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hot.....that's all i got to say is hot......although i do kinda wish it had been more descriptive and they had gone a few rounds, but oh well.
Oh man, I can't wait for the ceremonies!
That clop scene more than made up for it
Maybe I'm weird, but I don't mind the odd foray into the lives of the background ponies from time to time. It still seemed to me as if the focus was on the Twi-herd for the most part... so you balanced it well. No pacing issues that I saw, no issues at all, really. Keep it up.
so you don't plan your writing either? good to hear. hawtness as usual, loving this fic.
Truly want to know how far down the rabbit hole you will go with the clop cuz I want to be there with when you do. I'll also bring lube just in case
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What.
Tentacles~!
-Mis
what has been seen can never be unseen.... but just to make sure where is my camera?
I get the feeling that a LOT of nobles are going to be snorting fire when they hear about three 'commoners' being promoted to Baronesses.
Speaking of, Wrabbit, do you have a list of noble titles you're using that we can look at? You said Twilight was a Countess, while the other three are to be Baronesses. I'm just curious as to how many titles they jumped over.
Muhahaha, back-up plans for the back-up plans, dood. That's Lady Sparkle for ya!
Also, I have a strong distaste for Tentacles, but you have been pretty good to me over the days, so I'll take it. Surprisingly enough, this is rather tame as far as tentacle porn goes and I love ya for it, dood.
PLEASE deal with the jerks soon I can't stand the dick dastardly and muttly crap have Luna go under cover & throw an appaloosa size monkey wrench into the works. i'm tired of these piss-ants trying to fuck over twilight and her heard.
The next chapter will open in Ponyville Hospital as High Hide struggles to hold on for dear life. Massive blood loss via the nose can be a deadly thing if you're not a well-trained anime male protagonist and/or the best friend character.
Heh inanimate carbon rod. Homer would be pissed
Sol, breather and character development chapter. Its only the calm before the storm
"squicky"?
What on earth could Twi be talking ab-....oh...
Um....oh.....
Well....that was left field.
I have no complaints.
Well that happened.
I didn't think this story could get better and now you add tentacles? I...I think I love you.
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More... more descriptive? Honestly, I had no idea where else I could take that particular scene. Maybe I just don't have the chops for lemons.
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You may end up disappointed. I'm still on the fence about writing the ceremony because wedding episodes are overdone. That's why I included a sneak peek at the ceremony garb.
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Well, that's a relief; though it seems not everyone agrees with you.
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Maybe it felt like the Twi-herd was at the center since it's what they revolved around. Still, I gotta be more careful in future that the background scenes don't outweigh the main protagonists' scenes.
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Yeah, it just seems to flow out of me like a broken faucet. Sometimes it's just a dribble, other times it's a gushing torrent that won't stop. Granted, it feels natural, but I tend to lose plot points if I'm not careful, and the droughts are a real pain.
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Well, there are certain twists and turns I can guarantee you won't find in this particular Wrabbit hole. For instance, no scat or watersports. That's just nasty. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/eenope.png
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I'll take that as a dislike for the particular kind of clop.
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I know, right?
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Maybe you left it in your Gear? Have you checked the cockpit? //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Derpy_dealwithit.png
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Equestrian nobility (at least in this fanon) are as follows:
Duke/Duchess
Marquess/Marchioness
Earl/Countess
Viscount/Viscountess
Baron/Baroness
Below them in rank are the gentry as follows:
Baronet/Baronetess
Knight
Note that though gentry are not actually Peers of the Realm, they are entitled to hereditary lands, and the honorific Sir (or Dame as appropriate). Possession of a Peerage title entitles the holder to a seat in Parliament, but it is not required that they actually attend; and to be addressed as My Lord (or My Lady as appropriate), or in the case of Dukes and Duchesses, Your Grace. The Princesses (at least the alicorn ones) are above all other ranks, but are still beholden to them through noblese oblige. The sons and daughters of Peers are allowed to append the title of Prince (or Princess as appropriate) to their names because rank hath its privilege, and the actual Princesses don't mind, as long as they don't try anything too uppity. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
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Well, I didn't want to get into the hurtful side of things, so I kept it a little on the tame side.
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Comeuppance is up coming. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png
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I subscribe to the plot convenient naming system. If it works, I go with it. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Cloudchaser_dealwithit.png
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I don't think his wives will help in that regard. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
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Quite. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_chair.png
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::does a little dance::
Didn't think anyone would get a joke that far past it's expiration date. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_gaze.png
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Character development chapter... I'll take it! //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png
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Since you're out there, if you see the ball, throw it to What. The runner's already past first base.
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Yes. Yes, it did. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_cake.png
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Looks like Peppy has some competition; especially if you're a woman. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png
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sorry, maybe it's just me being picky.
2560460 Regarding honorifics, there is a gender-neutral one: Ser. I've seen it used to address both men and women (at least in Dragon Age: Origins). Pronounced the same as the male honorific, but meant specifically to address knights of either gender, I believe.
Planning out your writing is over-rated, hell, I don't! And Twilight is giving me a very disturbing look right now >_>
I for one like the mix between Twi-Harem and Plain Sight in this chapter, it seemed to balance itself out nicely.
Although just how much of the Ponyville population is actually a government agent? Perhaps Rainbow is justified in suspecting spies around every corner. ...And I totally just imagined Dash confronting Plain Sight about that.
I think you forgot a we in between thing and have.
but other than that another well crafted chapter and what an interesting one it was ... (suprized no one made the "I have seen enough henti to know where this is going" joke) XD
Well, that was certainly surprising. Magic sure is useful. They've checked off "futa", now "tentacles" too, so what's left on the "strange fetishes" list?
This bit made me giggle. My friends and I always called them "Yugimans: The Gathering" when referring to yugioh, "Pokiohs" for pokemon, and "Gagic: The Mathering" for Magic.
Incidentally, we still play all of them. WE'RE NO QUITTERS
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...You don't wanna know... That way only lies madness...
And blood... lots and lots of blood.
Damn you Google Images, circa 2003!
2560460 there are parts of Japan that ought stay in Japan as far as I'm concerned.
2560885 never ask that question!!!!
2560885 Peanut Butter and Sonic Screwdrivers?
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I was thinking "creative bondage" myself, but Peanut Butter works.
That was a great chapter and I'm glad you got into some of the background scenes it gives breath before the more important stuff happens I can't wait to see them all as Baronesses that is going to be good eat that nobles I look forward to the next chapter I WANT MOAR if you don't mind that is
Commence read.
Wonder what the rules are?
She southern accent, he northern accent.
Bupped...?
the thing have going. Gotta beware of the thing have going. Almost as terrifying as man door hand hook car door.
Weeeeee~ Tentacles! 'Nuff said
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Rule 1.) BUY ALL THE CARDS
Rule 2.) S/he with the most cards, wins.
Rule 3.) Repeat with a new print run and limited edition foil cards.
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Well, all opinions are welcome here. I can't improve without poor reviews as well as the good that feed my muse.
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Never heard of Ser as an honorific, but I have heard Sirrah, mostly in regards to British-held India. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_smile.png
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More than Dash suspects, but not as much as you might think. Also, Dash confronting Plain Sight would be hilarious, though I'd be afraid of making her look OP. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_chair.png
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Thanks for catching that. I'll fix it right away. Incidentally, I have seen that much hentai. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_O_O.png
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Stick around to find out. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_gaze.png
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My friends and I always referred to Magic as Crack: the Addiction. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Derpy_dealwithit.png
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Now you've made me curious. You did a search for guro with the safety off, didn't you? //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png
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And some that demand importing! //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Pinkie_loool.png
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Man, the thing's I've read done with peanut butter... //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_ooh.png //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_ooh.png
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It's okay to ask for more, Tigrean. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Sweetie_happy.png
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Slightly more arcane than Digimon, but less complex than Magic: the Gathering. Beyond that, you have to be under 17 to understand. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png
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Thanks for catching those. I knew you'd find this clop scene entertaining. Wait, why are you reading this when there's ATFN to write? Come on, man! I need my Twilight Moon fix! Or at least do another livestream as you "write". //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
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Those are the rules for the parents of the addicted- I mean kids.
2562407 You are a bad person and should feel bad.
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maybe i could find some stories that would be good examples of what i was getting at? or would that be weird? i'm not trying to be creepy or nothing, i just want to see this story (which is a ridiculously awesome story, by the way) be the best it could be.
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Not on purpose... Was trying to find artwork from someone w/ odd screen name and went a page or too far.... And it wasn't just guro, but that was scarring enough
2562407 Guess I could stream while I'm playing GW2. And maybe write after that.
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well then ... you win this round
Wooo! More clop. Right when I wanted it too. You're good.
...too good...
Dat alliteration. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png
Oh lawdy, tentacles. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_ooh.png
//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia2.png
Why do I get the feeling it knocked up Spitfire anyway though.
Gonna admit it, a little disappointed we didn't get a detailed scene for the reporter ponies. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png
High Side, you lucky bastard. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png
Tentacle sex? Really? That's too bad. Considering that's pretty much just a rape fic sex scene i really didn't like it at all. The rest of the chapter was enjoyable though.
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//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
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Nah man, you're fine. I too want this story to be the best that it can.
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Never saw the appeal in it myself. Violence is not sexy.
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That was fun.
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I find it gratifying to win at something that so few want to win at.
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I'mnotwatchingyou,really!
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I can gaurantee you 100% that that sex scene did not knock up Spitfire... or any pony for that matter. As for the reporters, I try not to put too much clop in my story, and the herd one was the more important. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
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Finally someone got that! As for suppliers, I prefer the term candyman. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Derpy_dealwithit.png
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Okay, you're gonna have to explain how sex between four consensual adults (and a spell) constitutes rape, because that's a new one on me. You can like it or not, and I'll respect that opinion, but calling it rape is just...
2569653 I declare... VENDETTA!
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//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Derpy_Hooves.png
But they're so cute!
Still I suppose tentacles do take precedence. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_lazy.png //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Cheerilee.png //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Trixie_lolface_2.png //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
If Twilight was already a Countess, then why doesn't anyone mention that when someone asks how the new law would affect her?
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I KNEW IT!
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I don't believe you when you say that no one got knocked up. You just don't make statements like those at the end of this chapter for nothing.
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Nice chapter. It's not bad to have some scenes with the background characters. You write them so well that they're often a little treat added to the meat of the story.
The clop scene was pretty good although tentacles often don't really do much for me, but that's a personal thing, not a condemnation of the scene which I felt you actually pulled off rather well. I actually liked the little scene with the reporters just beforehand a bit more since loving somewhat vanilla sex is totally my biggest fetish.