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TrollestiaSubject
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TrollestiaSubject
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My futa-Radar led me astray AGAIN, dood!
Was kinda hoping Twilight would atleast get to poke Maud back... but... oh well... This was definitly a "Reader Beware" situation for me, dood.
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She does, in the prologue at least...
4365432 I may need to read that part, dood. I don't see it in the story itself.
4365445 it's over there in a kind of absolutely non-secrete Easter egg, Pinkie even helps her.
4365456 I think found it... it's three lines of you telling me that Twilight raped everyone with two dicks... I can't do anything with that considering you have like 9k words of Twilight getting dicks by Maud and Pinkie, dood.
4365469 I tried to keep the ending classy, dood!
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\Faved. I can't even describe how faved this is.
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"Rainbow Dash, you should be more respectful with the legacy of ancient civilizations." Applejack tipped in, after she and Pinkie had searched all over the area without finding more relics. <-- who is saying this?
Rainbow Dash tried closing her eyes and wake up, but that was very ineffective. Her raging boner was still pointing upwards, almost menacing her.
Shouldn't this have the human or anthro tag on it?
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Applejack said that.
Yuck... Humans..
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MOAR MAGGOTS!
4366236 maggots and incestuous foalcon got cut off. I had to save something for a second part.
4366065 Okay, I guess you weren't going with her accent even though you did elsewhere, which is kinda confusing.
4366483 No, actually she was trying a non-accent speaking there, but later she just forgot, because the orgy and so.
Skene's Gland, not the pee hole. What you were describing is the urethra, which isn't where female ejaculate comes out of. Nice story either way~
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Also, (it was pee)
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Then you should either add a water sports tag or rewrite the sections so it doesn't seem like they're peeing as a result of orgasm. By chance, are you under the impression that a female orgasm is just involuntary urination?
4372775 No, but this is porn, and I think I said over there that this goes under the category of exaggerated porn, where female orgasms are indeed involuntary urination and such things. In fact more engrossing porn tropes lie ahead, like pleasurable intrauterine sex and belly lumps by anal sex. I'm actually surprised for someone complaining for forgetting a watersports tag after all that, but yes, it needs one.
The term pee hole wasn't added lightly, but the medical term for body parts didn't seem appropriated for the garrison-ish tone of the story, and while I avoided words like cook, or plot because I didn't know how to justify them inside the story, or quotes like "her penis" that are kind of mind crashing. I tried to sound vulgar and crude for the most part.
While Black Diamond Dog was inspired by Black Dog hentais, I would like to imagine this one with imagery by John K Peta. I wasn't actively looking for a watersport tag, and while that reference is probably too little like to add it, I'm gonna add it because I'm kinda junkie to warnings now, but I'll keep the "non realistic porn" out of the list because it's kind of redundant.
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Fair enough, but there's an issue with this particular porn trope you've got.
I think it would be wise just to prevent people from thinking you described them peeing as an orgasm. If that's the intended fetish, then fine, but you described it as if that's just what happens. And I'm not complaining, I was trying to correct a potential misconception.
Yes, but at least that kind of makes sense, because it's at least in the same hole. Making your story have female orgasms that are just involuntary urination is kind of like making a story where a guy cums out of his ass instead of his cock.
That image by Cobalt Snow doesn't even begin to address the issue I took up. I know that excessive cum is unrealistic, but it's not flat out wrong like this one is. Also, I wasn't against your terminology. Calling it a pee hole is fine, the problem is that the female ejaculate doesn't come out of the pee hole. You say you were just expressing a trope, but you didn't exactly have a problem making the male orgasm work like it's supposed to. Eh... But again, you already described that you're going with the involuntary urination thing 'cause it's a trope. I guess my beef is more with the trope itself, so sorry to have wasted your time.
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Damn, this story was hawt as hell, faved and following...
But, maybe it's in your best interest to hook up with a proofreader?
4376853 Often someone offers help in comments section, or mark plain mistakes, but not many people looks to proofread silly clopfics, or have the time to do so an almost 16k words one. So I rather go the easy way, publish as soon I can, enjoy of the brief glory that the main page brings, and hope for an audience that's not that much into English anyway.
What a silly bastard I am. No, but really, anyone is welcome to help. Just have in mind I'm the one here that has made more proofreaders jump through the window.
Holy fuck fucking fuck! It just kept going, I lost count of how many orgasms I had. Thumbs up!!!!
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Just as planned.
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So can I vote for that Fountain of Youth fic, or was that shot down already? This was a great fic, and I hope to see more. Faved and a follow.
Well... THis got me going. Besides the small spelling errors, I enjoyed this story. :P
You need an editor .
Complete rubish.