• Member Since 24th Dec, 2013
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I enjoy writing about ponies. Mostly ponies having about sex.

Comments ( 10 )

...so that happened...

That was your first? I could have said you have been writing these for over 3 months. Very well written. +1

This is a great story, but I do see some errors in it. Also, it feels as if it was a bit rushed. Other than that, I did enjoy it :pinkiehappy:

Rushed. Very rushed.

Well-written, but the lack of any real preceding event to the clop was somewhat disappointing. If Twilight had heard what Rarity said, maybe talked it over with both Rarity and herself a bit, and then accepted, this would feel much less rushed, even if the rest of the story was exactly the same.

This story was rushed, but still good.

It's a good first effort, but you really need to get a proofreader. This is rife with spelling errors (homophones, since you clearly use a spellchecker), and grammar and punctuation problems.

Otherwise, it's good, but almost impossible to get into due to the density of the errors.

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