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Darkryt Orbinautz


Still slowly trying to disentangle from MLP. It is ... slow going.

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Rarity, thinking she's found a safe route in the Everfree Forest, invites Rainbow Dash for a walk to take their minds off things. But there, they'll have an experiecne that will alter their perceptions.

Spelling errors in the short description do not bolster confidence...:ajsmug:

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Fixed!

Thank you for taking the time to point that out to me.

great story! i loved reading every bit of it but my only problem is that Dash was the one who wanted the break. it doesnt seem like her

at first I thought that I was going to lose interest but as I read more I could not stop reading, the story pulled me in. Great work!

Comment posted by BoloneyBrony deleted Feb 2nd, 2014
Comment posted by Darkryt Orbinautz deleted Feb 2nd, 2014

this is excellently written, and if it werent a clopfic it would be amazing, amybe you could kind of, make story about the effects of rape, because the ending seemed very realistic, and intriguing, thats my advice :twilightsheepish::rainbowlaugh:

I got all the way through but I dunno this slave thing just doesn't sit right with me

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It's not supposed to have a happy ending.

Just finished and though at times I thought I was done with it I finished and im glad I read this thanks for a fun read

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Your avatar made me read that in Tirek's voice, and it was glorious.

Well... I guess that if you do release a book or books, could you tell me the titles?

The feels!
They hurt!
And so does the dog foot in my back...

Would you mind if I worship this fic?
It is so good!

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Yes, of course! Don't worry, I'll figure something out.

Part of the reason I even started writing fanfiction in the first place was so I could build up a following of fans like yourself to read my books when they come out. :heart:

Oh, but I should mention they won't have erotic components to them like this series does, so if that's a deal-breaker for you ...

Comment posted by kotor511 deleted Jul 21st, 2014
Comment posted by kotor511 deleted Jul 21st, 2014

I'd really suggest you put a link where you say a prequel to "a poison most intimate"

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Is there not a box to the side labeled "Sequels" with a link in it on your screen?

5217982 not on mobile it isn't

wow this sorta reminds me a little bit from Corruption of Champions where Rarity has the Feeder perk and Rainbow Dash got Marble's Milk perk tho addicted to Rarity's milk and not Marble'.

It's been a good fic, unfortunately I'm getting the vibe that all men are pigs, please tell me I'm wrong. Btw I'm a guy.

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Thank you for the kind words, but no. No misandrist undertones were intended in this story. The thugs depicted in Chapter 3 were supposed to be - well, just that. Thugs. Not all men are pigs.

But these guys were.

I prefer small breasts over big ones

This story is fairly old and already completed, I realise. Still, since this features ponies with obvious human characteristics, I would suggest at least considering giving it an "Anthro" tag now that we have one!

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It's supposed to be humans. Granted, when I first started writing "A Poison Most Intimate," I was entertaining the thought of them being humans with pony characteristic - tails, ears, horns, wings, that kind of thing, I've sinced phased that out, but they were never meant to be 'anthro.'

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Really? Sorry for the confusion then. It was mainly when I read Rainbow being called a Pegasus that I thought these were more pony-ish than fully human.

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Well, she does still have wings, and pegasus/weather magic. But she's a human with those features.

At the least, calling her a "pegasus person" is fewer words and easily understandable to someone familiar with the show lore than calling her "one of the weather tribe" or some such.

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Understood. Thank you for clearing that up.

Rarity and Rainbow Dash finished their shopping without further incident. The clerk was kind enough to give them a "Thank you for driving those punks off" discount and gave them 80% off every item they purchased.

Daaaaaaaaaaanm!!!

Despite all these things,

It'd do them no good to go hungry on the walk, darling.

It was the last place most people most people would go for a pleasant, pleasurable outing.

"No. Whatever gave you that idea?" Rarity answered dryly.

Both their noses instinctively started sniffing the air, as a wonderful, intoxicating aroma began to make itself known to them.(——

curling around the their waists and lifting up around their shoulders.

and trying to get their mouths to touch.

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feeling a pain in her chest and a mental spike in her head.

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The tendril stopped just as it exited the bottom

It increased all the way from "less than a half" to three-quarters.

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with all the milk that was in their stomachs and breasts.

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"Oh! Clever!”(—— Dash complimented.

It didn't take them much long to be done,

she was on equal with Rainbow Dash, their breasts and legs meeting at the exact spot.

Rarity couldn't get her mouth to work,

"Hello, Sweetie Belle." Rarity said as Sweetie went to grab her knees. Rarity bent over and gave her a hug.

Sweetie muttered, observing Rainbow. "Isn't that one of your dresses?

"Would you mind staying and giving Sweetie Belle some company?" Rarity asked,

harsh, perhaps, but what options did she have?

Thankfully, Sweetie Belle was fine, though she did seem a little confused.

hopping from her her chair to follow Rarity.

to defend herself. "I-I'm just eager to help out one of my friends! Loyalty and all, right?"

and putting her mouth on Rairty's breast.

Rainbow Dash let go out of her shirt,

for Rainbow to snap her lips around Rarity's breasts

Rarity frowned. "Don't try to do this around.

I’m not really sure about that one.

Rainbow went over to the sink

The woman said. "But if you try to force it to go faster, you might have the baby choke."

A lot of people engage in it this sort of thing

to serve lemonade when Rainbow Dash charged into the room.

So lost in thought was she she didn't see Rainbow's hand reach up and rub her breast lightly.

A half-hour later, the dress was sown, so Rarity decided to take break.

"Oh my goodness, what am I saying?"

As she soon as she felt conscious, she opened her eyes wide.

Isn’t Sweetie Belle in the next room?

She attempted to wipe her mouth of her with her arm,

but that wasn't what was happening at all.

You're bigger than those t-shirts you were wearing make you look."

It had all the force of a bursting geyser.

"Sure!" Dash assured her, placing a hand on Sweetie's shoulder. "Just not right now, okay, kiddo?"

It was a good thing she had put her coat on, as it was more than a little windy and chilly today.

and hurried her way over to the local library,

Rarity muttered. "You know, you've only been drinking more and more milk . . .“ (——

"Yeah." It took Dash a minute to realize the meaning of Rairty's statement. "Oh, that's brilliant!"

and inserted in its appropriate place.

Rarity scoffed and abruptly got up, walking off to the other room to put her things away.

That seemed to do the trick Rarity was hoping for,

That was the kind of expression someone wore when they were about to say something they didn't want to say,

enough it wouldn't look like they were doing anything other than talking.

I know it seems like the only way, but there's got to be something else.

drinking champagne first thing in the morning, for starters.” Rainbow Dash

She was about to jump and struggle for her life when she felt a much softer substance rub against her back.

“Well, when would you rather do it?” Rarity cooed,

Though it does kind of . . . just run out of steam at the end there, doesn't it?

Yeah it does!!

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