this story is not bad written, but its concept has nothing to really stand on. especially if you take into account the regal sisters would probably easily dispose of the undead and dragons are basicaly anti undead creature units.

not to mention that ponies trying to eat ponies if undead makes no sense. if they are driven by an impulse to feed, they would eat grass and plants. cause that is what they will go after if reduced to base thought..........

also in a world of magic, likely have anti undead spells and powers.

5479142 Have you read the whole story thus far? Because most of your critiques have already been addressed in the story...

Now this chapter was great! So much intensity! Plus, this chapter didn't seem to jump around as randomly as the last one, so it was a lot easier to follow.

There were a few minor mistakes here and there, mainly spelling, grammar, and a few missing words. Other than that, it was simply wonderful.

Keep it up!

Twilight is allowing herself to get to close to Rainbow Dad. Even the fact that he even though he was under suspecion of murder and he is still sleeping in her bed. Thats kind of taking the Friendship thing a bit far.

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Accroding to my view,according to Rainbow Dad's moral view, those who do bad things (like something like beating a child, rape or something) deserve to die. He's essentially a overprotective dad with an aggressive "Eye for an Eye" mentality.
So, it's not really that dangerous with Twilight rolling in the hay with him