Cant tell what's Dales unfinished business is? Is it tracking and finally killing Trixie? He and Fleur eloping? Him giving AJ the middle finger(Fuck you and your apples)?
Fleur left her house just to take a look at Canterlot Garden. That's apparently the most appropriate course of action during a demon attack and is not OOC at all. Spot on characterization, author.
Okay, winding down to the end… let’s see where it goes when I’m less critical of reviewing.
… “an un-impressed look” – ‘unimpressed’ is a word, so lose the hyphen. … “little of target” – ‘of’ should be ‘off’, thus, ‘off-target’.
Okay, I said I'd be less critical. For action, this was good. Trixie was pretty much useless (She kind've IS. ), though the way you handled Sombra was rather interesting. That said, the MOST interesting was Chrysalis, given her mind-reading ability and all. It was useful, but not scene-breaking, which was a nice touch.
... I liked it! The means of catching Fleur was pretty ridiculous, though, especially when she could have just lured her out with the Changelings taking Dale's shape and form before capturing her... Well, it served its purpose, at least.
That, combined with what she already admitted to, is enough reason for me to simply kill her and shot, cut, bludgeon, and burn my way through the rest of her hive. If she can read your mind, there is a strong chance she could control it, or at least influence your actions. Besides, this is very much like when he had to let Trixie go, and look how that turned out.
but all the rounds pinged off his chest armour which resembled medieval styled armour.
It would have been better to make foolish Trixie die right after she arrogantly dismissed your gun. Then blow Sombra's brains out.
That last line was cheesy not gonna lie.
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So Trixie summoned Sombra(interesting)
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Cant tell what's Dales unfinished business is? Is it tracking and finally killing Trixie? He and Fleur eloping? Him giving AJ the middle finger(Fuck you and your apples)?
I really hoped they stop treating him like an animal now
Let's face it. Trixie is a birch all the time. No matter what.
Dam I thought he was going to die...... It's a good thing he didn't
yeah chrysies' a hero
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Should've asked for Pootis's help or something. Just saying what I've would've done.
Okay everything should be back to normal now and even better.
Fleur left her house just to take a look at Canterlot Garden.
That's apparently the most appropriate course of action during a demon attack and is not OOC at all. Spot on characterization, author.
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And how would you know her characterization?
Okay, winding down to the end… let’s see where it goes when I’m less critical of reviewing.
… “an un-impressed look” – ‘unimpressed’ is a word, so lose the hyphen.
… “little of target” – ‘of’ should be ‘off’, thus, ‘off-target’.
Okay, I said I'd be less critical. For action, this was good. Trixie was pretty much useless (She kind've IS. ), though the way you handled Sombra was rather interesting. That said, the MOST interesting was Chrysalis, given her mind-reading ability and all. It was useful, but not scene-breaking, which was a nice touch.
... I liked it! The means of catching Fleur was pretty ridiculous, though, especially when she could have just lured her out with the Changelings taking Dale's shape and form before capturing her... Well, it served its purpose, at least.
2299677 Aww, the second image isn't in an image link.
That, combined with what she already admitted to, is enough reason for me to simply kill her and shot, cut, bludgeon, and burn my way through the rest of her hive. If she can read your mind, there is a strong chance she could control it, or at least influence your actions. Besides, this is very much like when he had to let Trixie go, and look how that turned out.
It would have been better to make foolish Trixie die right after she arrogantly dismissed your gun. Then blow Sombra's brains out.
To be honest, this chapter seems a little bit rushed, but it doesn't degrade it's awesomeness.