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destroyer-of-pineapples


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Former royal guard, accused of betrayal. Pegasi seeking revenge for her lover. Dragon whose only treasure is faith. Prince of once proud empire. All of them will be driven together by events that will push two nations on the edge of war. The time when you have known your enemy is over. No one can be trusted. Everything is permitted.
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The world is based on G.R.R.Martin's Westeros but it's not crossover.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 38 )

This is great! But I think you need an editer, you tend to skip words on occasion and misspell a few words but still great!:moustache:

The grammar problems really got bothersome and started to make reading this hard. I really do suggest you get an editor. If you can't find anyone, I would gladly be the editor for this. This story really has potential, but the grammatical errors really got in the way, as I said. It also lacks a good bit of detail. Work on the detail, and get an editor, and you might make a great story. This story can become an amazing one, and might even get on EQD some day. The things I stated previously are the only problems I see with this story besides the shortness.

~Gin Ichimaru~

Good story bro

I'm with PurpleLightningIchimaru on this one. Would gladly proofread for this if you want and fix the punctuation grammar I could fix but I'm not always the one for the job with things of this sort. Still I will gladly proofread, I have a lot of free time due to the fact I keep re editing fixing lengthening and shortening that damn draft I have stored for a story.

That was good. Please continue.

Please continue.

Interesting, although I gonna need some explainations as to why Twilight and Celestia let things get to where they are.:pinkiehappy::derpytongue2::moustache:

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I will explain it in the next chapters. Don't worry:pinkiehappy: It's going to be a huge story but I will try to leave nothing unreaveled.:rainbowdetermined2:

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I don't know "pimpin':eeyup:" means... but thanks for commenting. I hope you enjoyed it!:pinkiehappy:

it needs more details, more past, more things from chars. But, it's good too.:rainbowkiss:

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means its fucking awesome

Bugger! You used the Spike Pic i was going to use!

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Are you still working on this?

I am and I was going to post new chapter but it seemed a bit rush.

I have a feeling this story is gonna be a huge success in the future. I shall continue waiting :rainbowdetermined2:

Comment posted by spike the mustache deleted Nov 7th, 2014

5238565 Couldn't be closer to the truth if you tried. :rainbowlaugh:

Cant wait for the next chapter. It's a good story

Great job man. This is going good so far but I wish you could continue this story.

Awesome story! Cant wait for the next one! Btw, whens that coming?

8124399 aww you wanna GO TO SLEEP?

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Yes! I'm working half-time and attend uni. I forgot what sleep is! Take my problems away...and let's hope Jesus exist... or not, wait a sec... by my count I'm going to hell so I better switch to atheism

8124507 i....ok.....you just have fun with that. *slits your throught*

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*choking with blood* It's 'throat' not 'throught'! Goddamit you illiteral piece of... *dies*
But now seriously, I'm trying to fetch some update trust me

8124567 oops....and ok! Cant wait for it! :raritywink:

Also, have a stach :moustache:

Love the story. When is the next chapter coming out

When is the next update?

Is this story dead?

Yeah I don't do bestiality.

Pacing is a little too quick, but this story definitely has potential.

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