After a very wet accident during a show, Vinyl Scratch learns more about her partner, Neon Lights. And another mare comes in later to steal his attention.
Alright, lay it on me, what are the problems with the story? Was it just not well written? Did you ignore the warnings and read it anyway when it wouldn't appeal to you? Did I somehow offend Christians again?
I thought it was a really good start. Strong build up, good descriptions, grammar was good.
For me, the story ended too abruptly. She peed herself in front of a bunch of ponies. But then what? Did the show continue? Did the stallions who saw her force themselves on her? What about Neon, what did he do?
I think a continuation would help raise the amount of likes.
I'm curious to see how you wrote this. Me, there's only two things that prevent me from reading and reviewing fics. The first one's Drugs. I won't read a fic if it has ANY drugs. The next is gay, I won't read a gay fic. However, Omorashi is fine with me sometimes, so I'll give it a read and tell you what I think.
Hmmm, no sex, but it has a good appeal to it as well as a seemingly bad scene turning good. I'd say, you did well. 4/5. I'd still like to have seen some sex in it. Maybe with the crowd, but that's just me. Nice going.
2416991 I really didn't think anything else was necessary at the end. You can pretend that "things happened". But since this is the only negative point I've gotten, I can pretend a weak ending is the only problem with the story. And now I'm considering possibly expanding it. Maybe, it might not happen until I finish Mega Man X: Paradise Lost.
2419504 Have you read the sex I've written? Be very careful what you wish for.
Alright, lay it on me, what are the problems with the story? Was it just not well written? Did you ignore the warnings and read it anyway when it wouldn't appeal to you? Did I somehow offend Christians again?
2416949 i like it and it's well written, and i think you pissed off the fans of octy and vinvl
I thought it was a really good start. Strong build up, good descriptions, grammar was good.
For me, the story ended too abruptly. She peed herself in front of a bunch of ponies. But then what? Did the show continue? Did the stallions who saw her force themselves on her? What about Neon, what did he do?
I think a continuation would help raise the amount of likes.
Still, you get a thumbs up from me.
Yes, Vinyl. Thank Celestia
Great story but the climax of it is just skin and bones. Otherwise i loved it thoe.
I'm curious to see how you wrote this. Me, there's only two things that prevent me from reading and reviewing fics. The first one's Drugs. I won't read a fic if it has ANY drugs. The next is gay, I won't read a gay fic. However, Omorashi is fine with me sometimes, so I'll give it a read and tell you what I think.
Hmmm, no sex, but it has a good appeal to it as well as a seemingly bad scene turning good. I'd say, you did well. 4/5. I'd still like to have seen some sex in it. Maybe with the crowd, but that's just me. Nice going.
2416991
I really didn't think anything else was necessary at the end. You can pretend that "things happened". But since this is the only negative point I've gotten, I can pretend a weak ending is the only problem with the story. And now I'm considering possibly expanding it. Maybe, it might not happen until I finish Mega Man X: Paradise Lost.
2419504
Have you read the sex I've written? Be very careful what you wish for.
*laughs like hell*
Aw well... yes we are Vinyl, yes we are...
P.S. I do not really understand the 14 dislikes, just because of the sudden ending, or what?...
2422392 Ditto, besides the pervert part.