked him, please don't continue with this flame war.

I didn't think she would assimilate, but Starlight does drive a hard bargain.

5852565
If everypony's equal, how can one resist when the others did not? :moustache:

Starlight Glimmer, "I am the solution."

5851376

Glimmer, "All come around sooner or later. Some just take longer to break than others."

5878259 You weren't able to break the Mane Six.

5878438

"All it take is time."

5878496 "So you're saying that you didn't have enough time?"

5878579

That would be Glimmer's argument.

Keep a pregnant mare, BY HERSELF? Starlight crosses a line.

The powerful thing here is Starlight SHOWS how effective her methods are.

5880808
Thanks, it's definitely what I was going for, show how average ponies would get converted to her ways.

Wow! You are fantastic at pacing the story, the plot progression was done very well! I can definitely take notes from something like this. Also, the main characters were written very well. It was easy to care for the characters. I really enjoyed it, great job!

6332632
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. If you have the time, you should check out my main story, A Dream of Sunny Days too.

6332639 Mhm, I'm definitely adding it to my read later list.

Every now and then it's good to read a dark fic to take you out if it.

6471509
I agree, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

This was amazing!!!! It sent chills up my spine! What a cool concept. It was executed so well and is very believable. 10/10 thumbs up! :pinkiehappy:

6752389
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :pinkiehappy:

Sweet Celestia! I want to bucking murder Starswirl or whatever her name is!:flutterrage:
Thank you for such a well crafted story with extremely believable characters.:pinkiecrazy:

7068766
haha, thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :pinkiesmile:

"Let's go home"

Don’t get used to it, Princess Sparkle Butt and company are a-coming. :pinkiecrazy:

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