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This story is a sequel to When All You Have Is Memories


It has been two hundred years since Fluttershy passed on. Her dear friend Discord, however, is still as lively as he was the day they first met. Unfortunately, it hasn't been easy getting used to the fact that she is dead, and Discord is struggling to move on.

As he remembers her one day, two centuries after her passing, he is visited by another immortal. One who, much like himself, was once a force of evil who was redeemed. And one who, just like him, has lost ponies she loved to the ravages of time.

This story is a sequel to When All You Have Is Memories. Reading it is not required, though it is strongly recommended.

In addition, this story follows the events of the S3 finale, but ignores S4.

Finally, this story features Nyx from Past Sins. Nyx and past Sins belong to Pen Stroke.

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my feels hurt. i liked this story, i think you did well on it.
i have a headcanon that they could visit them in the dream realm or create a spell that lets them see them.

ya not this isn't liquid pride man these are tears :fluttercry: screw discord "not being in his character" so you really think that he would not be saddened by fluttershy's death; because I think that he would be broken by it. But man that was a pretty good short story to follow up on the last one :pinkiesad2:

I don't feel that Twilight could play the role that Nyx does here, nor do I feel that Nyx is exactly an OC... she's a variant of Nightmare Moon, so more of an AU canon character than an OC. And Twilight has no past history of being a bad guy, so whoever told you that she could play the same role as Nyx does here is just plain wrong.

Discord is a hard character to get a handle on when he's being serious, because in canon he almost never is. But canonically, he wanted friendship badly enough to more or less give up being openly a bad guy despite the fact that he plainly doesn't think creating chaos or disrupting ponies' lives is wrong, to the point where when an opportunity to get rid of Celestia, Luna, and the artifacts of the Elements of Harmony was handed to him gift-wrapped by an old plot of his coming to fruition at an unexpected time, not only did he not take the opportunity, but he actually acted to help Twilight defeat his own plan. He's an ass and probably always will be, but he's an ass who has sufficiently strong feelings toward his friends that he gave up his entire way of life (mostly). So I think it is perfectly reasonable to imagine that he would still mourn Fluttershy even two hundred years after her death, and that he would sometimes be downright childish about it (ie, yelling at the statue and telling her she is a terrible friend for not responding to him... it's a joke, but there's genuine anger there that she went and died on him, which is a fairly childish reaction.)

This is a good story. Don't sweat it.

Well, this is not a bad story by any means, but it does have room for improvement.

I have to agree with your proofreader when he says that Discord is out of character. The biggest issue being that Discord barely attempts conceal his emotions from Nyx.

Discord's response to Nyx's revelation is also odd. I was frankly disappointed that Discord did not pull Nyx into an awkward bear hug and summon an impromptu celebration of their undying love. A celebration that Nyx would immediately wish to escape.

I was also surprised that Discord did not animate the statue in any way. I figured he would at least give the main six the ability to talk and grant them personalities based on his understanding of them. Nyx would then comment on how inaccurate their personalities are.

Lastly, I felt Nyx was also slightly out of character. In Past Sins, Nyx makes it quite clear that she hates the idea of being royalty. I highly doubt that she would ever want to wear a crown or be addressed as "Princess". Even if she was technically a crowned princess, I should think Nyx would be much more comfortable wearing golden armor and be addressed as "Commander of the Royal Guard."

In any case, thank you for posting this story. I really wish people would write more Nyx stories.
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this is a good story. you did a very good job writing it. i mean yes they both seems a little off near the end.
but this story have fare more good in it than bad so ......

3995138 Thank you sir. You just perfectly summed up everything I hate about this story.

Maybe a second sequel looking at Spike and how he's moved on without Rarity?

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Nyx makes it quite clear that she hates the idea of being royalty. I highly doubt that she would ever want to wear a crown or be addressed as "Princess". Even if she was technically a crowned princess, I should think Nyx would be much more comfortable wearing golden armor and be addressed as "Commander of the Royal Guard."

Complete agreement. I enjoyed the story but cringed when Nyx referred to her " subjects". I can't imagine Nyx calling anyone her subject. Her fellow soldiers yes ( and it is thanks to you,Keaton, that in my headcannon Nyx goes on to command the royal guard)

But subjects? no. Most especially given how closely the phrase " My beloved subjects:" is associated with NM.

This is beautiful. I have to say, I can understand the trouble you had with Discord, he's hard to write since he's so unpredictable, he usually does whatever he damn well pleases, to a degree, and he is rarely if ever serious, so kudos to making him actually feel serious. This was seriously beautiful, I haven't read Past Sins, but this is still beautiful.

You should give yourself more credit for this story. It's beautiful.

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