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The DJ Rainbow Dash


Stuck somewhere between writing funny and sad horsewords. Don't forget to add romance in there!

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When a freak accident causes Rainbow Dash to lose her trademark defining trait, Twilight worries that it might have taken her spirit, soul, and her love away along with it.

With the help of a friend, maybe there is a way she can help her find it again.

Perhaps a trip to a very special place is in order.


Written for Famous Last Words' "Right Back At It Again" 2020 Shipping Competition

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Comments ( 7 )

Great story! I like the plot and build up!

That was excellent! I could practically feel Twilight on the verge of giving up. Well done.

Twilight started flapping her wings twice as hard, their speed picking up rapidly, till some of the clouds were flying past them like a blur. She wore if she put her hand out into one of the clouds right now, she would be able to slice some of them in half. After a little while, she began to lean left, remembering the way the currents began to shift from what Fluttershy was describing.

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Thanks! :twilightsmile:

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That was the intention, so good to hear. Glad you enjoyed it.

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Well that's what happens when I try to quickly look this over on the last day of a contest. :facehoof: Thanks for finding that.

Nice story! :rainbowkiss:

“Woah, this is extremely detailed.”

I feel like this captures the reading experience of the story. It goes beyond being 'detailed' to being overwrought. Despite the fact that this is a good idea, it is hampered by the execution. The opening of the story captures this well: there are over five paragraphs devoted to describing a coffee-making process with borderline fetishistic devotion that can come across as confusing to the reader. It takes away from the setting and relationship, even though you have a solid foundation for storytelling.

Awesome story!

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