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Oh this looks like it's gonna be goooddd I love zombie survival stories
what do you mean by the names down below
I have always loved zombie survival stories.
This story has definitely caught my attention.
More!!!
Let's practice the transformation spell twilight, I'm thinking steel doors, reinforced shatter proof windows, and a golem
Shale: a golem can't turn
Thank you shale
I've been looking for a decent zombie apocalypse story on here. I'm glad to have found one.
I do find it a little strange that all of the ponies seem so accepting of the entire situation, and that they don't seem to be very emotional about so many of their friends dying. However, that might be just the touch that this story needs to not become so depressing that people aren't able to finish it.
A quick peer edit for you: “There’re not going to make it!” Bon Bon grabbed her friend by the shoulders. It should say "They're not going to make it!"
On a side note, thank you SO much for letting Gummy show his inner badass! We knew he had it in him!
All in all, it's a great story. I've very much looking forward to the rest of it.
Woo! First comment for this chapter!
First I would like to say nice job. I feel like this story is coming out well, if not a bit strangely paced. It has a nice balance of story elements, as well as action, drama, lightheartedness, etc...
I do have a few concerns... First, during the conversation with Pipsqueak, when he asks Twilight about contacting Celestia, Spike responds with “I’m sure she’s respond soon.” It should say "I'm sure she will respond soon."
Also, the scene between AJ and RD. While this scene had a nice exposition, and didn't really harm the pace of the story, I felt as if the characters actions seemed very unnatural. Even in these circumstances, I can't see these two acting quite this way in this type of situation. The fighting is fine, it just felt like the scene was a bit... Rushed.
Other than those few concerns, I felt that this chapter turned out rather well. I thought you ended it in an awkward place, but that's not necessarily bad. I look forward to the rest of this story. Keep up the good work.
Imma read this!
Walking dead crossover?
sombra!
I love it this is a great story A bit silly at bits but generaly a good read. Well done
Ok, I think I caught the reference to "MMMystery on the Friendship Express" when you mentioned Fluttershy not wanting to talk about how she learned to operate a train. (At least I'm assuming that remark was a reference to that.) However, what was that whole thing between AJ and Rarity in the barn? What exactly is AJ not wanting to talk about? If this is a reference, I'm not catching it.
Overall, a nice chapter. I noticed a few spelling/grammatical mistakes throughout, but other than that, a very well written chapter. Keep it up!
Well, this chapter turned out very nice. However, I noticed a lot more editing errors in this chapter than in ones previous...
First, I understand that you had trouble with Zecora's dialogue in this. For the most part you did fairly well, but I did notice a lot of parts where her speaking seemed awkward. The trick with her is to match the syllable count in the rhymes. If one half of the rhyme is longer than the other, it throws the proportions of the entire speech off, and make the dialogue sound really awkward, even if the words rhyme perfectly. My suggestion is to go back through this and see if you can add/remove/change some of the wording to her rhymes to make the syllable count match up on both sides.
Second, and this is more of a content one, so I don't really expect any changes, but I thought I'd point it out. During the scene at Zecora's, you mention everyone hearing the boom of the thunder before the lightning strikes. This isn't how a storm works. Light travels a lot faster than sound, so you will always see the lightning before you hear the thunder during a storm.
Finally, and this is more of a personal thing. Trixie CONSTANTLY speaking in her strange form of third-person narrative is really starting to become obnoxious, and annoying. It was kinda cute and funny during the first few chapters, but now it's starting to get a little irritating. I realize that she speaks like this several times during the show, but she does speak normally just as often when she's not performing. If she didn't do it so much it would be alright, but with the consistency with which she does it, it really start to detract from the story, and grab people's attention more than it should. I'm not saying that you should completely stop it, just maybe cut down on it a bit, so it's not so attention-catching, and feels more natural in the story.
Other than those few things, this was a nice little "side-chapter". As always, I'm looking forward to further updates to this story.
good dinky is ok, i do not need to kill the universe now.
there about to learn an important lesson
NEVER FUCK WITH A PRINCESS!
Why am I not suprised by Cherry Jubilee?
Wait, if Cherry Jubilee was down in between AJ's hindquarters then just how did AJ bit her in the throat with being tied up? She can't be that flexible all tied up!
Good story so far and looking forward towards further chapters.
Ooh, undead is now airborne?
in both romeros 'of the living dead' universe and resident evil the virus still effected the dead it was just if someone was bitten then they would die and turn.
The kid from last Nightmare Night, How ironic
5265730 Actually that is canon to the legit Walking Dead, Literally everyone has it, you only get immediately infected when you get bit, but when you die of anything, you'll turn.
5277256 Actually I have never read or watched the Walking Dead. Just never got around to it.
5277892 Oh, you should, its really good
5277960 Its on the list of things I eventually need to do. There is only so many hours in a day though!
MOOOOOOAAAR
I got a group this would go in:Zombies and Assassins
trixie is willing to make the hard choices. Aloe and Lotus though survived for how long in a linen closet though? Maybe there might be a sink but without food?
And Trixie just became 20% more badass in my opinion!
Seriously?
Wow... Wasn't expecting that...
5238372 says who?
5337910 At this point, me. Letting criminals move in is all well and good then having Twilight sleep with there leader? I thought things went off track when there priority became to clean out the salon! There should be more important things to worry about than getting massages and satisfying Rainbow Dad! A guy she only just met that day!
HILARIOUS
Well its nice to see what happened to these escapee! I had actually forgotten about them! Interesting thing that the zombies are attracted to love. I wonder ithey can use the Crystal Heart in some fashion to kill them all? Or is it being used to power the shield now? Shining seems to be in good shape in comparison to the last time we saw him keeping a shield up. And we saw how haggard Cadance was when she did last as well.
Not Pinkie! If she dies I don't know if I'll be able to continue!
On a less depressing note, there were a lot of grammatical errors toward the end...
First, in the scene with Gilda you used the wrong form of "they're" almost every time you said it Specifically when Gilda said
and when Rainbow Dash kept repeating
All of these instances should be replaced with "they're".
Also, one other thing I noticed is when Rainbow Dash says
It should say "You almost TOOK my friend's head off...", and also, "they're" is the form you should be using.
Other than that, great chapter. Fingers crossed on Pinkie's survival, I love her so much, and would be heartbroken if she died. Also, GILDA IS SUCH A BITCH!
Is this rarity speaking? The dialogue doesn't make sense. It switches from description BY a pony to description OF a pony.
Pinkie dying would really hurt the group, getting down and back to real medical aid just became priority. Not a cloud city full of undead parasprites and unanswered questions. Plus bringing Gilda back might be a good idea, the more claws and hooves the better. Unless Pinkie dies, then kill her.
maud pie, we now have our anti-zombie weapon.
A Zombie comes towards Maud
Maud: Boulder...Attack
She throws boulder at the zombie and it goes clear through it's head.
I'm not really sure what to think of this chapter, it was just kinda all over the place... It wasn't awful though, and I'm happy that Pinkie and Gummy are alright. Let's see what happens next.
this story is not bad written, but its concept has nothing to really stand on. especially if you take into account the regal sisters would probably easily dispose of the undead and dragons are basicaly anti undead creature units.
not to mention that ponies trying to eat ponies if undead makes no sense. if they are driven by an impulse to feed, they would eat grass and plants. cause that is what they will go after if reduced to base thought..........
also in a world of magic, likely have anti undead spells and powers.
5479142 Have you read the whole story thus far? Because most of your critiques have already been addressed in the story...
So if I understand this right...Spike is going to end up like Murphy from Z Nation
Rainbow Dad....awesome.
Now this chapter was great! So much intensity! Plus, this chapter didn't seem to jump around as randomly as the last one, so it was a lot easier to follow.
There were a few minor mistakes here and there, mainly spelling, grammar, and a few missing words. Other than that, it was simply wonderful.
Keep it up!
Twilight is allowing herself to get to close to Rainbow Dad. Even the fact that he even though he was under suspecion of murder and he is still sleeping in her bed. Thats kind of taking the Friendship thing a bit far.
This is interesting
I'll need more chapters for better results
still confused as too how the zombies could really infect spike. his scales should prove easily mor ethen adquate to keep bites out.
5614738 or the dragon in like chapter three or four