• Member Since 31st Jul, 2013
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Carnifex


Actually an artist, mainly hanging around to get more inspiration.

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One fine morning, Lavender wakes up with hiccups. How will she cope with them?

This is a short side-story to As Sweet As Lavender.
Proof-reading provided by Eeveexpert.

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Comments ( 33 )

Such a cute story. Looking forward to more. :raritywink:

This story was adorable! Thumbs up! :pinkiehappy:

The last scene gave me diabeetus.

cute. I love the story. great job!:pinkiehappy:

You, sir! Cute story:moustache:

That was... Absolutely Adorable!:pinkiehappy:

You write as good as you draw, keep it up!

dawwwwwwwwwwwwww

Max

Itisyoooouuu..... I love you so much for this

HHHHHHHNNNNNNGGGGGGG!
dammit! Your art was killing me already. NOW THIS!

I wondered at first how I nearly missed a Draconian Soul story.

And then I realized, this was from the original creator of Lavender! Your art touches my heart, and you are no slouch as a writer either! A simple and funny story about a very persistent case of hiccups.

Seems that Lavender takes after Aunt Sweetie when it comes to causing trouble though. :P

Rock on!
-Lumino

Sweetie brightened up. “So that’s why my hiccups always went away after we did some good crusading! See Lavvy? I told you crusading always helped me.”

I died laughing.

This is outstandingly good. I love Lavender so much, she's so qwoot. :rainbowkiss:

*Hiccup*

Blast it.

Short, cute and without all the nonsensical crap the other lavender fic has.
A+!

not very hard to see how THAT :raritydespair: scared away the hiccups

Thanks for reminding me that I have a story I have to finish writing. Nice cute side story that I WISH I could have written :raritydespair:

But this was good. I don't expect this to be your last one :rainbowkiss:

"And they were the best pancakes she had eaten all day." Somehow, I don't think that's too impressive...

Great job on the story! It was sweet, and even without reading any other Lavender stories I was able to understand what was happening. :pinkiehappy:

That sir helped fill the void while waiting for as sweat as lavender to update. My F5 key thanks you.

There were several errors here and there but the story was still good.

D'aww... :twilightsmile:

A most adorable story. You should write fanfiction more often, Carnifex.

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Mind pointing them out? I'd like to avoid them, should I write again.

3393859 Rarity and Lavender speaking in the same paragraph, a few punctuation issues here and there and the hiccups being written in the middle of dialogue is an issue. I can detail a lot more on a Google Doc (or just preread for the future should you ever write again).

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I'll keep the offer for pre-reading in mind. Thank you.

3394301 nah, don't thank me. It's just an offer. :twilightsmile:

Lavy is best pony/dracony.:yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

I do plan to read this at some point, but my priority is to actually finish reading the original FoE, considering all that I'm doing with it... Regardless, I thought I'd just stop in and say holy crap has this gotten popular fast. I've been listening to Eeveexpert talk about his prereading venture with you since he started. I offered to preread too for ya via him, but I never got a link prior to its release, thus I figured it didn't need my eyes. However, as Love Lost's pre-reader, and a big fan of your art, my services are always available to you if and when you need them. I'll post again once I have a chance to give this a read through and let you know what I think. :twilightsmile:

(Alondro is inspired to trollish evil) Heh heh heh... :trollestia:

>>>Eating with griffins – When to say No.>>>

Excerpt from pg. 14: "If a griffon should happen to comment that it believes you would likely taste good spit-roasted with an orange teriyaki glaze, this is yet another time when a pony would generally say "No", unless you happen to be into that sort of thing, in which case make sure your will is properly updated or the government will get all your stuff. Celestia needs cake money, after all."

:trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia:

Aww that's just so cute that Lavender had the hiccups.

:pinkiegasp:that was sooo cute!:pinkiesad2: i loved it from beggining to end

This is probably one of the most realistic fics I've ever read.
I absolutely love it! :raritywink:

:duck: "You gave her hiccups"
:moustache: "Who me?"
:raritystarry:" Yes you !"
:moustache: "And you scared them away?"
:raritywink: "yes I did"
:moustache: "You need more make up?"
:raritystarry: Spikey!

I saw lavender's name in the description, #instafav
All honesty though It was an awesome story!

The concept was good and the end was funny, but it need a more careful editing to trim the wording in places and catch mistakes. "They were slightly stickier than the ones she was used to (eating, made) by Spike." Is an example of such mistakes.

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