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Alex Warlorn


Just your average Brony who happened upon an idea that might actually turn out to be clever enough for guys to love.


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While this story includes several dark fics, the idea is to give the happier ending then they had in canon, so it's kinda the inversion of dark.

This is a record of other pony fanon worlds visited by Amicitia, aka Alicorn Princess Twilight Sparkle that came to a bad end. And her attempts to nudge things to a brighter future. Can she do it without crossing the line? And the spirit of tragedies lies in the background, determined to punish Twilight for her meddling. Set in the Pony POV Series verse.

Written as a group effort over on deviantart, this group story was written by several authors, I just helped compiled them together.

Anyone can write one.

Amiticia's rules:

1) She can not 'assume direct control' of anyone under any circumstances.

2) She can not physically manifest unless it can be passed off as a hallucination or trick of the mind, and may NOT physically meddle.

3) If a deity who is not native to that universe has already intervened or taken part in things, Amicitia can perform much more blatant miracles to help others.

4) She can manifest as a pony's 'shoulder angel', conscience, voice of reason, voice of courage, voice of inspiration, what have you to others at critical moments. (She's able to bend this rule a little when it's that reality's Twilight Sparkle she's speaking to since she's speaking to herself.)

5) She CANNOT give information that person couldn't logically know.

6) She can speak more directly to the pets (Gummy, etc), but they CAN NOT act out of character, nor can they give information they wouldn't logically have or act in ways that don't make sense in story.

7) If something has been established as how the laws of magic or physics works in that world, Amicitia CAN NOT change it.

8) Amicitia can arrange things behind the scenes that are improbable, but NEVER impossible.

9) Amicitia once provided Applebloom and Sweetie Belle in the Friendship is Oppression verse an anonymous vision to inspire them to find the Element of Chaos, she is strictly forbidden from helping that world further under penalty of violence.

10 )Above everything, it must be like from the story's own narrative that Amicitia was not there at all, like a ghost. (Like how REAL ninja made a point of no one knowing there WAS a ninja.)

11) If Amicitia become an Insert (for example, appears, hands Applebloom the Master Sword when Bloom cornered by zombies, or blasts the zombies to ashes herself), the Blank Wolf of that timeline will erase everything she's done and she can not try again.

12) TL;DR Amicitia can not break the suspension of disbelief, create a plot hole, violate anyone's free will, or make it seem like she was there at all from the perception of the characters or the narrative.

Detailed version here: http://alexwarlorn.deviantart.com/journal/World-Building-110-Rules-For-Amicitia-517248800

Covert art by leffenkitty.

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 200 )

Sounds fun I'll have to read it later no time now.

Are you going after just Grimdark Worlds or are others on this chart also targets?

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Dark and Bright describe the Setting. Grim and Noble describe the Characters.

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THANKS!
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Stories that came to an rather clear unhappy ending. Basically stories where the heroes act like sociopaths or psychopaths and are those characters only in name or rather, only have their OUTWARD traits. (Sure Twilight is a science nerd, but she wouldn't vivisect her friends' souls 'For science.')

This sounds awesome. This si something I have been doing myself for ages!!!

But I have to ask, if I wanted to submit one, does it have to be Deviantart? I was sort o banned there and can't really do anything beyond reading and looking up awesome art.

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Technically the second section is there already in progress.

But if you want to do one, just write it in the comments section here.

http://alexwarlorn.deviantart.com/art/Pony-POV-MORE-Amicitia-Light-visits-to-Grim-Worlds-522027912

That's the second part of this, still in progress. Feel free to write your addition here, and I'll add it.

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So yes, you can submit your addition here if you want.

7) If something has been established as how the laws of magic or physics works in that world, Amicitia CAN NOT change it.

Physics I understand but why magic? She's the Concept of Magic; her will is what magic IS.

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Yes, but it wouldn't make sense within the story itself if the rules of magic suddenly change from what they were before.

Your first one is obviously one of the Rarity serial killer tales, where Rarity basically goes insane out of frustrated loneliness and starts killing Ponies (which, yeah, pretty much would take demonic influence, as Rarity is normally optimistic and willing to try hard to achieve her ends, and also has morals). I may have actually read some of it (the bit about her skinning Ponies to make a composite Pony sounds familiar) but I forgot the name.


The second one is Eternal Game (?), which actually doesn't so much show the Ponies in a really bad light as give them a terribly-tragic background in which Celestia and Luna were spawned and raised by mad, sadistic demon-gods, tried hard to make Equestria a better place than its past had been, and then with the Mane Six had to deal with the return of the demon-gods (principal of which was "Titan," appropriate as the demon-gods acted a lot like the Greek Titans). That actually had a happy ending! Well, sort of ...

Saving the Prince's life does make that outcome less dark. Still a dark victory, but not as utterly grim.

One thing I did like were the shard-swords. Though realistically, given the limits on Unicorn telekinesis we've seen for most Unicorns on the show, only a few mages would be powerful enough to effectively wield them.


My Little Balladeer without John showing up to oppose Thorn. Nasty possibility.

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That part with the prince was my suggestion to the author.

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The fanfic where she creates a frankenstein monster who kills himself soon after being awakened, and murdered Pinkie Pie who rises up as a revenge happy ghost.

Will you do Cupcakes and or the Rainbow Factory?

5847834 I think he already dealt with those in the Dark World epilogue/finale.

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You know i have never seen this chart before. I just always thought there was Grim Dark (which was started by 40k with the whole In The Grim Darkness Of The 41st Millennium thing), and Bright Nobel, which was suppose to be its opposite. By this definition to be honast, i would classify most of 40k books as Dark Nobel.

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Now I imagine the rather DISTURBING Grim Bright worlds like Friendship is Witchcraft.

5847634 Your first one is obviously one of the Rarity serial killer tales, where Rarity basically goes insane out of frustrated loneliness and starts killing Ponies (which, yeah, pretty much would take demonic influence, as Rarity is normally optimistic and willing to try hard to achieve her ends, and also has morals). I may have actually read some of it (the bit about her skinning Ponies to make a composite Pony sounds familiar) but I forgot the name.

I remember that story as 'Prince Charming'; I forget the name of the sequel, however. And I wonder if anyone else noticed in the ending it got here that it occurred in a world where Cadence stayed a pegasus and never became an alicorn?

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Where everything is superficially cheerful but actually the characters are insane and monstrous?

Alex, I have been away from the POV stories for awhile and need to catch up. But, I have greatly enjoyed the series. I even commented on the ascendance chapter where Twi did a short tour of a few famous gore fictions. However, I don't feel currently up to 'discovering' any new ones. Even though this series is expressly meant to redeem those stories, my choice to read those original dark fic's was due to me being in a bad place in life. I don't think I can repeat it enough, the ascendance chapter helped a great deal more than I think I understood that I needed.

I might come back later and read these out of loyalty to you, But right now I'm not comfortable revisiting such a vulnerable time for me.

Woot for the Immortal Game, one of the best stories out there, along with Alex's POV series and a few others.

Is there a chance of you doing Breaking Twilight?

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I didn't write most of these. The POINT is for anyone who wants to is for them to write Amicitia figuring out a way to help give the story a better ending.

Are you planning on doing Twilight's Inferno?
5847705 Where can I find that story?

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I never read it that inferno story. And due to the plot holes in that story, I really have no desire to find that creepy Rarity is a murderer story again.

The Immortal Game FTW

Please do Breaking Twilight or ask the author about it?

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That said, it WOULD make sense for her to instinctively know what those rules are.

Same logical reason, she IS magic.

the equal size dormitories seems wrong to me. Because treating each family of ponies equally is not treating each individual pony equally

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I actually didn't write that part. You made a fair point.

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I saw. You know, I came up with three possible endings that built off the "canon" one (won't reveal what that is). If you're interested, I can type them up in a PM.

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We're talking about Breaking Twilight, remember?

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I remember. I just hope you like the alternate that the others came up with.

You know, I'm starting to feel sorry for Dues. I mean her heart is in the right place, she just needs to slow down and reaquire Twilight's habit of double checking her assumptions and triple checking her logic. Stop thinking with just her heart and then she can stop handing over whole world lines over on a silver platter.

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Which is sort of the point. Deus Ex Machina AREN'T well thought out. But I'll admit, feeling sympathy for someone who IS only trying to help only for it to keep exploding is something I can relate to.


Nyarlathotrot chuckled and shook his head. "I am amazed that you have such a poor understanding of those who's fates you decide, Rota. No one has ever accused you of having favorite worlds or timelines. They accuse you of having favorite MORTALS. You say everyone gets good ends, bad ends and even neutral ends they can work towards. And no one denies that. But if you compare ponies.... Twilight Sparkle, for example, surely had a huge amount of fates where she is the greatest hero of Equestria or a ruler of great skill. And she has less, but still a lot, of ends where she dies heroically or becomes a tyrant. But how many ends does she have where she settles into a role as a librarian? Or after freeing Luna she returns to Canterlot, becomes a magical researcher and keeps in touch with her friends via letters? Where she is an essence just a background pony."

"Now compare her to that pony," he said pointing to Equalist Princess Flower Wishes/Daisy, "How often is she the hero Equestria needs? How often is she the doom of it all? How often is she just a pony who sells flowers and lives in a town with heroes in it?"

For some reason this part wasn't in the chapter, THIS is what Rota Fortuna was retorting to.

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You know, I think you can still add this back into the chapter. Just unpublish, add/edit, and then republish. Just a thought.

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Actually I did here on fimfiction.net. It's just on deviantart, there's a text length limit, and putting it there puts it over that.

So when are they gonna pay a visit to the worldline that is Fallout Equestria?

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I've never read Fall Out Equestria.

Have you?

If you feel like writing one go ahead.

But what alteration to reality can Amiticia make that make sense in universe to prevent the war? How COULD the war have been prevented? How could disaster of been adverted?

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I'm not being sarcastic or ironic, I'm sincerely asking.

Pony POV Princess Twilight's Lightly visits to Grim Worlds

Not having read the Pony POV series, I had trouble parsing the title at first. To be clear: it's a complete present-tense sentence in sentence case, with subject "Pony POV Princess Twilight's Lightly", verb and preposition "visits to", and object "Grim Worlds" (proper noun, indicating a specific, formally-named region of the multiverse)?

Edit: Also, is this set after the yet-to-be-posted conclusion of Season 8: Finale?

So why exactly don't you like dark fics?

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"Not having read the Pony POV series, I had trouble parsing the title at first. To be clear: it's a complete present-tense sentence in sentence case, with subject "Pony POV Princess Twilight's Lightly", verb and preposition "visits to", and object "Grim Worlds" (proper noun, indicating a specific, formally-named region of the multiverse)?"

.... *goes over head*

Edit: Also, is this set after the yet-to-be-posted conclusion of Season 8: Finale?

No. It MOST DECIDEDLY takes place BEFORE.

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I can't stop others from liking them, just I like G3.

But they just make DEPRESSED. They carry the message 'don't try, don't fail.' The majority of these types of stories would be technically happier if the victim committed suicide on the first page, because the cosmic forces driving them to a bad end shall not allow them to escape. All the universe is their Cabin In The Woods.

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There's also a difference between a dark fic where it's dark because the characters are making evil choices and a dark fic where it's dark just because the universe is rigged to be hopeless, especially when it's made darker because the canon abilities and personalities of characters are ignored in favor of imposed tragedy.

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Nyarlathotrot, "Yeah, isn't it great?!"

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I was thinking specifically of my own His Recipe For Love. Nothing actually forces Harmonia Pie and Aventurine Miter to use their alchemical talents to make an immortality potion that requires horrible equine sacrifice. It's true, they might have aged faster and died younger if they hadn't -- but the mere fact that one knows a way to stay young by committing dreadful murders in no way either compels or justifies actually doing this. Their life story is Dark because that's how they CHOSE to live their lives.

It's also a love story, but again -- they could have loved one another without killing anypony.

Since Chance hasn't been mentioned in the Dark World and Reharmonized timelines, I'll assume she doesn't exist in them. In the timelines where she exists, was she born after Rancor?

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