A pony with no destiny makes a stop at a quiet bakery in Ponyville
Inspired by "Nirvana" by Tom Waits
Cover art used with permission from Stinkehund
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TheBrianJ
I am a conglomerate of Engineeriological and Writeological forces with a Ponypreneurial spirit.
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Oh you beautiful person you. Wonderfully written. Almost a shame that it's complete. I would have loved to see a continuation of this, but you ended it so well that I don't mind leaving it as is.
Hmm, yes, I had a feeling of just who the pegasus was. A very nice story indeed.
I absolutely love this.
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Don't worry Lightning Dust, Rainbow Dash will be your friend.
You just need to learn how to live in a friendlier environment!
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Haven't closed the door on a sequel...
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It was tough to decide if I wanted to put her tag in or not, but I decided to let the reader figure it out by the end.
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Thank you for the kind words!
Also, I am now very curious as to what Jka22 said, he deleted his comment before I got a chance to read it...
Very nice!
What is this sensation in my chest? It feels like a...
lol Anyone else thinking RD for a second?
You do wonder what happened to Lightning Dust after she had to take that long walk down Washout Boulevard. Pegasus society does seem very unforgiving of failure, weakness or even simply not coming first; that's probably where Rainbow and Fluttershy's little neuroses on the subject originate.
Still, there is no place quite like Ponyville in finding the best in everypony and helping them out. Hmm... I wonder if Trixie needs a new sidekick?
That was wonderful.
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...wow...I never gave much thought to this character, or what happened to them. Honestly though, it does make sense, and given what we know of her, this only seems to firm up that opinion.
Still, this was expertly handled, and I applaud you for excellent use of character development!
Cool, I was hoping it'd be Lightning Dust. She doesn't get anywhere near enough attention from the fandom these days. And I like your take on her backstory; giving up everything in singleminded pursuit of her goal definitely seems like something she'd do. Hopefully some time in Ponyville will help her straighten things out. I'd absolutely be up for a sequel if you decide to write one.
Damn it...
Best redemption story ever....
Well, I feel so.. Incomplete now that this says complete. I hope that there is a sequel in the future.
That was lovely
Good decision on not revealing the identity of the pony until the end, it made the reading much more interesting. Great job.
I had a feeling it might be Lightning Dust. Initially, the pony was acting a lot like Rainbow Dash, but that didn't make sense. Then, the pieces fell into place and
Really nice story. Short. Sweet. Well-written. Oh, and a sequel would really hit the spot.
Great fic, but it really feels like this should be the first chapter in a longer story rather than the only chapter.
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About that... Yeah, stay tuned
Ponyville is a slice of paradise, isn't it?
Oh, and here's a tip - always walk towards the light when caught in a storm!
Good writing my good sir!
This was great. Would love to see a follow up.