Book 1 in the Titans' Orb saga.
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The Titans' Orb is an artefact created by the Holy Titans of Harmony, to protect the world of Equus from interdimensional threats. When a vengeful demigod escapes from Tartarus, the Orb is shattered into six pieces and sent to Planet Earth, scattering across the globe. With all of Equus now in terrible danger, Twilight Sparkle and her friends are sent to retrieve the missing pieces at once.
Meanwhile, there lives a boy named Callum, recently fatherless and enduring the torment of an abusive household. He is soon to discover that the fictional characters from his beloved T.V show, are not so fictional after all.
Alongside his newfound companions, he is to embark upon a great adventure.
To find the Titans' Orb...
What made you what to rewrite the story going how many and how far you gone with them ?
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Odd, I could have sworn I posted my reply.
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Yeah, there was an issue with Chapter One and I had to quickly take it down and reupload it, and your reply was on Chapter One instead of the Author's Note, so it unintentionally got deleted. 😅
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oh. Oh well.
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I decided to rewrite it because the original Titans' Orb was sloppy and full of cringy moments. My writing is now infinitely better than it was ten years ago, as is my understanding of pace, dialogue, and overall storytelling. As such, I wanted to go back and give the first entry to the saga a real opportunity to shine.
The book is now fully re-written, but I'm uploading the chapters daily to maintain a steady flow and scan them for last-minute errors. After that, I'll be rewriting the second entry to the story as well, The Titans' Orb: Rising Storm. The third book will also receive some edits, but nowhere near as drastic.
Damn, that image of Nah'Lek blowing up the orb slaps.
Also...
Having read a certain chapter in Breaking Dawn, that hits WAY harder than it ought to.
Awesome new prologue, keep it up!
And so the adventure begins...
Again.
Seriously though, the difference between this Chapter 1 and the old one is like night and day!
If the rest of the story is getting this level of treatment, then I am VERY excited.
Can the rest of the month come like... NOW PLEASE!?
I had a similar idea for an MLP/Warcraft fanfic on the board for a while. It would be about the World Soul of Equus, the source of the Magic of Friendship. However, I didn't know how I would write it. I'm looking forward to what you come up with for this story.
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Ooh that's an interesting twist on a similar concept, great minds think alike ey?
I very much hope you enjoy this story, you can expect many twists and turns!
A complete from-scratch rewrite? Color me curious. As a reviewer, I am always interested in seeing writers improve over time. Perhaps when this is all uploaded I will add it to my 2025 list.
This was one of the very first stories I read on here. I also see it's getting a rewrite. Is Rising Storm and Breaking Dawn gonna get the same treatment?
I loved this story as a kid when I read it several years ago, and I'm really hoping that the illustrations you used in the original are preserved in some sense, I loved the visual story telling they added to the narrative.
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Rising Storm will be. Breaking Dawn will get a few edits but not a full-on rewrite.
I'd advise following my profile as I'll be making further Blog Posts which go into further detail on some of the changes, and it would be good not to miss 'em if you're getting back into the story.
Welcome back by the way!
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Oh trust me, as you can already see with the Prologue and these first two Chapters, the visual storytelling is very much alive and well, and thoroughly enhanced.
If you liked the pictures then, you'll LOVE 'em now.
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which is your master plan? :3
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All shall be revealed in time.
To hazard a guess, this line was written straight out of your real childhood, wasn't it?
I'm trying (and failing) to visualise how that looks.
I love the added detail that you added the ponified icons AND the goddamn date on the taskbar, continuity like that could have been so easily overlooked. I really hope we get more images throughout this story than the original, it really brings it to life. I couldn't help but notice the image of Fluttershy in the ironwood tree is gone from the last chapter.
Can I ask why?
Genuinely howling at this insult, I will absolutely be using it.
Loving how different this chapter feels, I remember the "Callum knows about the MLD incident" bit being rushed over in the original and never being talked about again, which always felt weird to me.
Now it makes sense, because Angry Book Horse doesn't want to betray her beloved Sunbutt, and has straight up told him NOT to talk about it.
Also I could've sworn that picture of Callum stabbing the clone looked different in the original?
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This'll help.
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Pulled straight from the TTO wiki (still in development).
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I removed the Fluttershy image because I wasn't happy with how it looked.
As you can tell, (and just mentioned in terms of added detail), I want the visual storytelling to be convincing, and using the SFM model of Fluttershy was much too cartoony.
I need to try and find some more lifelike 3D pony models, then I will create more images and add them to this story in a future update I'm planning.
Yes, this story is getting ANOTHER bloody update after this rewrite comes out.
Not a rewrite mind you, it'll be solely to work on more visuals.
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Yeah, I thought the same thing when I was rewriting this one. Dialogue and plausible human/pony responses & critical thinking was something I used to struggle with when I first wrote this.
Now when I write, I always think to myself, "Is this how real people talk? Is this a realistic response?"
Helps a lot to get these sorts of in-story situations better.
Glad you liked the insult, it was a chuckle and a half to come up with.
The runner-up was - "You rancid fucking heretic, I hope your dogs die!"
Obviously that one was a bit much, so I dialled it down, just a touch...
And yes, good eye!
I enhanced the image as the original was a bit lacklustre, and also had a continuity blunder.
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No comment.
The crab man is not friend.
The mean lady is not friend.
The sibling is not friend.
The book horse is not friend.
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i think the "i hope your dogs die" part would've sent him over the edge and confirmed the fear Twi has....
The house is not friend.
The you is not friend.
The speeding car is not friend.
I'm not crying... y-you're crying!
WHY DID YOU MAKE THIS CHAPTER SO MUCH MORE EMOTIONAL?!
OH AND HOLY SHIT YOU ADDED APOLLO THE PARROT!
BEST CAMEO EVER!
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I had a feeling someone would appreciate the cameo.
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Do you plan on doing this for every single chapter?
Yeeaah, this was hella awkward to visualise, though obviously that's the point.
That said, still much tamer than the incident in TTO: Breaking Dawn...
I'm almost certain that the original version of this story came out before the "You are going to Brazil." meme was popularized, but the "We are going to Brazil." still reminds me of it.
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That meme surfaced in 2020, six years after the original version of this chapter did.
But yes, it's a little reminiscent of the meme I suppose.
Body weight is not friend.
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Okay fine, that one actually made me laugh.
HERESY! USE METRIC SYSTEMS YOU INSUFFERBLE-mmmmmmmm
XDD, fun fact, the top comment is mine from 6 years ago. :DD
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Begone, bot!
Okay, so this 4th wall break is hilarious, BUT...
Did you just confirm a 5th book after the sequel to Breaking Dawn!?
>inb4 "Tree is not friend." comment
It's nice to be reading one of my favorite stories from my early days in the Fandom with a new polish. I'm remembering a lot of my favorite moments from way back when.
Tree is not friend.
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You called it RDgamer321.
I was drinking iced-coffee while reading this, and I straight-up just sprayed my monitor with it.
God-effing-dammit, Pinkie Pie.