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It was a a beautiful night in Ponyville. Twilight and her best friends are out sky gazing when suddenly a mysterious craft crash-lands in the Everfree Forest. The six ponies rush in and discover a crippled Dalek. Unknowing of the Daleks's evil nature they take the Dalek under their wings. With more Daleks on the way, a mysterious evil fobs watch, and no Doctor in sight, can Equestria survive the invasion?

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I had this idea, but I quickly discounted it as the worst idea ever. Fortunately, you haven't screwed it up too badly yet.
Also Firsts.

I kind of like how it's Fluttershy that falls for the Dalek's act like how Rose did in that one episode... but the writing could use some work, particularly the prose. Try fleshing it out some more to suck the reader in.

Given my last comment, I'm ashamed to say that it your story isn't nearly as bad as I had imagined. Pinkie's dialogue made up for the plot.

Might I ask what era of the Daleks are you using?

Hmmm. Looks good. I'll follow this story. Nice. You seem to have quite a few correctional comments here, telling how you messed up rather than how good it is. It's good.

[wants to help]:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

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What have the Mane 6 ever done to you?
Unless of course this is some type of parody Fanfic of the Daleks....

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"Your suggested changes have been helpful to the Dalek's. They will be implemented immediately"
Dalek Zek

I'm glad that jaked122 directed me to this:pinkiehappy:

Man, I love this story. Loving and tolerating the crap out of the Dalek is exactly what was needed.
Also I like the men in black reference. Good going so far, don't let any part of the story demand too much attention at once.

daleks don't usally have emotions and wouldn't plead for help but when they do they do it like this.:rainbowlaugh:

Pretty good story you got going here, interested to see where this is going! :pinkiesmile:

NECESSARY CHANGES IN FORMAT HAVE BEEN MADE. CONTINUE AS PLANNED.
Good chapter. I wonder what will happen when the Dalek wakes up to find that his armour has been painted pink.

THIS STORY HAS MAINTAINED A SUPERIOR LEVEL OF QUALITY.
Another good chapter. I had to laugh when I thought of Daleks in training school. Now we know that Dalek Zek has got something to prove and will stop at nothing to achieve his goals.

I feel bad for Zek, just a try-hard divergent, not that I have a problem with divergents.

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...wasn't going to do it, but just for you...

Some of the Dalek speech isn't very Dalek-y
But then again it may be part of the disguise

“Well what’s the problem then?” - "THEN WHAT IS THE PROBLEM" or at least get rid of the contraction
“Ah, I see. ..." - Useless sentence baggage designed for inferior social constructs such as politeness, though again this may be part of disguise

I typed this out in a hurry before work so I'm probably just stupid

MY ATTENTION IS SUSTAINED, HUMAN SUPERSTITIOUS CONSTRUCT

Once again, another great chapter.
I was worried when you mentioned the elements of harmony, they have the capacity to destroy any plot that is working in a certain way, fortunately, you did not nuke your plot with them. (the generosity force field is a nice touch by the way)

DALEK ZEK DISPLAYS COMMENDABLE INGENUITY. THESE PRIMITIVE LIFE FORMS DO NOT SUSPECT HIS TRUE INTENTIONS. CONTINUE WITH YOUR PLAN.
Once again, good chapter. Some may say that the Dalek is OOC, but he is trying to trick the ponies. After all...
"Deceit is second nature to Daleks. You haven't got an honest bone in your body. You haven't got a... bone in your body."
And thank you for using my idea of painting Zek's armour. Cannot wait to see his reaction.

I don't know if this has been mentioned, but unless Dalek Zek is a member of the cult of scaaro then he wouldn't have a name.

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Uhhhhhhhh i'm gonna have to think of something clever to explain the name.

the daleks don't have names and dalek mutants are grown from genetic material of radiated kaled flesh then shoved into a cramped polycarbonide casing given a unit number and rank and then deployed into battle to exterminate enslave and opress. but other than that it's great story, but the thought of a dalek sneaking around and eavesdropping made me laugh

THAT SON OF A B*TCH!! WHERE IS DA DOCTOR?!!!

"Actually we knew you were evil, so both were fakes!"

I was expecting Zek to say "Daleks have no concept of elegance" out loud.
Then Rarity could say "That is obvious."
Quite amusing, though I did notice spelling errors.

"His self" in the beginning should be "himself."
"Devros" should be "Davros."
"Armer" should be "armor."
"On Coming" should be "Oncoming."

Good job, cannot wait for more.

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Thanks for the help with spelling. I'm slightly dyslexic and this was written on an iPhone.

Dun Dun Dunnnn! Good job, Zek! The only way to ensure victory is to make sure the rules suit you.

I can't wait till when the elements of harmony don't care about the Daleks.

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I'm not sure what you mean

Pageing the Doctor. Pageing the Doctor. The Doctor to the E Wing please Dalaks on the loose. (Five Minutes of pageing later) Where in the F@CKING HELL IS THE DOCTOR?!:trollestia:

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shhhhhhhh your right, but i have to EXTERMINATE your comment to avoid spoilers. EXTERMINATE!

spoiler: Next chapter.
Fluttershy is DYING to meet Zek. :pinkiecrazy:

Please note that this will not be a clop fic, because that would be gross and this is a kids story. Also I don't think this kind of pairing has been done before.

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will be explained (hopefully) tomorrow.

The doctor will destroy the daleks

> “Um… I think I know something will shock her said Fluttershy.”
Whoops, better move that ending quote

> “She’s gone mad!” Yelled Applejack Pinkie Pie finds the bottle and drinks of it, and then pours the rest on his head.
Sigh. Let's see... Period after Applejack. Aaaaand either Pinkie is referred to as a he, or you need to say whose head the bottle was poured on.

This chapter made me giggle

Oh the poor dalek. Nothing in the known universe can explain pinkie pie. :pinkiehappy:

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