The Crusaders were having a normal day, but then strange things have been happening. Strange things lurk in every corner. Heck, even Spike might have to join, but will they be able to save the world and thier friends? Or will the galaxy fall under the wrath of the creatures?
Even weirder, they meet strange beings. Cinderella? Pinocchio? Alice in Wonderland? And...what is this...chosen one? And of all of Equestria, why Applebloom and Spike?!
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I'm loving this...
-Kiryu
Applebloom as a Keyblade weilder?
Oh boy, this is gonna be good!!
Hmm, this has brilliant potential. Though, I wish you would have gone through all of the dialogue at the beginning (aside from all of the control tutorial crap). I would kind of like to know how Applebloom would respond to all the weird questions.
Love the floor things you made/found.
I would recommend finding an editor. I noticed a few errors in there. Nothing major.
Despite all of that, I think this is brilliant!! A like and a fav from me. Keep it up! I shall eagerly wait for the next update.
2873627 Um...could you make your dialogue green? Red makes me feel uncomfortable.
Plus...that weird thing in the back is to tell others that, even a simple pony crossover will bring anyone into the herd.
Anyone...
2873699 Better?
Also, what I meant is I wish you had done everything the game did at the beginning, minus controls. I wasn't talking about the brony conversion dialogue. Sorry about that.
2873720 sorry...in pacific time...it's 11:35...so...zi'm still a little tired.
First of all, great logo and arts. Props for this. It is so well made that I can actually visualize the game. Aout the only thing that it's missing would be the button smashing, the cursing, the "brb, bio break" and so forth.
Liked and faved.
Dude, just don't censor it, it makes it worse. Besides even if its a teen rating, it involves swears. Most teemagers swear anyway
2874512 Wait...wha? Hold up...
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Oh...I see. Now I have to EDIT that.
Hmmmm maybe, I'm sitting down I'm sitting down let me give it a chance.
That was a good first chapter :). I like how rather then Applebloom playing it up hero style, she got realistically scared by the giant heartless monster. Very nice.
awesome! is spike riku?
2877143 Answers will be reveled if you give it time, my son.
umm, might I recommend a quick scan at this chapter?
There are a lot of errors...
-Kiryu
2877724 Like spelling errors? Blame the IPad!
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Well not only spelling errors...
And there are also grammatical errors
Might I recommend not using the Ipad to write the story, maybe to make a rough version, and then later, on a computer, fix the errors, edit, etc.
-Kiryu
2877766 Hm...to much work, not enough sleep. It literally took me 4 hours to make on a computer once, and 2-3 hours on an IPad. I usually go over it one to maybe five times, but...hey...guess I didn't catch them.
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I'd rather wait a good amount of time for a long and perfect chapter than a rushed short one...
just saying
-Kiryu
2878216 I wouldn't say as rushed...just that I nearly didn't care about the errors, just the plot line.
What an awesome start! I gotta see more of this!
I really, really wanna see more of this! I'm starting to enjoy it already!
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Or, instead of just letting them go and blaming your iPad as an excuse, why not go in and fix them? Oh by the way, this perfectly written, flawless post was written on my iPad.
2879273 Don't have to cry over every single mistake dude. It's just a mistake. And a post is just 200-300 words. Not my fault I couldn't catch them. So stop your crying and enjoy the story.
2879788 Careful... Keep that up, and you're gonna lose some followers...
I liked this chapter, but I agree with the previous comments. The errors were much more glaring here.
Sent with no errors from my iPhone, and with hand-typed formatting, to boot.
2885389 Fine...fine. I'll be careful, but if you catch a few mistakes again, don't think I didn't go over the chapter. I usually read it 5-6 times.
just saying...i dont really care if there are errors or not...its a great story and i can tell he put a lot of work into this story...
Heh heh, very nice intro that you just put out for this :). I liked how AB is Sora, Diamond is Kari, and Spike is Riku :). Least thats how it feels to me ^_^. Heh heh, Scoots and Sweeties roles are funny :).
Btw, how were you able to post those pictures into your story? I tried it, and I cant seem to get it right.
Heh heh, that was a good way to wrap up the Destiny Islands part :). Heh, its funny imagining Sweetie calling Scoots a "big paloka". Humans are real?!?! Oh sweet Celestia!!! O_O
Heh heh ^_^. Nice chap!
I like the name S.A.Acres better for the raft, and the Gummi Ship.
Oh, well. Please continue!
There aren't many awesome kingdom hearts crossover fics, so I am happy when I find one.
2902426 1st of all, thanks for liking my story, very great full
Second, to put in pictures, you see the picture thing? Right in the middle of Youtube and the anchor? You copy a picture you want, paste it in the bar, confirm it, then their's a picture.
In the letter, it says
Is it intentional that you said Goofy? I was just wondering. I look forward to more of this story.
2902898 Hey...playing the game and trying to copy it down is not easy as you think. Plus...you pay more attention to the game more than the story when typing it down.
2902910 Not complaining. I honestly don't care if there are errors in a story as long as it's good and I can understand what I am reading. Just something I saw that I thought I would mention.
See, now this is better!
Keep up the good work!
-Kiryu
2905235 I seriously couldn't take that as a compliment. But...I have to deal with it.
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Well technically it's a compliment, as I am saying your skills in writing have increased
In other words i'm saying you've gotten better at writing this story
(Sorry if I offended you
-Kiryu
2905264 It's okay, just that I feel kinda disappointed and wasted 4 hours writing this story, and making sure it's like the game. Just disappointed that some people don't appreciate it.
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Well if it makes you feel better, It actually felt like the games, hence why I said you got better at writing this
-Kiryu
2905335 Kiryu! How ya doin' man!
Ohohoho this is going to be fun.
Because that would be awesome! 
But then again, this is already awesome!
This story is getting a like and fav from me, I really like the tutorial scene, it was really well done.
Oh, but I have a question, are we going to see a MLP character for Xehanort, Terra, Aqua, and Ven?
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2923597 Sorry for the long reply...I was in church.
Anyway, no spoilers my man.
Not bad, not bad. I wonder though if you are going to turn Xehanort, Terra, Aqua, and Ven into ponies or remain them as humans. I prefer them to be human though. It would it more cleaner if it you would still stick with it. Just saying.
2942678 No spoilers bro.
Was there a new chapter coming up? I saw your story pop up on the updated section but no new chapter.
2960487 I had a little delay, I'm actually working on it right now.
Heh, I can actually imagine gameplay footage of AB running around, fighting and beating on some Heartless :D. Ha! Ahhhh, you made an error near the end where your referring to the villains and talking about "Him". Shoudn't it be her since it's AB, instead of Sora.
Ha!! Adorable mode activated :D Anywho, good chap.
2962670 Thanks. I'll fix it when everyone reads it.
KINGDOM HEARTS
2963473 Is that bad?