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Not Pinkie! If she dies I don't know if I'll be able to continue!
On a less depressing note, there were a lot of grammatical errors toward the end...
First, in the scene with Gilda you used the wrong form of "they're" almost every time you said it Specifically when Gilda said
and when Rainbow Dash kept repeating
All of these instances should be replaced with "they're".
Also, one other thing I noticed is when Rainbow Dash says
It should say "You almost TOOK my friend's head off...", and also, "they're" is the form you should be using.
Other than that, great chapter. Fingers crossed on Pinkie's survival, I love her so much, and would be heartbroken if she died. Also, GILDA IS SUCH A BITCH!
Is this rarity speaking? The dialogue doesn't make sense. It switches from description BY a pony to description OF a pony.
Pinkie dying would really hurt the group, getting down and back to real medical aid just became priority. Not a cloud city full of undead parasprites and unanswered questions. Plus bringing Gilda back might be a good idea, the more claws and hooves the better. Unless Pinkie dies, then kill her.
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