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Rarity has been under stress recently from overworking, and Pinkie Pie has noticed. Wanting to make her friend happy again, she suggests taking a break from her constant work. Her solution is easy.
Have a girls night out, just the two of them. And through their night, they may come to realise how well they understand each other.
A RariPie story.
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Good story so far, so have a like and a favorite! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Decent story so far, might have lingered a bit too long on Rarity trying to figure out how many bits to bring. I have a feeling the reason Pinkie is so adamant about Rarity relaxing tonight might have something to do with Sweetie Belle's absence. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Well, it'll be interestin to see what surprises this girl's nite out is goin to bring
How can a goldfish eat ur draft when it's in a bowl
? Anyways so far t girl's nite out is goin good n' it seems that 
is startin to feel somethin for 
but, sadly she's assumin it's t drinks which may or may not be true 
. Well time will tell on that matter maybe yet, it's goin to be interestin ride til then 
Three cheers for TrenderMaud! And if you're going to bring up and then dismiss Cheese (which breaks my heart, BTW), that is exactly how to do it: short and believable.
I have a soft spot for RariPie, and I'm not sure why. I've seen it done nicely a few times, and while there are some incompatibilities there, there are some between every single one of the Mane Six. Plus I sort of like the girliness of it. No one's the "honorary stallion," which always bugs me.
I wanted to wait to the end before giving a thumbs up, so you earned it.
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This story had a lot of changes from the original on the third chapter onwards. Originally, there was going to be a gay pair of OC stallions at the bar (one of which would have been the brother of Rarity's client) who would have come over towards the pair. The brother specifically would have commented to Rarity that he noticed that 'tick' between her and Pinkie, which would have added the little boost to her leaning towards mares thing. Also, he would have been the one to send his sister the letter. Same outcome, but different route. It's part of the reason the third chapter had such a huge gap in update. I wrote it all then went and re-wrote it. Lost a bit of motivation during that phase.
I was contemplating the Cheese thing. I really was. I wanted Pinkie to have been shot down or 'down in the gutter' like Rarity was (she's the most eccentric mare around. How would she lean towards mares otherwise?). And then I did a U-turn from CheesePie. Yeah it was small and believable (I even had ideas to make him married or gay), but the CheesePie. It's gone! No! But it clicked with Trenderhoof from Simple Ways. Two stallions who are also possible love interests. Perfect! TrenderMaud evolved from there because you've gotten me so much into it recently.
RariPie is one of the more 'cute' pairings for me. When I look at Rainbow Dash or Applejack, I don't see cute. TwiDash is only half cute because of Twilight's adorkableness. Pinkie is bigger than cute, so she instantly makes a pairing work for me, and with Twilight's cute factor, it blows through the roof. But Rarity just seems to have that cute factor as well, and when coupled with Pinkie. Oh that HNNG! I've actually had a thought of Rarity being a closet lesbian with Pinkie uncovering her secret, being the mare to 'loosen her up'. A secret relationship goes down and over time, Rarity comes out. That's just heart-warming to think about.
But thanks for reading!
That was adroable! And Raripie does need more attention!
4719140 I actually prefer "not interested" to "gay or married," and I'm talking about blanket solutions, not just CheesePie. I wish more people would do this. I suspect one reason they don't is because it hits too close to home. For one thing, "gay or married" has the implication of "whew! then it's not just me!" whereas "not interested" implies "yeah. It was just you." And the other thing is that practically everybody over the age of 13 has been shot down simply because for one reason or another, the other person's response was just "meh." And it hurts, and I think it's also why a lot of people didn't like "Simple Ways" and don't like Trenderhoof.
I think that in most cases, bringing in another ship to dismiss it isn't necessary. If you're writing RariJack, for instance, you don't need a long list of why AppleDash doesn't work. That has the opposite of the desired effect: it calls attention to it, when the emphasis needs to be on the relationship between the actual couple. I also don't like blackwashing the other potential ship partner (e.g., making him a violent jerk.) Most Pinkie ships simply don't need dismissing another ship nearly as much as they need to demonstrate why Pinkie wants a romantic relationship at all! I don't think her eagerness to be friends = eagerness to be in a romantic relationship, and just once, I would like to see somepony wooing Pinkie thinking, "yeah, but she's friendly and nice to everypony: how do I know she feels differently about me?"
[controversial opinion follows] Cheese ships other than CheesePie DO need some explanation, and I've never seen a better explanation/intro than "just 'cause," with a heavy side order of "I really hate CheesePie." It could be done, but I've never seen it done well. That's just my opinion, but I'm sticking to it. [/end controversial opinion.]
And you'd better have a REALLY good explanation for breaking up a canon couple like Cadance/Shining. "Meh" or "the magic went out of our marriage" won't cut it there.
But in a show that's almost entirely about friendship and has very little reference to romance at all, dismissing other ships just isn't necessary.
Rarity is like my sister is a dirty rotten thief and I am not even going to apologize for yelling at her.
This was a fun ride.
This made me smile! Raripie is a ship that i love, keep up the good work!
This is kind of hard to pay attention to. For one, it feels over-written; there's a lot that could be done to tighten this up. I mean:
Really?
The verb in a dialogue tag should, with very little exception, be "said". It's sort of invisible and serves as a nice transition between dialogue and prose.
I'm also seeing problems with punctuation, and . . . well, really, I just wish you'd given it another look
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A fair point. I don't think I really gave this story a big pre-reading job; I just released it with a few changes at the time. Though I certainly see your point. I used to put words like "asked", "replied", "inquired" and so on every two sentences or so, just because I didn't want to use "said" constantly. I've learnt that lesson now though, so I've no problem with it.
I rarely go over and read my own work. However, maybe I'll go back over this and try to spruce it up. I could always improve my editing and such. No promises though, I'm a lazy guy.
Still, thanks for pointing it out.
I liked it its been a while since i read a good raripie story.
Sooo... here we are. Hm. I like it. A lot.
I'm still considering if Pinkie is still Pinkie throughout the whole story, being gentle and calm at some times, but then again, she can be gentle and calm, she's proven that at some points. I do appreciate that she didn't want all 'classy and sophisticated' to impress Rarity and win her over, it just wouldn't have felt right and I read that sort of ooc a lot. (Always gets me curious why someone attempts to write Pinkie when he or she doesn't really want Pinkie...)
I also approve of her naivety. A lot of people forget about that, too.
The build-up was funny and entertaining. As you already explained in some of your comments - it's a rarely used approach if someone just shooting another one down because of being not interested at all. It's a nice touch.
About Cheese-ships: I think it would be a lot easier with some character who wanders around or at least, is able to do so. Zecora maybe? Daring? Hehehe... DaringCheese... images in my head, they're hilarious...
For AppleDash not being cute: For the most part, that's right, of course. Put I like to imagine AJ having a rather soft and probably even girly side. Being a hard-working, down-to-earth farmmare doesn't keep one from wanting to be treated like a lady once in a while, does it?
Anyway. RariPie is a couple I'm growing fond of more and more. Actually, that's kind of a problem, since I'm already fond of FlutterPie. I'm curious how that will work out... anyway - great story.
Thank you.
I love how Rarity is all protective. 😍