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Captain L
A man born and raised in Worcester, MA. I like Mega Man. A lot. Fluttershy is best pony, and I will make her mine one day.
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Alright, lay it on me, what are the problems with the story? Was it just not well written? Did you ignore the warnings and read it anyway when it wouldn't appeal to you? Did I somehow offend Christians again?
2416949 i like it and it's well written, and i think you pissed off the fans of octy and vinvl
I thought it was a really good start. Strong build up, good descriptions, grammar was good.
For me, the story ended too abruptly. She peed herself in front of a bunch of ponies. But then what? Did the show continue? Did the stallions who saw her force themselves on her? What about Neon, what did he do?
I think a continuation would help raise the amount of likes.
Still, you get a thumbs up from me.
Yes, Vinyl. Thank Celestia
Great story but the climax of it is just skin and bones. Otherwise i loved it thoe.
I'm curious to see how you wrote this. Me, there's only two things that prevent me from reading and reviewing fics. The first one's Drugs. I won't read a fic if it has ANY drugs. The next is gay, I won't read a gay fic. However, Omorashi is fine with me sometimes, so I'll give it a read and tell you what I think.
Hmmm, no sex, but it has a good appeal to it as well as a seemingly bad scene turning good. I'd say, you did well. 4/5. I'd still like to have seen some sex in it. Maybe with the crowd, but that's just me. Nice going.
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I really didn't think anything else was necessary at the end. You can pretend that "things happened". But since this is the only negative point I've gotten, I can pretend a weak ending is the only problem with the story. And now I'm considering possibly expanding it. Maybe, it might not happen until I finish Mega Man X: Paradise Lost.
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Have you read the sex I've written? Be very careful what you wish for.
*laughs like hell*
Aw well... yes we are Vinyl, yes we are...
P.S. I do not really understand the 14 dislikes, just because of the sudden ending, or what?...
i'd say it be pretty good
DDDAAAAAAYYYYYYEEEEEEEEMMMMMMMMM! DJ'S GOT A BABY!!!~
>Sees fic
>mah fetish
>On Haitus
Why didnt I know about this fic until now? Its really good!
Just as soon as I think Ive read every watersports related fic here, I find another. Not that its a bad thing
2421306 when is more?
Great story.
2422392 Ditto, besides the pervert part.
Because we love to endlessly torture other kids for the most frivolous reasons?
(I'm mature and different than that though.)
Thank Celestia Neon got dumped, he's got a milf to look forward to!
I will wait until the end of time for this beautiful fetish/clopfic to release it's next chapter! Also, you should totally do a threesome clop with them.
Well, Vinyl is going to be... not very happy. Or very not happy. Or even more likely... absolutely pissed at him!
And then, suddenly appears. . .Eclipse! Who bitch slaps Octavia across the face and then throws Neon back to his house! ECLIPSE!!!!
(Trolling is magic. What could happen though is Neon wakes up in Octavia's bed and lets the guilt sink into him for a while. He then races back home, not thinking at all what to say to Vinyl when he gets home, then she asks him why he wasn't back at SIX.) 
Okay, geez, Neon, you didn't need to tell everybody...
Omg yes another awesome chapter
God damn it Neon, you had one job! One job
Damn.
In these situations, I would expect the other partner to understand. Or at least, try to work things out. The cheater comes to them directly after they've done this, being completely honest, regretting everything, and the partner won't have it. It, kind of shows you how the world works. You can't always expect them to understand, or try to work things out even if you've come to them regretting it.
Doesn't change the fact that I'm still really hating Octy right now.
There needs to be a sequel to this!
Any hope of another chapter? The up and down nature of the main relationship actually makes for a compelling read. I hope at least vinyl will confront Octavia, because while neon certainly isn't innocent, he's not entirely to blame. Hopefully, Vinyl will see that once her anger abated a bit.