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Deathscar


You'd be surprised at the emotions twenty-six letters can unearth

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It's easy to overlook the kind and caring mailmare who goes about her job everyday. Almost nopony knows about her past for nopony has ever gotten to know her for more than a few minutes.

With a whole day free, Twilight Sparkle spends a day with Derpy as she goes about her daily routine. Eventually uncovering a past that nopony fully understood; not even Derpy herself.

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Author's Notes:
Just another 'Remembrance' type fanfiction I wrote for the mare everyone loves, Miss Derpy Hooves! I wrote it over the course of two very quick days so I definitely don't think its one of my best pieces. You can find the other parts of the 'Remembrance' series I'm undertaking below! So I hope you enjoy this fic and thank you for reading!
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Remembrance Series:

Fluttershy (and partly Rainbow Dash): http://www.fimfiction.net/story/19597/Remembrance-of-a-Dear-Friend

Spitfire: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/22927/A-Flier%27s-Inner-Fire
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Credits:

Art by Veggie55: http://veggie55.deviantart.com/

Huge huge credit to JohnPerry and TheEsperBrony for doing proofreads of this story!

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Comments ( 68 )

I can see you put your work into this. Nice little one-shot. I like this.

Awesome story! Pure gold! EQD worthy.

577030 Haha thank you but I definately don't think its up there yet. :)

Something what i thought was impossible happened..... Derpy became more lovable

ok ok im not gunna lie here i did tear up at the near end TwT in a sense derpy is really lucky she has the most purest of hearts and has somewhat the inablity to think ill of anypony she ever comes across, in the show derpy is soppose to be a colt if im not mistaken (since thats how the VA saw derpy) (hope in season 3 they make derpy a tad more feminine approach with the same antic and same voice if at all possible) i definitly approve of female derpster xP fantastic one shot :3 hope you write more someday with another pony or maybe more derpy :D insta-Faved

Wow! you get 5 derpys and 5 moustaches :derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Nice work! This story shows on how you can put so much emotion and care for a lovable cross eyed mare. five derps out of five!

577215 The limit to Derpy's adorableness does not exist

577250 Haha I'm glad you enjoyed it :twilightsmile: I have done similar stories for other characters too (Fluttershy and Spitfire). Do check them out in the description :pinkiehappy:

577983 Thank you! Here's five Flutteryays :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

578401 Why thank you! Here's a Pinkie Pie :pinkiesad2:

really? awesome ill definitely check them out xP

GREAT story, my only problem is your incorrect usage of "whose". Instead of "whose Dinky?" it should have been, "Who's Dinky?"

581814 Oops! Thank you for pointing that out! :twilightblush:

The ending was just so adorable, and thinking more about it is gonna make me cry, and I dont want that :fluttercry: but I adored the whole story. It was beautifully written and the pacing was great. May have to check out your other ones.

583557 Why thank you! If you like this story I think you'll like my other stories too :) I've written a Spitfire and Fluttershy fic in the same style ^^

577082
Submit it to EqD.

Trust me on this.

584065 Wow. Haha thank you but maybe I'll get a proofreader on it first? :) There are plenty of mistakes in there and I might try to iron it out before sending it in ^^ But thank you for your confidence in the fanfic. I wasn't originally going to submit but the faith of my readers convinced me otherwise :twilightsmile:

584082
I caught sight of this on a whim and read it. Derpy origin stories aren't really my thing(this coming from someone who threw in a bit of Derpy origin in his latest fic... hm. :applejackunsure: ), but this was well thought out and excellently executed. If you can iron out the small issues that I honestly don't remember, I'd think it'd pass no problem.

I mean, we've certainly passed worse...

584104 Whoa you're a pre-reader for EqD? :D Haha wow I'm pretty humbled by your praise ^^

584110
I liked your fic, what can I say? I can't be certain the others will be as impressed, but I do think you owe it to yourself to at least try. I'll put in a good word. Just get those little problems you mentioned ironed out and send it in!

584129 W-Wow! Thank you! I'll definately get a proof-reader on that ASAP :)

Deathscar i must say this has to be one of my favorite story i have read yet. i am now working on my first story i have made in years and i would like you to check it out if you could. Derpy is going to be in the story eventually but not till later. But you get a fav and a thumbs up +1:pinkiehappy:

oh and not going to lie this is a real tear jerker near the end, i was almost crying my eyes out:fluttercry:, Good Work

I'm sorry, but this has been bugging me for a while now, and no matter how many times I re-read this, I can't find the answer to my question:pinkiecrazy:. Who is Derpy's mother, and why is Pinkie depressed? Are you suggesting that Derpy stopped the formation of Pinkamina Dian Pie (the alternate crazed murderer from Cupcakes)? All in all, great story. Well written, shows that you put time and effort into it. Haven't found that many grammatical errors and I'm a college English professor. My first favorited fic:heart::derpytongue2:

588251 Derpy's mother is just another mare (maybe she'll get her own spin-off next time? Who knows) and I plan to link this story to a Pinkie Pie 'Remembrance' fic (Remembrance is the name of these 'explore the history' fics I'm writing) so you'll find out why she's sad next time :pinkiesad2:

The reason there are no grammer errors is because a very good proofreader. JohnPerry, helped me once-over this story, correcting (hopefully) any errors that were present. Thank you for your favorite :pinkiehappy:

Wow. That was very well done! I liked the narrative technique and Derpy's characterization. But more importantly, I got the feels from it.

601016 Thank you! And if you like fics that explore a pony's past you should check out the other fics which are part of my 'Remembrance' series. I think you'd might like them :)

:fluttercry: not gonna lie this story brought tears to my eyes
this was an amazing story

>>DeathScar

no problem :moustache:

i felt a tear after reading this, love it love it love it. derpy is my favorite ony ever

forgive me if this sounds ridiculous but from the story what i'm getting is that celestia is derpy's mother

611113 Glad you enjoyed it!

613195 Hey no problem! However may I ask why? I think it might be my fault for only describing her once :x

613205 well in the story celestia sent derpy to ponyville, that plus she had seemed to be hiding something while she was talking to twilight, celestia, in my opinion, is giving off an 'aura' that mothers have.

613235 Haha truth be told I think that's just Celestia's personality. I always saw Celestia as a very motherly figure so I gave her that kind of speech and protectiveneess. However, Celestia is not Derpy's mother :twilightsmile: That is another mare :pinkiehappy:

613263 ok i do have another theory but it's probably just like the one i just suggested

613272 Hmm and what is it? It's okay to say it :twilightsmile:

613279 ok

the way she acted in the story makes me think it might be pinkie, she seemed to care about derpy in a more than friends way. of course canon-wise this would be impossible

613292 Yeah, Pinkie's just a friend. I described once how Derpy's mother looked like

"a tall, brown-coated mare with a long flowing blonde mane"

so shes just another mare :)

613605 oh ok i guess i didn't see the part where you described her :twilightblush:

615289 No problem! It was easy to miss :pinkiehappy:

Yes, you get 5 Derpys :derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2:

and a mustache for good measure :moustache:

617522 Thank you! Here's five pinkies! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

and again... wow

personally I think this one is better than the spitfire one, but mostly because this one went wrong without there being some sort of enemy, I really like how you can connect with a character and imagine what could of happened to them, what is happening, and what will happen even if you're not righting it, you put so much detail in you actually almost brought a tear to my eye... just one tear... and only one eye... almost. you have a real talent and i want to keep reading your other stuff, but its midnight and i have school tomorrow lol.

the only complaint i have with it is that with the spitfire one and about half of this one you always say the purple pony or something on those lines, i find lines like those are good for when 1 you dont know who it is or its the first time seeing them in the story, or they have been away for a while and come back. or 2 when they do something heroic, for example ""I did it" said the purple coated pony.", that was just something i made up and has no relevence what so ever, but i ho u get what i mean. normally just a "Twilight commented" or something on those lines will be fine.

And thank you for putting vinyl in the story the way you did, cuz clearly she is best pony :rainbowkiss: . the jokes you made with her would be unexpected to everybody else, but you cant pass a joke by me with her :pinkiehappy:

630052 If you like Vinyl then I have a whole remembrance fic dedicated to her and Octy :D But yes, thank you for the comment ^^ I'm still trying to do away with the lavender pony syndrome :P

630067 im going to save that one for last, I have a feeling that will make me feel the most satisfied with the series =D which pony are you doing next if you don't mind me asking?

huh, I can see that being fun, a completely black slate, nothing is know of her, not even where she was born... with this you could go really wrong or really awesome, with what i've read i'm pretty sure it going to be the ladder, well good night, i'll read the last two tomorrow :twilightsmile:

630107 very well! Good night and thank you!

I love it when I can click some random story expecting anything and nothing at the same time, and walk away crying. I have shed many tears to this Deathscar, good job.

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