• Published 25th Dec 2014
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My last shadow - The Psychopath



A young filly begins to relearn of her past life as dreams and memories begin to intertwine in her mind while everypony rejects and chases her away

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It rises to the blue

Author's Note:

I did say in that temporary chapter that I wouldn't do the romance chapter with just a few people asking for it. I feed on feedback. If I have none, I am not energized to continue a story, and I don't want this one to become a barren wasteland like several of my previous stories. I won't do the time skip either. I'll develop the romance in the sequel...or I could make a short story dedicated solely to that...Or I could do special chapters once this is complete. Hmmm. Specials sounds good. Yes! They would allow me to further develop...well...you'll know if you read this chapter.:pinkiecrazy: Plus, I wouldn't have to waste everyone's time with a story that's probably only going to be two chapters long.

I'll probably end up writing one while I work on another story to write, just to develop and get some more romance in this one and keep away any plot fissures.

As Stellar and Life returned to the Crystal Kingdom, Stellar suddenly collapsed and everything went dark. It felt like she had just been pulled into the shadows of her mind and it felt somewhat painful, too. Where was she and what happened that would make her come here?When she woke up, she was standing in front of a collapsed Life. He didn't seem to be moving and was on his right side. Sunlight was no longer coming from the sky, and everything seemed to be shrouded by a thick, black storm cloud. The mare didn't pay attention to anything else, assuming it was just the weather. She chuckled and said:

"Come on,Life. I know you're super sensitive and needed help walking back here after the kiss, but you didn't need to collapse because of it. Come on." Stellar's happy demeanor slowly left her face. "Life?"

She extended a hoof to poke him, but jumped briefly when she saw black armor on her hoof. The mare started to pat herself everywhere and noticed that she was now wearing armor all over her body. Not only that, but she was standing on a large platform made of smoothed, black crystal. Giant pillars of black crystals had grown everywhere, with many going through several of the buildings. Worse still, nearly the whole kingdom was standing near or around the platform. They were all in a terrible state and were trembling in fear at every movement she made.

"Guys, what's happening?" she pleaded.

"N-n-n-othing, your majesty! We are b-but your humble slaves!"

"Wh--"

Stellar took a step back, then her gaze returned to Life who remained oon the ground. She jumped to him and lifted him up and shook him. She even started to slap him, hoping he would wake up. "Life! LIfe! Please! Wake up. I just met you. I just had my very first kiss with somepony I actually feel love towards. Please don't die! Please!"

"Hohohoho. You wish him not to die, but you killed him with your own hooves, Queen Penumbra."

"No! I couldn't have! I didn't!" Stellar shouted as she nestled herself into Life's lifeless neck. "He's not dead! I would never kill him."

"Yet you did. The crystal is stained red and your hooves have become infused with the crimson liquids of his remains."

Stellar's anger erupted, and she turned to face what was herself.

"What...No. I know what this is. It's another one of the illusions that I've been put through constantly since I was born. I'm not falling for it ever again!"

"No! Wa--"

The Stellar copy tried to jump forward to grab the mare, but she closed her eyes and concentrated, and the whole illusion crumbled like broken glass. When she opened her eyes again, Life was standing over her and looking worried.

"Stellar? Are you okay? You just blacked out and collapsed once we returned here."

"I..."

She immediately jumped and hugged Life tightly. "I'm tired of all these things happening to me! I saw you dead, and I was the one who killed you. I want all of this to stop! I can't take it anymore!"

"NEITHER CAN I! I have been working on this for forty-eight years, and you just won't give in! I'VE HAD IT!" a voice roared in the kingdom.

The land started to tremble and crack open, frightening many ponies who galloped in Stellar and Life's direction. As the ground split open, rays of darkness began to burst forth, and hundreds of shadows began to swarm outwards. As they did so, a large amount of guards came from the Crystal Tower like a horde of bees defending their hive. Cadence flew towards Stellar and Life with several guards in tow. She landed in front of Shadowrette with her small forcen a bid to fight off as many of the incoming shadows as possible.

"Princess Cadance! It's King Sombra!" the voice called.

"Huh?"

The pink pony turned to look at Stellar, and she shook. Her eyes were wide with fatigue and fear. Her mane was in a complete mess and it seemed like she had been terrified of something.

"Princess? What's wrong with--" Life tried to ask.

"There! There she is! It's her! She's the culprit of all this!"

The guards turned around and faced Stellar with aggressiveness. Before they could even touch her, however, Life intervened, and broke several legs in the defense of Stellar.

"You're the cause of all of this! I've seen everything happen while I wasn't looking. It was told to me. You're responsible for all this chaos and mayhem. I won't have it anymore!"

"Wh-what are you talking about? I didn't do anything!" Stellar pleaded.

"She's right. What are you doing?"

"You must remain out of this! You are an official of the SPS and are under my strict orders. Now, arrest this mare!"

"No!" Life stomped a hoof down.

Cadence was taken aback by this attitude, but her surprise was quickly replaced with anger.

"How DARE you! I helped! Brought you back from that pit. I fed you, nurtured you, and this is how you repay my kindness?"

"Nonsense! You are under some bizarre spell making you lose reason. Do you not remember the face of Stellar?" He presented the mare's face directly to Cadence, but she did not react like he wanted.

"Yes. That's Sombra!"

"No! You delved deep into her memories to see the precision of what happened to her. Look more deeply. Do you think this mare, a unicorn who cannot use her magic even, would hurt anypony? Even in her foalhood, she did no such thing."

"I..." Cadence grabbed her head and began to tilt, then she fell hard on the floor, as did the guards around her.

"No. NO! I have spent too long spreading fear! My plans will NOT fall apart because of some depressive cinder block!"

A shady mass floated over the unconscious bodies of Cadence and the guards, and slowly rose up to show a grinning shadow. Stellar smiled and galloped towards the shadow, much to Life's confusion and befuddlement.

"Grinning Shadow! I've missed you so much! Help me! There's tons of bad things happening. I need your help!"

Life pulled on Stellar's tail and dragged her behind him, protecting her with a leg up.

"What are you doing? He's my childhood friend."

"No he isn't. He's the reason all these bad things have been happening to you. Just looking at him, I can sense it."

The shadow frowned. "You only kissed once. How is your connection to each other so strong already? Nevertheless, he is right." The shadow smiled.

Stellar nervously laughed at the remark. She was in denial. "What are you talking about? You're not the one who made my dad go crazy. You're not the one who made ponies attack me. You're not the one who made everypony in the sewers except for Crunchy Apple hate me right away." The shadow said nothing. "You..."

"Yes. I was reforming you as per your instructions."

"MY instructions?! I didn't tell you to ruin my life!"

"Well, in my defense, your dad was already crazy. He just needed a little shove in the right direction!"

The shadow started twisting and warping into a vortex of darkness. In its place stood a two dimensional portal of swirling black, and out of it came a shadowy pony still engulfed in the misty darkness of the door. Life and Stellar's eyes widened when they saw the mist depart to show King Sombra.

"Wh-wh-what?!" Stellar stuttered.

"King Sombra! Of course you would be behind all of this. This is just like some badly written book."

"Wow. Everything has to do with books with you. Anyways, I am not Sombra. I am merely a construct of your design before he perished. I am all your magic. I am what keeps you alive, and I intend to bring my master back from his grave!"

"I won't let you lay a hoof on St--"

Life was swiped aside by the Shadow Sombra's foreleg. "I have no time to mess with you, little creature. Stellar, it is your duty. You are King Sombra! You know this deep down! Your communicating with the shadows! Everypony hating you! I never MADE them do such a thing. They were already like this. I did this to show you the face behind the mask. If you accept this, you will regain your old memories, your magic, and you shall become Queen Penumbra! It is your destiny! This is why you made me. WHY DO YOU FLEE MY LOYALTY?!" Sombra slowly walked towards Stellar who slowly backed away at the same speeds. "You have no friends here! They only follow you through fear! With your old power, you will find true friends! Crunchy treated you like the others: a simple, homeless pony. Cadence and Shining considered you to be nothing but an emotionally fragile foal, and the crystal ponies treated you like a monster."

Stellar was hesitant in believing Sombra, but she was certain that he had a point. Nopony she knew treated her as a true friend until she got her prestigious position. Nopony loved her like a friend. She lowered her head in defeat and slowly walked towards Shadow Sombra who opened his forelegs for an embrace, but Life stopped her with his own words.

"That is not true! At all! Think, Stellar. There are those that stayed behind to help you in your time of needs. Who were they? Think! Don't let his spell of fear grab a hold of you!"

Stellar stopped in place and started to think more clearly. Her memories were indeed being fogged, but then, it came to her. Crystal Clarity! She was Stellar's true, very first friend! She helped her through a lot and even played games with her when they were younger, when time permitted, of course. And Click Clock! That bizarre entity always gave her some good tips despite being so strange. She even allowed Stellar to reunite with her mother. That was a true gift that not many could boast to have acquired. And Cadance might not be considered a 'friend' by others, but she was still one to Stellar for all the help she did. And then there was...

"Stellar, I love you. You know this!"

"Lies! It is a trick to keep you from your destiny! They want to hold you under a leash so that you may never be free!"

"That's not true! Even if it was, I would fight to let you be free in the world! You are not some toy that ponies can have! You are who you chose to be! You aren't King Sombra! You're Stellar Shadowrette!"

When Life said those words, Stellar suddenly had an epiphany, as if somepony had said something to her when she was very, very young:

"After all, a body remade never has the same soul."

She stood up and looked at Sombra with a frown. The king's demeanor became that of sadness and betrayal.

"I'm not you! I'm myself! And I have friends to prove it!"

"No!"

"Sombra! I should have known that you would pop up eventually." Cadance while taking her place next to Stellar. "How did I not see that you would popped up eventually. After all you did to the ponies of this Kingdom, still you refuse to back away."

Shadow Sombra hissed and started stomping his forelegs on the ground like a grumpy foal, although he was cracking the floor tiles in his tantrum.

"No! If I must force your true memories back into your body, I will!"

"The shadows!" a guard shouted.

"What?" Sombra said before looking up.

The shadows had all gone from their initial position towards the Shadow Sombra and started to engulf him. Despite his attempts at freeing himself, the shadows were far too numerous.

"What are you doing? You fools! He's right there! I must complete my mission! Noooo!"

A bright flash of green and purple explode within the mass of shadows, letting out a gigantic stream of green and purple magic. It flew several times around the sky before collapsing onto Stellar and making her collapse from the pain. The skies started to clear and the trembling stopped, but Cadance and her guards stood back in anticipation of a possible attack. Life didn't care and gently picked Stellar up, looking at her directly in her closed eyes.

"Come on, Stellar. Come on!"

Several minutes passed before the mare slowly opened her eyes and mumbled in fatigue.

"Stellar?" Life uttered with hope and fear.

"Yes...What?"

This time, it was Life's turn to hug Stellar with love and care, and the tensed guards and alicorn slowly relaxed.

"I'm glad to see you were not corrupted by...whatever that was. We have many things to talk about, and many things to do," Cadence looked around her as she spoke. "but we need to get you to a hospital, and quick. As for you, LIfe, I do believe you need a new name. 'Ruined Life' wouldn't work for you right now."

"Okay. What did you have in mind?"

"I thought long about it, then the idea came to me. What about 'Life Streams'?" Cadance put out her forelegs in a 'ta da!' manner, with the smile to boot!

"Hmmm. Yes. It is...Yes! I like it. I'll ta--"

"Queen Shadowrette," spoke an unknown mare.

Everypony looked towards the previous position of the shadowy mass to see a mare with a black body, white mane, and black eyes with a white iris looking at Stellar with an emotionless face. Above her were swirling a countless number of shadows.

"Wh...Who are you?" Cadence asked.

"I am a true Shadow Pony. We were made by Sombra to follow all orders. His magic's attempts at remaking him created false Sombras."

"Then...what are you still doing here?"

"We follow King Sombra."

Cadence rolled her eyes. "Yes. I know that, but why are you still here?"

Hundreds of the shadows began to smash themselves into the ground and reform themselves into a shadow pony by slow elevation. They all had different designs, but their colors and facial expressions were all the same.

"We follow King Sombra. His magic proved inefficient at reviving the previous one, so we follow the new one's demands. We were tasked with protecting her until the fated day, but the plan of Sombra has failed. We follow the current ruler. She is King Sombra's reincarnation. We now follow her."

"She must be watched and-" another shadow pony said. It was a pegasus this time.

"-carefully instructed. Her magic-"

"-is too dangerous and volatile."

"Must be instructed."

"Must be watched."

"Must be-"

"Protected," they all said in unison.

Everypony just stared at the mass of increasingly larger number of shadow ponies of various tribes just staring at Stellar and completing each other's sentences. They didn't know what to make of any of this. What was going to happen? Either way, Stellar and Ruined LI--I mean, Life Streams, rubbed their noses together, making Cadance's heart go a-flutter with 'awww'. The two were going to learn more about each other and have fun together. Maybe Cadance would know the best way to do that, but what were they to do with these 'true' Shadow Ponies?


"So the little toy of Sombra failed to do as instructed by him. I am not surprised. How could magic from a lowly pony that thinks he casts MY magic succeed at anything but failure? No matter. I have grown tired from all of this waiting. I have nurtured my darkness long enough and I intend to reclaim this land. I still found it amusing to watch this whole event. I will consider possibilities, then I will do this myself."

Comments ( 55 )

DEUS EX MACHINA IS ACTUALLY NOT DEUS EX MACHINA!

5853906 What, the shadows? This was planned from the very beginning.

5855599 I had to comment you know!

5855644 That's just sporadic blurting. I'm all for Illogic, but that doesn't energize me...it just kenfooses me.:applejackconfused:

5855669 Like that word you just butchered so brilliantly?

It would be quite unfortunate if smiling was destroyed, it is so very likely that some vestige of him still exists, somewhere.

5856908 Yus.


5856971 Oh, I don't know. Maybe, maybe not.

5857634 Y U NO ANSWER QUESTION ON YOUR PAGE?

5857689 READING! TYPING! LIVING!

5864727 No. Stellar said that she was supposed to come back when she was twelve, and she never did.

5880881 As much as I would've loved to do that, I really didn't find those errors he spotted.

5880881 I believe that explanation less than mine; I was... Less than sound of mind at the time of reading.

5882381 And you still didn't tell me what you think of the story.

Thats it? This is the end of the story?

I believe you instilled yourself in the story as the grinning shadow wanting to end all this

5885300 Not really. This was how I wanted it to end, originally. The romantic elements came as a surprise to me, so I placed the tag there. I just wanted to finish this correctly and leave a romance special for later while also developping the newly added element. While I do love to write for my readers and need to please them however I can, if I'm not energized enough, the story will either end up dying away (see my few incomplete and hiatus'd stories) or will end with an awful ending. I asked what the readers wanted in the end by taking advantage of the story update system since no one ever reads my blog posts concerning the story. Barely anyone answered, so I wasn't energized to develop on the romance.

That being said, Crunchy Apple was supposed to be Stellar's love interest. Sub-conciousness pointed me to a more developped reality, so I looked into that alternate tangent instead and preferred its outcome to this one.

5882595 It's gripping. When I find myself with free time and come to this site, this is the story I read even when I've promised people I'd look into theirs. That being said, I still have to finish this but right now I'm off to work so... *shrug*

So, finished reading the story today and all in all i quite enjoyed the read but there were a few things that were kinda weird...
first of all there were to many pronouns in some parts, i know that is because some parts have to be mysterious when the shadows are talking to whoever they are talking to but i got so confused that i didn't even got what you were hinting at anymore...
The part with the clock and the rats felt weird too, it felt like it didn't had any real kind of purpose in the end, especially the magic nullifing thing. If it was important you could maybe atleast mention the rats or the clock at the end again.
I really liked the romance part at the end, it broke a bit of that ever existent tension. it felt a bit "slice of live" like... i wish there were more of this parts in the story especially before the time jumps. i would have loved to see how a normal day for Stellar was before her dad got crazy or how a normal "scavenger" day with the other shadow ponies went or maybe later how Stellar would confront a lost little shadow filly or colt when there were given more freedom. All this constant drama got a bit dull, so something "normal" in between would have been nice to loosen the story up. it also would have been great for her characterization i think. In the last romance part i have seen a Stellar that wasn't depicted before with her playfull flirty side. It's a bit of unused potential i think.
All in all it had also helped the pacing of the story because while the main plotpoints felt lovingly crafted some oft the time skips or lead ups to those events felt a bit rushed and too sudden for me.
What i really liked about the story was this dark mood it has from the very beginning. This crazy racism towards the shadow ponies felt kinda harsh, at the beginning i even thought it was to extreme to be realistic. But then it got me thinking, that things like this happend und happen all the time in real live and that really struck a cord...
I love stories that get me thinking, so kudos for that!

5886642 The rats and the clock are there for the sequel. What are they? It's a secret!:pinkiecrazy:

As for the time skips, I'm still working on how to execute them well enough. Here I find it's much better than my previous attempts, though.

Yay! Feedback that starts with the negative points then ends in positive!

5941088 It is even more preventable if you recall that Stellar stated that she forgot to go to Click Clock and it was even mentioned a second time when in the shop. Also, it's not old!

6041735 Fixed.

And, no. She never gained the ability to manipulate them. They just do as they feel. You'll understand by the last chapter what's so special about the shadows.:pinkiecrazy:

6043077 It's just a little confusing as at one moment she can't do anything, and then the next the very shadows bend reality to her whim!!!

6067230 I know. I wanted it to be confusing. Even from the beginning I made it so we never know if they're subconsciously controlled by her or if they're alive.

6303758 Good. Good. I'll be able to replace it with a potato.

6304067 I never do 'ships'. It's either two OCs I make or nothing at all, and most of the time, it's nothing at all.:pinkiecrazy:

OH! I missed this one when it was released, *moves it to favorite so Ill read it asap*

6401612 Why do I keep forgetting about you?

5886737 The Rats and the Clock... Now that is something I'd be interested in reading. Also, loved the story. It's all so wonderfully balanced.

7419066 Awwww. Thank you.

Hint: The rats aren't what they appeared to be.

8002173 I forgot about this story. :/

Sequel Damnit!!!!!

8050447 Ehhhh
Ehhhhh
EHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
I dunno
Lemme fink 'bout it

8050491 Dude it got featured, That means people like it, a sequel will make people comeback for more.

8050529 I don't really have a fully developed idea for it, and by 'featured', I meant it got in the bottom three rows. I never get in the top seven anymore. *shrugs*

8050542 Meh at least try

8050603 I'm not going to force the idea. It'll end up terrible if I do that. I have patchwork for the idea, but I need to work on it more.

I like this sequel please?

9278941
Oh yeah. I forgot about this story. Uuuhhh. I need to finish the two stories I'm already doing first, then there's story 100 that's going to be the third Psycho story.

9280115
Sorry. I just have many, many stories.

No sequel. REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE–

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