Twilight and Fluttershy realize they each love their Princesses much more than platonically...
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Inb4 Molestia attack.
- Midnight Specter
Oh, that was very good. Some lovely turns of phrase in the last section particularly.
Oh man, that was awesome. Celestia's at it again
That was a very good chapter- it seemed to focus nicely on Twilight, and you really get a feel for the day she's having.
Of course, that nice stream actually highlights one oddity- The flow of time. The first paragraph mentions it's the afternoon, yet as soon as she leaves the shop it's evening. She walks to the palace and a little over an hour later it was dawn...
Still, I really did like this section. It was clear, easy to follow, and was obviously setting up important things for the future. It's also always nice to see Twilight doing "Twilight things"- in this case being a really good student. Sections like that really helps the characters come to life. :)
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Thank you very much for the praise. :)
And while we're on the topic of setting things up for the future...
Nickle, like a lot of people who work night shifts, tend to say "evening" any time later than noon.
And Twilight, especially when she's using the spell she used in the Red Room, is not the best timekeeper in Equestria- She gets too deep into her studies and loses track of time.
Truth is, if we take her faulty perception out of the equation... She arrived in Canterlot in the afternoon, took an hour lunch, spent quite some time at the shop, and then spent a very long time using that spell. Celestia knew she was in the castle, and as such, didn't begrudge her student's tar... lateness. After all, she technically "arrived" on time. But then she spent an hour getting the permission slip, and who-knows-how-long using the knowledge spell.
I am really happy someone caught that this early, so I could give out the real details without feeling silly about shoe-horning it in later.
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Thank you! :D
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Ehehehe... Just you wait.
I knew I tracked this story for a reason - I love how it's shaping up. I'm really liking how, even though it's a story with adult themes and sexy scenes, it's not devolving immediately into a giant orgy. (Yet? ) Having that solid helping of non-sex content makes the adult scenes that much sweeter when they do appear.
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Thank you -very- much. :D
A friend of mine once joked that I'm the sine wave of smut authors-- Everything comes in waves. So don't be terribly surprised if you suddenly see three smut segments back-to-back around, oh say, Chapter 10~12, and then a sudden smutdrought for a little while. Not that I am precisely telling you exactly what's going to happen or anything.
But yeah, tl;dr I do my best to space everything so that everypony gets plenty of what they enjoy, be it plot or 'plot'.
i enjoy
looking forward to more
that is all
kthanxbai
229060 thanks For this story it really eased my pain I got my wisdom teeth taken out today
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You are very welcome-- I know how medical stuff can get, and fics have helped me get through some tough times myself. I hope to keep providing helpful stuff in the future, and I hope you recover well and quickly.
229247 thanks I'm glad time is flying too
Oh man, I swear, I just load the chapter up, and it seems like it's over in less than a minute. And I'm not necessarily a fast reader, to begin with.
Lovely chapter in general. Keep the awesome work coming. =3
good chapter!
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yia twi does suck at time keeping lol so now celestia has a knocked out twilight sparkle in front of her i wonder.
Damn, just how powerful do you think Celestia is? Like Jesus showing off or Chuck Norris sleepy?
The spell you described puts Twilight a little out of her league lol.
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Most versions of Celestia would currently be making Soldier's face from that post in this situation.
this fic so okay so far, and while i do prefer fics that have build up to a relationship i can't say i'll be a super big fan of the fic until something really starts off. But since that alreay started a little with fluttershy i approve!
I'll be sure to check up on this and see how it develops.
Twilestia is top tier ship .
Ah, but to elaborate~ A very nice chapter. From Twilight's interesting impromptu stop at that nifty little shop to her power-reading at the library, I can safely say that she never once seemed out of character. The way she watched Celestia in complete awe as she raised the sun was a nice touch too, quite how I would expect a young mare to react while watching the one that they're smitten with performing something that can only be described as amazing.
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I think you'll be very pleased with upcoming things then (cough Intermission 2 cough)
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Why thank you, on all regards! A new update is coming -very- shortly, so I hope you enjoy it too. :3
"she keeps meaning to show it to Rarity" - Y U CHANGE TENSE?!
So that's how Twilight got to be so smart. She spell-speed-reads, hahaha! I do like the concept of the Red Room, and the spell and description of Celestia raising the sun was positively gorgeous. The whole sex shop thing... eh, felt completely out of place. Much less her thought to bring Fluttershy there. This combined with the intermission is starting to make a good chunk of this story all about the sex. It makes me wonder if Twilight is in lust, and not in love, with her Princess. Hmm...
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Thanks for the feedback all around- I won't be responding to every individual one, but trust me when I say I'm reading all these comments.
As for your feelings about 'the shop', well, I hate to disappoint you, but it's only going to be more important from here on out. But it's not JUST about the sex- It's important for the plot. VERY important.
And being in love and being in lust are not mutually exclusive things. It's very possible, in fact very likely, that Twilight is both.
"-Then Celestia sneezed, and the Sun turned purple."
Decided to re-read this chapter on a whim, and I realized that you referenced one of my favorite ask blogs. Good on ya, mate.
SSo you also wrote the fun has been wubuled I read it yesterday it was just as fabulous as this a story has been so far and I just noticed the same names and description of the adult store owners what a nice way to bring to stories together even if for just a few paragraphs but still a very fabulous chapter this was and also have a very fabulous day everypony
THOU HAST RELAYED AN
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Just replying to let you know your name is incredible and you should feel incredible. A true hee-ro~! :heeho:
A joke you say?
"The Elements of Harmony walk into a sex shop..." dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/discord.png
enjoying the story but:
Eating at mid day(3 maybe?), a hour in the shop, an hour across town, two hours in the library, then we find Celestia standing in the moonlight, where she answers Twilight question of "What is my lesson this evening, Princess Celestia?" with 'Raising the sun'.
I have the image of her raising the sun about an hour after Luna raised the moon.
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Let's go hypothetical here without spoiling or divulging anything:
Eat at Joe's around highest sun, so 3 PM
Black Door at around 4, lasts ~2 hours, so 6
Half-hour to the Library, 6:30
Hour getting Red Room access, 7:30
(Unknown but likely long period of time) using her studying spell, ??:??
"A long walk" later, which was intended to be at least a full hour.
Arrive to meet with Celestia, who says Twilight is early, but then shortly thereafter, the moon is already heading towards the horizon.
So yes, either something about this entire timeline is rather odd, OR Twilight spent about eight hours using her spell, OR something very interesting is going on at the end there.
Which of these is the case, I will leave as an exercise to the reader.
1620336 "so she might as well find a way to pass the last... Hour and change she had left."
She spent less than an hour in the red room.
I choose to believe the Celestia and Luna play ping-pong with day and night when they're board. So nopony really thinks too much about it.
But, really, I'm loving to story. Good work.
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Huh. That... Actually, I didn't even realized that stayed in. That's a remnant from an old bit of timeline when this chapter was arranged differently. I'll have to think about including this chapter when I revamp the "early stuff".
Thanks much.
A few days later: "Good morning, my sister. Thou hast raised the sun well today."
"I didn't."
"Pardon?"
"Twilight Sparkle did, unassisted. I monitored her but..."
"Ah. You were correct in your supposition then?"
"It seems that I was."
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freaking math, amirite? ITS MAGIC, YOU AIN'T GOTTA EXPLAIN SH*T
"may i ask what my lesson will be?"
"you may"
trollestia strikes again
mfw you have to wash your hooves when eating sticky donuts despite being a unicorn.
silly Twilight.
That time when we thought the Six would be world famous by the third World Saving instead of "Who?"
I like this story more and more. Twilestia is my OTP and I just love the way you interpret Twilight's adoration towards Celestia.
I can see Twilight now interested in sex, going through extreme amounts of research. Fun chapter