• Member Since 7th Jul, 2013
  • offline last seen Oct 9th, 2019

Cydox Crescent


This cosmic dance of bursting decadence and withheld permissions twists all our arms collectively. But, if sweetness can win, and it can, then I'll still be here tomorrow to high-five you yesterday.

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I screwed up. Bad. Like, the worst screwup in all of Equestria. And I don’t know if I can fix it. I want to, but I have no clue how to. I mean, how would it look if I came crawling back to her now, after the way I acted? She'll hate me no matter what I do. I’m just a bad friend. Just a bad friend that deserves to be alone.

Rainbow Dash has many friends, but five mares are closer to her than anypony else. Then one of them confesses how they feel, and she doesn't know how to handle it. How could anypony know how to react?


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LOVE the Story man :pinkiehappy: Keep up the good work

Why haven't I follow you yet?:pinkiegasp:

3659093 not a chapter, man, don't confuse people. Oh, and thanks for Prereading.

3659156 :twilightblush: Oh sorry about that and your welcome

Anyone notice the two bad ass story's on this guys page?
This guy or gal has talent

Okay...the way that beginning and the final scene was done...that was pretty brilliant of you. Well done! :pinkiehappy:

A quality take on a classic scenario.

“Maybe she running late. Oh oh oh, or she found something! Like are really cool rock, or a tub of frosting!” /quote]

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Treading lightly, she walked closer to Pinkie’s door, which was closed. As she neared she could hear a soft voice coming from inside./quote]

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otherwise, AWESOME!! This deserves a favorite. And a follow. The way you wrote Rainbow as a character, was, WOW! :rainbowwild::rainbowwild::pinkiehappy:

3665362 Fixed!! I wonder how that slipped by the prereaders...

Hnnng this is way to good

By about halfway through, I found the relationship between the two wasn't displayed as deeply as it probably should have as well as Rainbow struggling with her own inner turmoil. But the last bit, the Pinkie/Rainbow confrontation was handled very well, I found, and makes me wish the set up was a bit stronger to really deliver a stronger payoff at the end.

Still, I know I see some fantastic underlying potential in these stories that you have written so far. I rather enjoy your writing, and I look forward to seeing how you will improve as a writer (and I know you will). I think I'll give you a follow.

Thanks for writing,
~SilentBelle

Sowecoprajliwewabeofunev Party! I can read it. It's the same thing except the first two letters of each word put together. I almost skipped it and assumed it was just random letters, but I got it. Clever.


EDIT: I don't know what happened with that u thing I put. Lol.

3859860 :pinkiegasp: MY MADNESS IS UNDERSTOOD! :pinkiehappy:

Hmm, I enjoyed this. I have a minor gripe, but when Fluttershy slapped RD it kinda broke my immersion in the story for a bit. I just couldn't see her doing that.

3919229 Head canons.... they be a misery.

For this story, I didn't like how you tabbed each paragraph, and didn't double space them like other stories on this site. This would be ideal for a written book, but for a Fim Fic story, it just looks sloppy and hard to read.

3998112 Hmm, I'm sorry, but it's just that I am used to books. It's easier to read for me. You do raise a point, so I'll see to spacing it.

3998211 even if you don't take it (which I'll understand, it's a big nitpick, but a nitpick all the same) then I'm glad I could point it out.

4023296 I hate when people say she's dumb.

Dang it! Why do shipping fics do this to me!?

4088597 Because it's warm and fuzzy and in this case kinda well written?

I don't know why, but for some reason the story looks shinier now. Maybe it's just me...

Also:
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After a decent amount of time upon my read later list, I'm quite happy to say I loved the read! :pinkiehappy: Really, great job on your story here! Now for the finishing touches...on to 50 likes for chu! :twilightsmile:

4540170 Hahaha thank you. :twilightsmile: ... :unsuresweetie: dang it ... I must get back to writing that spikiara fic ... oh but procrastination is so much more fun. :ajsleepy:

4541223 Amen to the procrastination! :rainbowlaugh:

the premise, by that i mean the story's description thing, didn't really sell me on reading it, but i thought i should give it a chance anywho. oh, how stupid i was for even doubting it. i really enjoyed reading this dude. it's...it's freaking amazing.

4738306 Hehe I wanted to take a boring premise and make it ... me

4738318
you did it well then. you did it well.

4835405 Hehe thanks. :twilightsheepish: I don't take ships for granted.

"I've never once asked any of them out. They all came to me, and then left. And every time it happened, it hurt more than the time before.”

I know what this feels like, it makes you feel worthless and undeserving and it fucking sucks:pinkiesad2:. This was a good story, well done.

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