King Sombra and Queen Crysalis invaded Canterlot, when all hope was nearly lost the bearers of the elements fought desperately but one by one they were entrapped in a crystal resin, Twilight was about to have the same fate but Princess Celestia threw herself in front of her student becoming entrapped herself, with no one left to help her she was overpowered by the evil duo.
She was dragged down to the crystal caverns beneath the castle, Tied to a crystal pillar and left to die a slow death, will insanity seep in before her death and take her or will something else arise from the darkness within, only time will tell.
Is not canon plus there will be gore.
Picture: Just a quick knock up design, if anyone thinks they can design an even better Astral by all means go for it, if you want to copy the looks for your own storys I also don't mind
Awesome cant wait for next chapter
This reads a little like Todd McFarlane's "Spawn".
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I'l have to look it up, does that mean this is a bad fic or good fic in you're eyes as I am new to Fic making just for future references, also thanks for the comment
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Oh wait you mean 'SPAWN', I know what you're talking about now I just realized it haha, I think I had too many muffins today sorry,
That to good keep on the good work
No need to worry .the chapter is finished and its awesome keep on going
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Your the greatest
3386238 awe thanks
"you're" is a contraction of 'you are'. You might want to do a find and replace with 'your'
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I seem to be struggling quite a lot with my grammer, this is twice I've had the you're, your problem, I'm not that great with that stuff, most of my stories are like this at the moment but thanks for the comment, I'll probably nit through my chapters again and re-edit them so that they have the correct punctuation, thank you, SERA
A really interesting concept, but you might think about getting a pre-reader ;)
3739542 its an Idea I started a while ago and I am re-reading through these last four chapter, laughing at all the obvious mistakes, I really need to get these edited and spaced out a bit. I think I rushed it a bit too fast.
3739551 It all has to start with a good idea - and that we have! Just take your time, can't wait to read it all once you edited it *g* I'd offer helping, but with my first language being german I don't think I should mess with any story just yet :P
3739574 No worries my friend, I will be trying to edit and bring some new chapters out soon, I will be back at uni so it might be slow but I will do it
You, have no character tags... I didn't even know you could get a story approved without character tags.
3744680 Oh crap your right, this was my second fic I added I am now about to add them haha
3744680 Done, thanks for the tip hehe, sorry for the confusion, even I dont know how I passed without the tags
while this could definitely be improved, i really did enjoy the story. can't wait for the sequel!
When comes the sequel
4562803 for now I have to work on my current stories but this will have a sequal eventually so don't worry, when I do release it I will post a blog about it
you have a lot of run-on sentences. you should fix that.
The nightmare took her
oooooooh fuck night made moon is back
I can't do it, the concept is interesting, but this story NEEDS some serious TLC, it is painful to read.
Long live Astral (until Discord escapes).
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Hello everyone. I did a riffing for this story for Doctor and Ditzy's Science Theater. If you don't know what riffing is, it's MST3K, but with fanfics! So far only the first three chapters are done, but I should have the rest finished soon. Thank you FLUTTERxxDASH for letting me do this story.
Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Huh, it seems like your first image is dead.
Hey everyone! I finally finished riffing this story. Thanks to FLUTTERxxDASH for letting me riff this story! I had a lot of fun doing it.
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 6
Luna came back b4 all this stop dropping random ass plot devices in places that dont make sense
When tha fuck was this her name ?
Do the cracks mean the others will be freed?
One day Twilight, you will be stopped your victims will be saved and I pray someone makes that story.
Not surprised, although I thought it was obvious, maybe it's the armor? The story hasn't revealed if she's wearing armor or not.
I'm more concerned on what Twilight's friends and Celestia's reaction to Twilight will be. If there still alive, but since Nightmare Moon is here I think it's safe to say that Luna is alive.
Although judging by the name of the last chapter I can tell that the ending won't be a happy one.
I wish there was an alternate ending where Twilight frees Celestia and her friends.
Maybe one day someone will make that story.
Also for anyone curious what the is imagine was, here you go:
https://www.deviantart.com/elkaart/art/EVIL-NIGHTMARE-Twilight-Sparkle-360957664