This story is a sequel to Band of Five Attributes
(Takes place 10 years after Band of Five Attributes, I suggest you read that first!)
Complete re-write can be found here.
When everypony thought all was well, in the greatest moment of prosperity, a new threat sweeps over the Gryphon Kingdom, demolishes the Crystal Nation, and then eradicates the Changeling Hives from existence, save for a few stragglers. The stragglers refused to explain what had happened, leaving the Elements of Nature with quite a lot of questions...
Chapters (13)
I really like the sequel a lot more here. The fast pace nature is needed here and no moment I feel drag or rush.
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Hi! Your story's been reviewed in the Pleasant Commentator and Review Group! Hope it's of some use :)
4019264 It is of use.Half of me is saying people should sugar-coat everything (as far as criticism is concerned), but I know that won't get me anywhere.
"If nothing bad is said, then nothing good gets done."
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Amen to that. It's the hardest part of being a writer, neh?
4019286 Especially since I am A) still somewhat of a noob and B) my mind isn't exactly in quite the right place.
I might consider re-writing the whole thing, except for a good deal of chapter one. But that won't get done until after I finish with Legion's Plague, which got a new chapter today.
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Being a noob is okay: we all have to start somewhere.
On top of the comments in my review, you may find the Writer's Academy at Scribophile of some use. It has some wonderful articles on major areas of writing.
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True that.
The Writer's Academy.....I'll pay it a visit tomorrow.