Well he deserved it

You done very WELL mate I love it all.

He got knocked the FUCK OUT! 'Stache for that ending

did he cut Trixie horn off our am i missing something i feel like am missing something ............shadow the hedgehog ending look it up

2304176 He shot it with the Desert Eagle, so she couldn't ever cast magic again.

A great story about moving forward and finding that special someone...
This is a fantastic story, my good sir, with a great conclusion.

That was a nice little ending ^.^, i like you didnt kill her but made it so she couldnt use magic ever again. We need an Epilogue!!!!!

Ded. Not big surprie.

A good ending.

Nice ending. I'm glad i was able to read something most excellent.

it is done may they live happily ever after woooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I liked this ending, Dale and Fleur are together, Trixie got what she deserved, Dale won't be treated like an animal again and everyone's happy excluding Fancy Pants and Trixie.

We need an epilogue!

Cheesy end, but still good

.........heh, it was ok

2304180 ok get it

awww i wanted a HEAD SHOT. sorry been awile since i played unreal tornament

crappy ending

very cliche, but i loved it to the end, honestly the ending reminded me of one of the classic old wild west movies, an air of finality with the ability to percieve differently, 9/10 :) im a sucker for happy endings

Well this was a happy ending(I predicted that Dale would break Trixie's horn but forgot to mention it in the last chapter)

2305332

crappy ending

You misspelt Happy.

I kind of skim most ANs, so I initially read "Burdy" as "Bundy". Now I've got the image of Al Bundy writing MLP fanfiction on a typewriter and having Bud beta read it for him stuck in my minds eye, and that's one image I may never be able to completely burn out of there (not that I'd ever want to).

That was awesome, but the ending, with Fancy Pants and all, was really fast. Slow it down...

That's a great ending! I really loved it

2306290 You misspelled terrible. The premise of the fic would lead us to believe that the story would be predominantly about a human cheating with Fleur on Fancypants. That's the basic gist of the first few chapters. Aside from mediocre writing, the latter half of the story completely derails from what was promised. Rather than a sensual story about an affair, we're given what is essentially a really crappy, and might I add, cliche, story. The protagonist starts killing demons (read changelings) what? The beginning was readable, but the end was horrible.

this.....I like this...*clicks fav button*
And now to Battlefield!

2307296

I was just making a joke, really.

Yes I see where you are coming from and I agree with most of your points. It was an entertaining story, but not one I would read again.

2309067 Read again... hmm... you've just inspired me to relive the adventures I have written, well maybe not the more sexual ones but maybe the violent ones... thank you my friend here have a kickass spike

Great story, sad to see it end. Albeit,i know you'll write another story that will pique my interest. Oh, abnd by great, I mean one of the best stories I have read in months

A good ending to a action story. I'll hope for a follow up, but meh it'll come when it does.

2310837 Somehow... you read my mind... anyway, I'm releasing a story called 'A Western Tail' (Ha-ha, pun on words) and am finally taking peoples' advice and got an editor, though I have to wait for him to send me the edited stuff back so I'm currently waiting for him to send it back

2311959 Smith

you should totally make a sequel or a continuim

2311882 Nice!

NO! it can't end. . . IT CAN'T!. . . NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

What a nice and almost anticlimatic ending. The bad guys got what they deserved and it ended like some sort of movie, Glad that I was able to finish this one.

That was a good end, but I feel as if the title of the story might be misleading as to its contents.

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You are most welcome. I leave you with this.
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2316645 Well truth be told I'm a terrible ending writer when it comes to writing and if I had to end it 'appropriately' with romance it probably would've after they had sex with that whole 'Love would find a way' quote but I was like "That would be a stupid ending" and my mind was like 'Hey, Trixie's jail sentence is up so let's have her real angry' so the idea just fit like a puzzle

The ending could have been a tad bit longer and drawn out, else it were actually not that bad.
But it could use a few grammatical corrections, but nothing major.
Also i for one would like to hear more about what happened afterwards.

2320422
It's not the ending, I thought the ending was great.

It's just that the title and cover of this story portray it to be more concerned about Fleur's journey of "desperation." I like Dale and his background and journey, I just think that you need to change the title, cover, and description to match the contents. Ya' know?

2325149
Armored divisions don't use explosive rounds. At most they use AP or API rounds, which are usually fired from an Browning M2HB.

Source: Experience/US Army Veteran

2325402 The explosive rounds were just a nice little something I figured I'd put in. The majority of machineguns that use Explosive tipped rounds would be airforce, helicopter gunships, fighter jets ect.

2325402 Well thanks for the info, not an army kind of person. I respect people in the armed forces, I'm just not too keen on running into a hail of lead. If I were to join though, I would definitely be explosives.

2325591 Had a friend in the Engineers of the Canadian forces. Was a Chief Warrant Officer which is about the same as a Sergeant Major in the US forces I reckon. Used to talk with him about Afghanistan and what not. He told me that I should join in the infantry because I have the physique, know how, and (In his words) "Don't take this the wrong way kid, but you're a 'Yes sir' kind of guy. Whenever I asked you to do something you always say 'Yes-um'" so I kind of took his words to heart and am going to enlist in the Princess Patricia's light infantry after next Winter. Have just one more year of football to play or I would be enlisting this summer

2325616 Well, its not russia I guess. Another JOE 111 test would be awesome. Big fan of the fact that it caused natural disasters. Russia has a habit of insane shit doesn't it?

2325587
Most notably the A-10 Thunderbolt II/Warthog, which uses explosive rounds to attack ground forces (infantry, light structures) and AP rounds with depleted uranium cores for penetrating hard targets (bunkers and armored vehicles)

2325625 Youwant insane shit? Look up the Tsar Bomba, made by Russia. It's UNREAL!!! Deserves an 'It's over 9000!" video

2325715 Only thing better then that is a nuclear warhead, preferably one made by Russia, like this one

2326264 JOE 111 is the CIA designated name for the tsar bomba test. America is just as insane though. Davy Crocket nuclear grenade.