Hello, my name is Skylar, and until that day, my life was uneventful, but this is not about the uneventful parts, this is about the events that changed my life. Let’s take a few steps back, OK a lot of steps… heck, let’s do a whole back-flip.
OK, this might sound crazy, but I turned into a pony. Of course if you could have seen me, that would be pretty obvious. point is that I was a pony, and I had no idea what was going on. sure this whole ordeal is over, but I'm not gonna tell you the story. If I told you the story, it's not as exciting, cause I know what happens next.
So I'll let past me do the talking. He tells this story a lot better anyway, well he sees the story better, I'm writing it in his vision, make sense? Good, now before I give him the spotlight, and just step out of the scene, I'm not great, or even good. I'm decent, adequate. I'm boring.
But between a cross-country road-trip, and escaping from anti-pony hate groups my adventure was anything but boring. Oh, did I mention that I wasn't the only one? To turn into a pony that is. This is sounding more Cliche the more i think about it. So hunker down as i tell my story.
The likes must triumph!
Something that did strike me is the entire "Omnivore to herbivore" thing. I'm pretty sure herbivores don't actually have a disgust for the meat of other animals, but it's just the fact that their bodies can't properly digest the food. For example, it's deadly to drink anti-freeze due to the chemicals within it being harmful to the make-up of our bodies, but apparently it actually has a very sweet and soothing taste/smell. THE MORE YOU KNOW!
Nope. Nope to everything you've written in this story.
Um... you know what'd make this story much more palatable? If I didn't get confronted with the rambling incoherent mess of your description. It's... ugly. Even more so due to the lack of proper capitalisation, but mostly because it's one big lump of text. From my cursory readings of the inscriptions upon the Description Monolith, I have come to the following conclusions:
The description doesn't actually describe much about the story, and it's written in such a way as to make the entire thing very difficult to read. It also does not compel me in any way to read your story. Moreover, it suggests that you are not a very good author, going on first impressions alone, and it's definitely offputting. You could probably fix this by writing a description that actually makes a reader want to look at your story, through hints and wordplay, and draws them in by making them as interested in your story concept as you are. A certain sense of showmanship is required, but generally a 'less is more' approach is a good one. Tease, be cryptic if you have to, but for the love of Celestia don't ramble on like this.
I've got to dash to the shops, but I'll take a look at the story itself afterward. Oh, and regarding your short bio? This is an alot.
4.bp.blogspot.com/_D_Z-D2tzi14/S8TRIo4br3I/AAAAAAAACv4/Zh7_GcMlRKo/s400/ALOT.png
I believe you mean 'a lot'.
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'll take this intoconsideration! Thanks for the facts!
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Hehe, yeah. Sorry about that. I'll attempt to fix this right away.
Please make your OC meet mine please?! It would be super awsome! And I could see it now! :D
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that sounds like a splendid idea! i could have that the first pony i meet, i would love to use your character, but I'd need a lot of info about her! if you message me we can discuss it!
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Damn, gotta get used to people actually listening to what I say. It's a lot less ugly with actual paragraphing. Sorry if I was a little abrupt, I'm sorta used to bullheaded authors who'd rather delete their comments sections than listen to any criticism of their baby. Your attitude is pretty sterling for a new author, gotta say
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I know im not great,and any advice at all is welcome. It was good advice after all. And you weren't abrupt, you were honest.
Also thanks. It kinda pains me to see a lot of other authors reject help with their story, it just ain't right.
Well, there would be no use in denying help.
I wonder,can anyone guess what I'm doing with the chapter names?
You have some serious capitalization issues.
WEIRDNESS POWER!!
Nerds + Brony = EPICNESS
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yeah, i know...
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yep! though no matter what others say, i don't know all that much.
-Lord suder- don't be to harsh. This is a story with fantastic potential. Nice constructive critsism and also, that is 'ALOT of fire' vs. A LOT of fire'
-Derpy scarlet, you just need more thickness, emothion, and mainly detail detail detail.
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Derpy Starlet* not scarlet. it's ok though.
i know i need detail, I'm trying harder to put in that detail. I will keep in mind to try to add more emotion and thickness along with my detail.
I never knew you had a fighting-dark side in you. And this chapter felt short( not complaining that is) but I liked it.
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it's not a fighting side, but my dark side isn't so much as dark as fed up. there wasn't much of a fight, it consisted of me dodging and throwing a can lid and a kick. i mostly just used them against themselves. i could have probably done more, but i'm not a fighter, i have no desire to fight fire with fire.
Yay
, new chapter! 
I feel so loved.
I like it so far. I sometimes get confused when u and me start talking but after a while I start getting used to it. And I can't wait to see the look on peoples faces when we go to a nearby restaurant. But if this was real, I would be nervous when we see new faces. But after a while. I'll get used to it. Still waiting eagerly for the next chapter.
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Duly noted
...
well, that was a VARY smug thing to do
hehe. Just two questions: 1, how did the police AND the news reporters believe the story and arrived so so fast? 2, is she a she or a he? You lost me at "me being a smart guy" ... forgive me for being oblivious, but I needed to ask
twistnerd:
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technically both. but I'm a girl in body, guy in mind for this story. for now. as for the police, let's say that this guy was very vague in his police call and they just came over. the news reporters happened to be in the area and seeing police zooming somewhere looks like it could be a good story. the situation was just right, unfortunately for me, like things usually are.
What just happened?
Why?
I would like to have my OC in this story and contiue with this but, what happened? suddenly she meets the first pony and its over? just that!?
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what you have to understand is that this is the epilogue. This comes after the story, and the story was cancelled. There would be much more to the story, much, much more. But I overestimated what I could do and I cant finish it. There would have been he rest of the journey, and various things to overcome, but I cancelled it all and skipped to the epilogue. Because the epilogue is important for other stories, but nothing else is too important for other stories. Im sorry, but I just couldnt handle what I was taking on.
4163511 I understand. I just freak out when stories are canelled, i have a thing about uncomplition. Sorry thouhg i kind of overreacted...
4163511 I REALLY over reacted. I think it may have been i woke up sleepy and sick.
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I understand, I overreact quite a bit myself. But what else would you expect from a person like me, I have plenty of problems.
4164197 Cool. Also, will you work on more stories?
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I have about 29 planned stories, and some will be out soon. Im working on a specific one right now, and I have others started!
4164231 Cool, also could you include my OC if there are any stories similar to this one that could have imputs like that? Most of the stuff about him is in my stories.
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None really have premises like this one, but I can make appearances. Ive been meaning to read your stories for a while now. Ill be sure to tell you when I write him in any [f them.
4164289 I am actually actively working on the next chapter, i also aplogize for the mess that is the first three chapters. Luckily it gets better as it goes.
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Good to note.
4135042I too require clarification!
CLARIFICATIOOOOONNNNNNN!!
... Please?
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um, what about?
4659911 oh, about the gender thing? Well he was a guy, but the body of the pony and mind accompanying it is that of a mare, and in the end it turns out that shes a girl, because of some things. Sometime in the middle that I didnt get to, discord split the personalities, after they had merged. Leaving two different beings, but they were both essentially the same. They only actdd different. Thus why skylar took on so many of starlets traits.
The only thing I'm confused about now is why this all happened in New York, when the show is produced in Vancouver, Canada.
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Because discord wanted a crowd, and he was drawn to the city because of its size and proximity to other large cities. That, and a little somehing not really mentioned but a major part in this, fate.
ok that was pretty funny.
This fic is... okay I suppose. Starlet leans towards being too untouchable, and it hasn't really got much into her life besides interacting with her various family members. And a convenience store, I guess. The grammar could use a little more love. (What about my "a" pony? Next to my "b" pony?) The plot seems to be a "Robotnik wants to destroy our house!" but that's only if it doesn't go anywhere after this.
>I'm so glad I didn't use my debit card
>the CIA will never find me now
>I said after posting pony selfies on Facebook
The story failed moderation, but then passed it by jury rigging in the Ponyearthverse. That's...
Let's just say there are certain things in relation to that, which are a whole lot less respectable than this story.
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It not being one of my more respectable stories is more than enough for it not to be respectable. And it's technically not in the pony earth verse, just one like it.
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Yeah, I'll be honest, when I wrote this I didn't even think of that.
And those were the only two that needed direct responses. As for the humor, I'd be lying if I didn't like some of the stuff I put in. But at the same time there's a bunch of mindless joking.