A RariPie romance
Pinkie Pie has had a crush on Rarity for many months. After discovering Rarity feels the same way, she finds herself tagging along on a business trip to Manehattan.
A city that never sleeps, a city of joys and glee. All with her glamorous new girlfriend by her side. It should be everything she had ever dreamed of. But worries, insecurities, and the strain of trying not embarrass Rarity in polite society soon start to take their toll. If Pinkie really wants this relationship to succeed, she's going to have to drop the frivolity and work harder than she ever has before.
Pre-read by Blue_Paladin42 and jlm123hi, who stop me from writing dumb things.
Picture used with kind permission of Pinkproposal.
Chapters (3)
Eenter-dasting.
*Adds to read-later list*
No comments? Damn. I know dat feel.
Anyway, just wanted to say nice job! Keep writing and.... I don't know... be careful? Develop the characters? Agh, who cares. Have fun with it! Thanks for the read.
Hmmm, I do love Pinkie and Rarity in this. You've managed to convey that they have both been chasing eachother for a while now, each not quite able to make the first move.
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Always interesting when a romance story starts with the subjects getting together.
Neat. I'll be tracking.
Ooh. I stumbled across a new fic that's engaging and well done! Came here through blind-searching Raripie. Hope to see more!
So much potential, but so many things that make this a... let's call it 'less than adequate' shipping story.
There are a few sentence structure problems which break the flow, and Pinkie doesn't seem to be enamoured with Rarity, or vice versa. Not bad for a first try, though.
Oh, Pinkie.
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Thanks!
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Haha, cheers. Might just be the tiredness talking, but I want "be careful and develop the characters" to become a piece of advice for every fic.
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I Love To See You Smile was one of my major inspirations here, so I really appreciate the compliment.
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One day I will sit down to write a thing and not get all pompous and pretentious and try to make it all individual and unique by avoiding genre conventions. But not today.
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Much appreciated!
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Cheers. Shall do my best to provide.
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Headcanon is that all the ponies love a good perv now and then.
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I don't suppose you could do me the kindness of going into a bit more detail? Awkward sentences or some more of of those many things that let the story down? It would be tremendously helpful.
hmm.... sounds interestin so far
; can't wait to read moar on this 
Augh! Great, another ship i now like. I hope you're damn pleased with yourself. Next chapter, please <3 Also, I lovelovelove Pinkies thought process and her trying so hard to be a good pony for Rarity
So cuddly!
Dat cuddle horse. Pinkie is best snuggler.
D'aww. I love the way you write these two. Glad to see the fic continuing!
Is this still being worked on?
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Afraid not.