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SilverHaze
A Lover of ponies and friendship, creater of Haze In Equestria, and Haze in Equestria 2. I love to write, read and love! I hope you all have a good day!
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Ohmygodwhat.
At least your spelling and grammar has improved somewhat, so that's something.
After reading the prologue I feel like it was written by someone else, someone who didn't write this first chapter.
Also.
Not sure if incest joke or bad attempt at...something else
I may honest to god sit down and do a full blown, word by word review of this like that one guy did in the last one with the GIF's and the pictures and YouTube videos.
I feel like someone should entertain the readers.
4910190 Well the first chapter has been in the works for several weeks, gone over many revitions and been thought of since the end of HIEQ, The second chapter was a bit more flash of inspiration, I understand there would be a bit of a quality dip, but HIEQ fans will find a bit of improvement between the two stories!!!!
...
Didn't you learn from you Prequel to this?
You have not made a good character! Please, for the sake of any of your future writing endeavors, abandon this OC!
I am saying this for YOUR sake, not mine.
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I'm sure they will, as will Bigfoot and the Loch Ness Monster.
4910445 I think "a bit" of improvement is an overstatement.
I am so happy this is a thing.
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So am i, friend. So am i.
Is this haze purple?
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I am too! Haha
Silver Haze 2 is going to be bigger and better, don't worry I'm not going anywhere this time, last story I took like a 5 month break in the middle of writing it, but none of that this time
I envy your artistic confidence.
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Because the story definitely isn't
Ok, everyone hold onto your various appendages, this may be a bumpy ride.
What's unknown is why this story exists.
Yes Twilight, focus on how ripped he is, fantasize about his extreme awesomeness and give in to the urge to blow him, because i sure as hell know I'm having a hard time resisting myself.
I see you still love abusing SHIFT-1.
I believe you need a snowboard/skateboard to do a kickflip, unless the beloved Silver is able to totally redefine any word he chooses whenever he chooses to do it.
He's just.
That.
Goddamned.
Amazing.
No.
Horses have arms now
?
Those goddamned mortals and their fucking government-appointed currency.
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The sooner our wonderful Silver listens to this voice, the better.
Wait, back the hell up.
What?
Where the hell are we?
Based off of past experiences with everything Silver Haze comes into contact with, they could be standing in the middle of a field, surrounded by pits full of flesh-hungry reproductive organs that happened to build a stained glass window for Twilight.
Silver deserves a stained glass pile of shit, I'm sorry.
She should banish him to the moon for daring to speak in such a manner.
Please.
Isn't that the textbook definition of dragging someone along?
-Deep inhale-
RELATIONSHIPS DON'T WORK LIKE THIS BUDDY, WELCOME TO THE REAL WORLD.
You can't play around with multiple people at once and expect them to all be ok with it.
Get used to it.
No, that isn't stupidity.
That's called not wanting your sister's heart to get broken because the one she has the hots for and the one who promised to marry and love her for all her days actually shows very little interest and is more interested in banging and apparently impregnating Celestia's start pupil and making sure everyone knows how fucking amazing he is. (Where the hell is their kid by the way, like did we just do a time warp or was that an alternate reality or what?)
He probably should shave it more often then.
I can imagine a prayer book with legs sprinting rapidly away from this story, screaming in horror.
Oh look, something we can all agree on.
You mean the love where he calls Twilight 'Honey' and bangs her regularly?
I honest to god expected porn to come from this.
So not only is he a two-timing, arrogant, stuck-up, asshole.
He's also a drunk.
I thought it wasn't considered strange for the one you 'love' to come and visit you in your room at night.
These five words accurately describe this entire story.
Ok I'm finished now.
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.... fans?
(*looks at A Haze in Equestria*)
(*notices the number of thumbs down*)
To use an old meme...
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They say ignorance is bliss, and I do believe that our dear author has achieved nirvana.
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Looks like people want me to read this.
Hey every pony, update might be a bit late this week, my laptop broke down and I have to wait till Sunday to get back to HQ, expect a new chapter on Monday or Tuesday!!!
Don't worry guys, silver haze isn't going anywhere!
My reaction.
4913392 ...Are you being sarcastic?
Can we get some thumbs up for not only a new chapter
not only a new special,
BUT THE LONGEST CHAPTER IN HAZE HISTORY!?!?!
Enjoy everypony!
4945545 don't you notice people are flaming you or are you ignoring that
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I try and ignore them, some people try giving good advice, and I try and listen when I can, but I know even the rude ones just wana make this story as good as posible and I
every one who takes the time to comment, after all, I write for me more then I write for them!
Another NEW CHAPTER!
Despite my RAPID updates recently, I'm afraid you guys wont get to see the start of the next arc until next week, hopefully the suspense wont kill anyone
OH NO FLUTTERS I WAS JOKING DONT CRY!
Haha, anyway Haze in equestria is starting to get a bit stale isn't it? Parhaps its time he traveled elsewhere Hmmm?
Though it seems he still cant escape Celestia leading things!!!
(srry guys, thats your only hint!)
UNNTTTTIIIILLLL NEXT TIME BRO-NIES!
Oh-ho-ho-ho, god, here we go again.
I have lots and lots of videos and GIF's to go with it this time, so, yeah.
Oh, right off the bat we are reminded why we all touch ourselves every night.
But, if that's the case.
You should still be worried, because you don't just collapse and take a nap on the floor of a castle without someone noticing.
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Except for Twilight Sparkle, apparently.
The rulers of everything we know and love are in terrible danger, I need to save them!
Right after I decide to worry over who else Silver Haze is banging.
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Future ruler of Equestria, everyone.
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So...there isn't a door?
Are we just going to blast a hole in the mountian to get the airship out, or...did we spend all our money on a fancy-ass mountian door have non left to make a wall-door.
With this level of description, for all I know it's shaped like a giant rubber duck.
It's like this asshole just becomes more asshole-ish every word written.
Don't worry Twilight, I'm sure we would all have trouble flying with Silver Haze's enormous member flapping in the wind, right above us.
Aren't the Discord-tendril-things supposed to nullify/make magic go out of control?
Oh, ha...wait, this is Silver Haze we're talking about, he isn't affected by logic, canon, or anything relative to anything sensible.
As I write this particular response, I ask myself, "Will this writer totally ruin Discord's character?"
"Probably."
I guess Applejack's still mentally impared.
The fact that Silver Haze is an asshole*
You know if you sound out some of the words really slowly and use your imagination, it almost sounds like...not Applejack.
Yes, everyone, I know exactly who the culprit is, I know this just out of the blue and without any sort of conversation or debate on the matter, or even any sort of evidence to make a proper deduction.
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A few things.
1. He's Discord. The hell are you talking about, he's going to mess with random ponies, reformed or not.
2. You're getting onto Discord for defending himself, out-of-character-Fluttershy.
3. Silver Haze tried to cut him in half with sharp objects and forbidden, evil magic, why is HE not the one being yelled at?
I stand corrected.
Anyway,
Kill him, Fluttershy.
You're already extremely out-of-character, so murder wouldn't be too far of a stretch at this point.
I don't think anyone would complain either, hell, you might get a medal.
I'm so done with Silver Haze and his need to bang everything in sight, that at this point i get pissed off whenever he makes any sort of sexual thought/remark.movement towards anything at all.
Applejack, you might want to get your brain looked at or something.
You're still spewing stupid.
Using the same word twice doesn't make it a rhyme.
We all get like that when we think of Silver Haze dying.
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Did one of them die, or...
Yet you will try and slaughter a hapless Discord whilst he is bathing.
Yay, random change of perspective.
Stop making Applejack retarded, please.
You can make her sound country or southern, or however the hell you want to put it as, without making her retarded.
Here, watch.
"Well, that there was a close call If'n I've ever seen one, why, we almost ended up lizard-lunch! I'd reckon we don't want to be doin' that again."
Now, isn't that just slightly better?
This isn't a roleplay.
And, Twilight already is a cock-pot, apparently.
One of the many belonging to Silver Haze.
No...just Fluttershy does, when did the others ever hint at wanting you to leave
?
This was so rushed and poorly written I don't even know how to respond.
That isn't.
A goddamned.
Country accent.
It's called, IDIOCY
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Seven key holes.
God forbid Silver Haze not be involved in something.
Silver Haze, you goddamned asshole.
You mean better at writing as a whole.
Also, isn't that...technically plagiarism? (Someone correct me if I'm wrong here)
It's been stale from the start.
Thank you, I'll be here all week.
Or tomorrow, when I get bored enough to write a comment on the "NSFW" chapter.
Oh, look, It's me again.
I would like it to be made perfectly clear that I am writing this comment, as I read the story, I have the story open in a Word Document so that I may easily read and copy/paste quotes into this comment and so that I may write my reactions and thoughts and whatever the hell you want to call what it is I do, as they actually happen.
With this said.
I have the undying feeling that this chapter is going to contain the following.
1. Bad clop.
2. Silver Haze being an asshole.
3. Silver Haze getting drunk (He seems to have to be drunk for there to be sexual interaction.)
4. Silver Haze probably getting in trouble for being a dick,
5. Silver Haze being a stuck up ignorant motherfucker and thinking he's actually done nothing wrong, even though he has.
With that said, let us begin.
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What happened to 'Anti-Alicorns' not being able to match the skill and craftsmanship of true Alicornian tech, hmm?
So basically you're a racist asshole...until you want something.
If course, I'm sure that Silver Haze is used to getting what he wants.
He's the greatest, after all...right?
-Shudders-
Random perspective change, I wouldn't expect any less.
Also, Are the castle showers not working anymore, or...does the ruler of the night just not clean herself and relax after being held captive by evil (and poorly described/written) vines?
I wouldn't want to go to sleep, covered in dust and shit, that's just me though.
Yes you would be, just go watch the first two episodes of Season 4.
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Of course she would be jealous, you cheating, lying, stupid son of a bitch.
You can't just say that you love someone, then turn around and stick your ding-a-ling in someone else.
Silver Haze, you stupid asshole.
Oh look, we can mark number 2 off our list.
You forgot to add in that he lost any respectability, good character, dialogue, etc...
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You say 'It was hard to say no' as if Silver Haze would ever say no to fucking something.
Also...let me just clarify something.
If they got back last night...and it's night time now. Or, did they get back that afternoon, or was it that morning, or...oh, oh no wait.
They got back a few hours ago, that totally explains what time it is considering we had no goddamned idea what time it was yesterday to go off of.
Regardless.
Why the hell did Luna go a whole day without showering?
Lusus.
I'm sorry, I just find that so hilarious for some reason, anyway, carrying on.
Why is curves in quotation marks, with your past attempts at sexual jokes and hints and the like, I'm surprised you didn't just have him say she had a nice ass.
When you're banging royalty, In a castle full of guards and the goddess of the sun,
How the hell can you expect to not be interrupted?
Oh, oh wait. This is Silver Haze we're talking about.
I'm sure the guards are so used to the sounds of various moans floating out from behind that door, along with the smell of copious amounts of alcohol, that they just stopped caring.
I'd be upset if Equestria's biggest asshole was banging my sister too.
You know, due to the fact there is next to no definition of this room at all, I'm going to assume it's just a box with a couch, bed, booze all over the floor and a chart on the wall with the name of every mare in Equestria so that Silver Haze knows who he's tapping next.
He can summon spectral swords out of nothing, yet he has to practice swirling stuff around in the air.
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'Semi-Seductive, Semi-thankful'
Hell, I wouldn't be thankful at all if Silver Haze handed me anything, it's proably safe to assume that anything he touches is covered in semen and will infect me with stupid.
I have a high tolerance level for your bullshit, Silver Haze.
I feel sorry for the poor soul standing on the sidewalk below.
Yay, let's see how out of character we can get Luna to be.
I could have turned this little sentence into an entire paragraph, you could have described some of their chit-chat, maybe touch on a serious note in their buzzed state, but...no.
No you rushed it and got them drunk so that Luna could bang him.
Plus, what the hell happened to "High Tolerance Levels" ?
Don't try to make new words, please.
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Go ahead and skip to 0:48
Luna: "Lol, silver your cum is yummy"
Silver: "Yeah whatever bitch, Come here so I can fuck you."
In reality, she was talking about his ego.
'Yeah Luna, jesus, we can't let Twilight know I'm cheating on her, the fuck is wrong with you?'
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No.
I think it's safe to assume you suck yourself off a lot, so I'm sure the taste is familiar.
Hell, this story as a whole is basically nothing but you doing just that.
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Please be Celestia.
Yay.
It's funny, because never once during this whole poorly written, disgusting, all-around horrible clop scene, were we ever told about cum on the floor and bed.
I'm sure it hasn't been.
Silver Haze, you make me so fucking angry, I want to just send you to the sun.
As she would have every right to be.
To be honest I'm surprised that she's put up with his bullshit for this long.
Because Celestia being understandably and rightly angry because someone is fucking her little sister that she loves and cares for dearly, as well as her star pupil...Silver Haze is mad?
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Finally, someone is talking sensibly.
Ok.
What the fuck?
This is Luna's sister, Celestia. They grew up together, lived, loved and laughed together, they have a rather strong bond and care for one another dearly...
But, Luna is going to arm this bastard against her sister, because she's mad that he's a two-timing asshole?
You can't even use the "1000 years on the moon" bullshit to fuel it, this doesn't make any sense.
But, It's Silver Haze.
Nothing about him makes a lick of goddamned sense.
Silver Haze is a pathetic piece of shit.
Celestia is an immortal goddess of the sun.
Celestia > Silver Haze
Burn the motherfucker, kill it with fire!
That's kind of how a Monarchy works, you stupid ASSHOLE
No we haven't.
No they haven't.
The twisted, retarded versions of them you have conjured up?
They have.
Actually, I'm sure she does, you dense asshole.
If i remember correctly, Celestia was put through this when she was forced to send her sister to the moon...
You know, to save the subjects that she loved, but also choose to banish her sister out of love and protect her.
You get the idea.
She's not angry because she can't control everything.
She's angry because YOU'RE A TWO-TIMING MOTHERFUCKER WHO IS BANGING HER STUDENT AND SISTER AT THE SAME TIME
Jesus christ, this is almost infuriating, this is literally the dumbest character (In every way possible) I have ever seen!
None of us do.
She's the goddamned Princess of Equestria, and a deity of the sun.
She is in whatever goddamned position, to do whatever the hell she wants.
Fuck you, Silver Haze.
Just...
Fuck you.
I don't think I've ever wished so badly for the ability to slowly strangle a fictional character to death.
Everyone is in a better mood when Silver Haze isn't around.
On top of that, I would be pissed too if i walked in to see my little sister covered in the sex fluids of the record-holder for "World's Biggest Asshat"
"Sure, Silver Haze, I mean my sister just ran in and tried to slaughter you, you have a horrible burn on your shoulder and there's now a gaping hole in the wall, but yeah, let's go bang some more. I don't even need to process or recover from the fact she almost tried to murder you, and I love you so much that I don't even care about the fact you have a horrible burn on your shoulder"
I hate you so much.
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I would like to touch on something here, a little thought I've had stuck in my brain since you first mentioned this 'BF'
I'm starting to wonder if he's as fictional as Silver Haze.
Either that or he's lying to you about liking this story.
Or he's just as stupid as Silver Haze.
No...you really didn't.
We didn't need to be reminded what a dick Silver Haze is, we already knew.
Silver Haze...has standards?
Oh, ha- Forgive me.
I normally don't look down that low.
You haven't been building up anything but more hatred for this story.
I plan to, I'll be writing out another one of these and laughing my ass off as I do so.
No, you don't get a brohoof.
You get a bro-punch-in-the-gut.
To finish this all off, I would like to point out the fact that I was pretty spot on with that list in the beginning.
Look, It's me again
You know I've actually gotten a few messages over the past few days regarding my responses to each one of these chapters and how much the readers adored my "Reviews".
It's nothing if not fuel to continue doing this.
As before, I am writing out my responses to this particular chapter as I read it, so the reactions and words you are seeing are my actual, un-edited reactions.
With that said.
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Not.
Cold like my heart, when it comes to this story.
Or something.
He needs more, maybe if we add more the weight will kill him!
Yeah Rarity, you stupid, low-class bitch. Get with the times, jesus. How are you not up to date on every detail of Silver Haze's life before coming to Equestria?
Oh, wait.
None of us are, because we weren't told jack shit about the islands.
Perhaps he should have just died on the island, retarded Applejack. We'd all be better off.
Wait...
He can glare at Rarity...but not AJ?
How the hell are we even supposed to know, we have no idea where they're all sitting, or even what the damn train looks like.
Actually, from here on out, I'm going to just imagine the train is a giant dildo.
Probably wouldn't be too outlandish compared to other aspects of the story.
I feel like Twilight is going to realize Silver Haze is an asshole this chapter.
He is none of these things.
He's the most bigoted, racist, dense, sexist, objectifying piece of shit that Equestria has ever had the displeasure of knowing.
He's black with red stripes in his hair.
He's the farthest thing from it, actually.
Maybe Twilight will finally come to her senses. Though...maybe that's too much to ask for. Considering how the
conflictAttempt at a conflict, between Celestia and Silver ended in the last chapter...I'm not getting my hopes up.In fact I never really have had high hopes for this story, I think the best way to end it would be with Silver Haze getting a bullet in the brain.
Finally some fucking truth.
It's ok Twilight, when the guy who's supposed to love you is banging some other chick, it's normal to start doubting his feelings for you.
Wait, hold up one goddamned second.
I though that Alicornia was previously unknown to the inhabitants of Equestria, save Celestia and Luna...?
This.
Just.
Grah.
How the fuck would Luna not know, It isn't like this is all set a week after Nightmare Moon returned, she's had...what, a year or two to get adjusted? I mean i can understand the speech thing, but as a goddamned princess I would think she would have read up a bit on how the laws have changed and all that jazz.
Of course, you've written Luna as an ignorant drunkard, so why the fuck should we try to put logic into this.
Hell, for all I know, Nightmare Moon was only defeated last month, because you've given us shit for a timeline throughout this story.
We all are.
Because he's a fucking asshole.
I say again...because he's an asshole.
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My predictions for the Crystal Empire.
1. Cadance's character will probably be absolutely ruined.
2. Shining Armor is going to clash with Silver/ Think he's a fucking asshat (Rightly so.)
3. Twilight is going to have some sort of breakdown because she realizes that Silver Haze is an asshole.
You didn't write this part, did you.
I'm 99% sure it was this 'Boyfriend' of yours.
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I hate Silver Haze so fucking much.
Just.
Everything has to be sexual with you, doesn't it?
I've also stopped bothering with calling out the numerous context changes.
Of course he's glaring at you, jesus. You're fucking his sister and the Princess of The Night at the same time.
You stupid motherfucker.
Challenges?
You...just, you truly amaze me.
It isn't a challenge, he's mad at you because you're TWO-TIMING HIS SISTER
I wouldn't be too surprised if he ended up banging Cadance.
What was it I said about Cadance's character being ruined...?
Silver Haze, your mere existence breaks protocol.
I tried so hard to understand what was going on here and all I could imagine was Candace wiping Shining's ass with a baby wipe.
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He isn't trying to assert dominance, you stupid bastard.
My god this just...
And having him say "Cute" is just fucking stupid.
Silver haze isn't this great, powerful, god-like deity.
He's a rude, petulant, arrogant, racist, two-timing, son of a bitch.
He deserves to die in a gas chamber, slowly, painfully and in great agony.
"You're mad at me for two-timing your sister, so I'm going to almost break your bones so that you'll shut up about it because I don't think I've done anything wrong."
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She must be too blinded by Silver's unfathomable sexual appeal to realize he's an asshole.
What's something is that she hasn't fucking killed you.
She's the ruler of Equestria too, so she could get away with it.
She finally is realizing what an asshole you are.
Good for her.
Of course you did.
God forbid you don't screw something for one night, right?
This'll be interesting.
Me after finishing a Silver Haze chapter.
I know for a fact you didn't write this particular part.
There is no way in hell you were able to put words together like that, it simply isn't possible.
You had someone else write this for you.
I found the earlier used GIF in video form, just for this.
I don't understand the need for this, we already knew where we were...
You didn't write this...
I just- There's no way.
I'm thinking you had the 'Boyfriend' do it for you.
Twilight isn't fragile.
In fact, Twilight is one of the strongest characters in the show. I don't remember her having a breakdown during the Tirek situation and that was pretty goddamned dire.
This version of Twilight, that you have conjured up and shit out?
She's not fragile either, she's just an idiot.
Twilight hasn't ever really hesitated to go to Celestia when she truly needed help...so...
You forgot to tell her not to hook up with two-timing dickweeds.
It is stupid, you're right.
I'd feel stupid too if i just realized I'm letting a big asshole bang me constantly and basically being his whore.
She can though...without question.
Also, I feel like "Two-Timing Asshole" was put in there because I have used that term so much. Maybe this is fact, maybe it isnt, either way. It's nice to finally be reading something that makes sense, even if it's only like...one sentence.
As i read this, I feel like maybe the boyfriend (Because he's very obviously the one who is writing this part.) Secretly holds a ton of hate for this story, and he is venting that opinion via Celestia.
Oooo~ It's like a soap opera or something.
Everything, Celestia.
Everything.
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If he loved you he wouldn't be banging Luna, and going straight to banging her when he couldn't find you after five seconds of looking.
It's called being an asshole, Twilight.
That's because he's an asshole who doesn't want you to realize he only wants you for sex.
If you respected her, you would slaughter Silver Haze.
Twilight would survive.
He's like a bad drug, you don't realize he's bad for you until you've been away from him for a good while.
This isn't even logical.
Nothing in this Silver Haze nightmare is or ever has been.
That's not what you were saying when you assaulted him in the last chapter, burned him terribly and blew a hole in the castle wall.
The best resolution in this case would be a firing line and Silver Haze up against a brick wall.
No.
This was so rushed I don't even know what to say.
On his what?
His ego?
His eye?
His dick?
Probably his dick.
This is just...
I'm too tired at this point to nitpick, so I'll just sum this all up in a few words.
This is shit.
Maybe he'll bang Sunset Shimmer.
Silver Haze's reaction.
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Some bad qualities?
Silver Haze as a whole is nothing but bad qualities.
There's not a single redeeming thing about this prick, he's just awful all around!
Not when you do it like you have done here.
Silver Haze is a flaw.
Well at least you did that right.
You gave him asshole qualities and now he's an asshole.
All the time*
You need a reality check or something, like...seriously.
HA, I FUCKING KNEW IT!
Honey, we would all prefer a polished pile of cow shit over your writing, I'm sorry.
It's harsh, but it's true.
Because all great writers just shit out something worthless when they can't think up a way to branch from one thing to the next, in a story.
I'll be here...
On a closing note, I would like to point out something.
Having your boyfriend write almost the whole chapter for you, doesn't mean you're getting better as a writer, It just means that you're having someone else do your shit.
Hey everypony
this weeks chapter may be a bit late, some...uh, personal problems are holding me up on this one, as well as a bit of writers block for where the story is going to go from here on out, I don't wana keep jumping to repeats of cannon events, so I'm having some serious thoughts about what is going to be done with haze in the future. parhaps a new story might pop up during this time, but you can expect a new chapter at the latest by the end of this week.
I love all of you my readers. Truely for giving this story a chance.
Dear author,
Please, please, please, please stop
It's not even funny anymore
Thank fuck this isn't relevant anymore!
4956610 You sir, deserve a motherfucking grammy!
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Well, if thats the case, I'm MAKING IT RELEVANT AGAIN!
SILVER HAZE IS BACK IN ACTION!!!
Ready to write!
New Chapter Up!
Sorry for long unforseen stoppage of new content, but IRL problems kept me away (see authors note)
But silver haze is coming back, and you can expect a new chapter every now and again from here on out, once every 2 weeks, why 2 weeks...well I might have something special planned every one week for you...
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wow, this comment section has a wonderful comedy fic!
I was seriously laughing, nice fic sir.
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oh dear Luna these comments...I swear I don't even have to add them to my read it later list! So damn funny!
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Oh fuck you.
4945730 In that case, you shouldn't write stories. Sorry pal, but we're the audience, we're booing your works, and honestly, YOU SUCK. Until you can write for the audience and not for yourself, please step out that door over yonder. Either that or seek help--we cannot stand to see you descend down this path and not improve. I'd suggest getting a fresh idea or two--start with a one-shot that doesn't involve your alicorn OC. Make the one-shot about Cheerilee in class, Rarity making a dress, SOMETHING, FOR PETE'S SAKE!
Writing for yourself gets you nowhere. You posted this on public domain, and to be very blunt, nobody likes you because of what you crank out. Sorry for being harsh, but not improving's a pet peeve of mine and I hate seeing other authors think that nothing else matters in the world then telling everybody about your super-cool OC.
Let me repeat: seek help, start a one-shot, and then come talk to me. I've done this mistake before, and I am doing my damnedest to keep others from doing the same.
There is a significant problem with your story when the comments are much more fun to read, dood.
I feel the need to comment with this because its been brought up a few times now.
YES I AM A GIRL! Not, a guy, not a "Dude"
It really doesn't mean anything, but just so that everyone knows and has the proper info.
Anyway, enjoy the new chapter!
(> Silver Haze
5325422 Where have you made this mistake before?
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I dread to see what he was like originally. I was intrigued what could possibly have deserved 3 thumbs up and 59 thumbs down.
This sentence is hilarious and right where i gave up. He really said "he asked no one in particular"?
Before Reading:
First mistake! Didn't even capitalize the A! No periods where needed, It's "King Sombra". You also tried the 7th harmony approach, wow. There are so many things wrong with this story, and I haven't even gotten the the actual story!
>Story is almost half a year old and people still don't see that the author is just a troll
gg brony community
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Hi there.
Look, I know I've been called this ALOT over these two stories, but I have yet to get any managible feedback on how to fix the story, I've tried to fix it myself, and I feel I am improving (albit slowly...writing never was my strongest point) but rater then just calling me a troll, could you maybe give me some hint on how to fix it? I want to make this story good, and I've almost given up on it SO many times, but I want to do it, and comments like this, I am sorry, don't really help. Hell at least the people insulting the story have the decency to put something in there I can use to try and improve.
So either PLEASE give some usible critisism, or don't wast your energy commenting.
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You want advice? Alright. I'm taking you seriously here, ok? So I want you to read this, for reals. I'm going to give you actual advice here.
Ok, here's what I want you to do.
Grab a blanket, a comfy chair, some hot cocoa(marshmallows are essential), get your boyfriend and snuggle up to him. Don't even look at the bottom of this comment until you've done all this.
You ready?
Good.
Alright, here's my advice.
Alright, so you know how that when you view your story? Well, as the writer of it, you get bonus features! In fact, it has little boxes on it you can use to submit your story, add/delete chapters, and other stuff too!
Now, one of these boxes says "Revoke Submission". I know this sounds dark and ominous, but trust me, click it. It will take your story down, but it's necessary for the next step.
Now, once you've taken it down, Take. A. Break. The creative juices need time to replenish, y'know? Just take a good, long haitus. Maybe a month or two. Don't even use fimfiction. Maybe make a blog post once you haitus starts, but nothing else.
Alright, home stretch. Finally, once your break is finished, get back on fimfiction. Then, leave the site because you are an absolute disgrace, literally the worst I have ever seen, and I once read "Paradox goes to Ponyville".
Good lord, please stop writing.
~ TOOWC