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RedTails, a colt with a mysterious power that has lost all hope and has turned cold and bitter has comes into the life of the Mane Six. What secrets is he hiding? How does somepony, or rather someone, have something in common with him in Ponyville? Will the ponies be able to teach RedTails the magic of friendship or shall he remain the way he is forever?
A co-written story with APoeticHeart
This takes place in the same world as the New Home series by APoeticHeart after A New Home 2, but three months before the events of A New Home 3 and is canon in the Tobyverse (Yes, Geo came up with that name.)
Chapters (8)
Red Tails, eh? I didn't know I was that famous. x3 Anywho, don't give up this. I'm sure there's people who aren't going to like at first, but it will have a good end result (as long as it isn't cliche). Tata!
this is interesting. MOAR
please
Red Tails, they are just trying to help,
The Mane Six never gives up on a pony when they feel he or she needs help.
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i like it.
*grabs kraken release button* just in case.
2995328 yeah they don't. Not that it's a bad thing
I need more Eyes to look at every single Story I read. But I think I can manage one more
This is a fairly good start, but I've found a few problems with this chapter, which I will now point out to you.
Okay, so Twilight is asleep, but soon forces herself to get up because she has things to prepare for her picnic with the girls.
And yet...
You've skipped a lot of time in just a few paragraphs. First Twilight is barely awake, then all of a sudden she and the others are rushing to help Fluttershy? That's rather confusing, don't you think? You need to add in the preparations (as well as the others actually arriving, or Twilight going to meet them) and then have them hear Fluttershy's panicked scream.
Either that or rewrite it so they're going to Fluttershy's house to begin with.
Should be 'unfamiliar'.
This should say 'have'.
These are the only mistakes I could find. I'm not the best at noticing them, however, so there might be more.
Other than these two grammar errors (and the gaping plothole), you have a good story going here.
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Thanks for pointing those out. I'll get editing right away 
If you're trying to keep the Mane Six in character, then might I suggest changing this to something else? It doesn't seem like the sort of thing Twilight would say.
I think you mean 'hear', not 'here'.
1) 'Otherwise' is one word, not two.
2) You're missing an 'a' here — "I'm a traveller"
Once again, there could be other errors. Once again, I'm not claiming to be an expert here.
Othere than that, I like what you've written so far.
2995451 Here have this also just in case *gives the dovahkiin button* just in case
2995662 Thanks, I think I fixed most of the mistakes
Another good Chapter. But work on the grammar. You need to get you a proofreader.
damn....
im gonna guess sister....
3025154 Yeah, RedTails is pretty mad
That will be interesting when he meet the Princesses^^
Twilight just doesn't know how to keep her nose out of other ponies' business at times. She should have just left the picture alone and put it back in RedTails' saddlebags.
Awesome editing and improving on my parts my friend.
Going to be interesting when Redtails meets Princess Celestia
Them darn cliffhangers!
But Twilight is indeed a caring pony, indeed like a mother to all, next to Fluttershy of course. 
Uuuuuuhhh... Twilight become a little Brother^^
i re-read this.
white coat? read mane and tail?
could it be nurse redheart?
If this takes place in the New Home universe, then I know just who Twilight is talking about.
3150903 I know it, too. Oh, That will be so GOOD!!!
wait a minute!
*thinking*
*gasp!*
could it be toby?
Please let it be Toby.... IT BETTER BE TOBY
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It might be Toby, or it even might be this man.
Just some randomness for today.
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3151523 Wow! Remind me never to eat any more muffins again, but save them all for Derpy.
3151549 lest the Great Laser Eye Shooting Beast awakens
3151463 Best Clip from Simpsons EVER!!!
3154123 That's why I chose that one. I love Homer.
3154457 I love Explosions^^
3027166 well, if he doesn't care anymore than why did he run away?!
oh well.... shit......
this is going to be hard on toby.....
hope fluttermom will be there soon......
*mumbles* he had to ask that question...
called it!
This'll be hard for Toby to explain.
Toby, you can do this. I know it will be difficult, just know that your Momma Fluttershy and Auntie Twilight will be there to comfort you.
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but hopefully through this, RedTails can come out of his shell and two of them can understand each other...
Yeah it's going to be hard
3235526 meh....
Out of all the questions to ask him, he had to ask that one
Make the next chapter please.
I just have to say one thing... What the HELL gives them the right to force him to go to Canterlot or in their words "decided".