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Ouch. Spitfire's getting deployed, and Golden Bit is being a complete plothead about this law.
See, the thing about Golden Bit's law: Celestia and Luna likely find the law a joke, because they've been around since before this caste system was introduced. The only reason they can't strike down the law themselves is because Celestia meted out her political power to common ponies, and over time, the power went to their heads.
Also, I'm surprised this law has made it this far. Seriously, by now word should have reached the common pony, and I'd think they'd be up in arms over the whole deal. Being told you can't marry certain ponies just because they're in a different caste is utterly stupid.
Way to go Blueblood!
"sorry if that disappoints anyone"
.....how could I ever be disappointed in something so wonderful? I knew Fluttershy would be perfect for Pinkie and Dash
So in other, less sexy news Twi's vague backstory gets a vague prophecy added to it, Spike returns to a new sister with two more on the way, Blue Blood fails to become Duke of Canterlot in the span of five minutes, and Spitfire now has a 50/50 shot at living, but since I see no 'Sad' tags I'm just gonna tell myself she will be coming back....because I doubt you'd be enough of a monster to take away the father of Twilight's first baby before she's even born....... right
DashieFlutterPie? Oh yeah!
Also, damn you for making me kinda have empathy for Golden Bit! Making me feel feelings, you author you.
Awesome chapter.
Left field?
The stuff with Golden Bit was cool.
I'm pretty glad to see that stuff worked out between Blue and Jubilee, gotta say that isnt a pairing I ever thought of.
The Nyx prophecy makes it sound like we're going to get Twilicorn Transformation some time soon
I'm very much looking forward to how you handle this if that's the case, and all the other implications that go with it.
Spitfire being shipped out certainly sucks....
For how long? How much is she going to be in danger? Did her attempt to impregnate Twi work?!
I mean they said that if it didnt stick they could try again, but I dont believe you gave us confirmation or not yet, did you??
Can Twi even get pregnant?
I might be pulling my hair out right now worrying about all these things, but screw that, we got a FlutterDashPie 3way!
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I swear he's been reading our Skype conversations!
2794135 Well then he can now put in the next chapter the answer to the biggest question we have at the moment
Was that a reference to Trixie's Magic Bit, I spy? Well done, sir!
Good!
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Yeah I missed the ball last time by not asking for beach scenes for the honeymoon.
I am not making that mistake again!
2794176 At first all I wanted was cute baby shenanigans, now I just want more FlutterDashPie and more Spitfire not being dead
2794236 Phssst, FlutterDashPie is lame! Rainbow FlutterPie is where it's at!
@Author's note: Bah. Still am saddened because Luna and fluttershy won't hook up. Unfortunately I probably won't be happy unless they do. *shrugs*
Ny's prophecy gives me slim hope. It smells like Twilacron, but could be (just barely given some other things said earlier on) that all of the mane 6 ascend and I at last might have my Luashy in all its wonderful glory.
I'm not holding my breath though.
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Rest of chapter was good. Keep up the good work, blah, blah blah.
Damn, females already appear to outnumber males in Equestria 9 to 1. If Twilight's cock-candies go mainstream they might go extinct entirely.
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Sometimes, there are no emergency exits, and you just have to ride it out to the end.
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The puzzle pieces are adding up, waiting for someone to put them together. A couple of people have already seen where I'm going with this, though a bit imperfectly. Who's next?
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::Rubs hands together and cackles evilly:: //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Queen_Chrysalis.png
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8xzlOZfBXXU
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I keep forgetting to add Twilight's pregnancy into the story. I really need to write myself a note to clear this up. Also, you guys have secret Skype conversations about me? I'm flattered! //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Cloudchaser_dealwithit.png
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And that is? //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia2.png
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It's one of the better clop stories out there. I highly recommend it to anyone who doesn't mind bucketfuls of angst. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_smile.png
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Thank you kindly.
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Sounds legit to me.
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Don't worry. They are prohibitively difficult to make, being that they are essentially pure magic in a candy shell. Heh. Cock candy.
2794499 Y'know what? I actually got super sick of "Who's On First" years ago.
Soooo overplayed.
I'm really liking Blueblood in this story. Like everyone was supposed to, I did not like him at all in his canon appearance, but I love all the different ways authors play with the character. I think this version, Platinum Crown's, and Cultural Artifacts' versions are neck and neck.
Admittedly, I'm balancing about 15 different shipping canons in my head at the moment, but IIRC, Rarity and AJ would be the only two left of the Mane 6 not involved in some type of relationship. Unless I'm wrong and this is one of the fics that ships RariJack or something. But in any case, the thought comes to mind that I would love to see Rarity's reaction to the new and improved Blueblood. Like maybe AJ decides to visit Dodge Junction and see how Cherry is doing since she left and Rarity tags along because reasons. Then, while she's there, she's accosted by ruffians only to be saved by a gallant white stallion in shining gold armor. Of course, then he takes off his obfuscating helmet to reveal...BLUEBLOOD! Maybe she gets run out of town after caking the local hero guardspony. Maybe she decides to give him another chance and winds up in one of those ever-so-fashionable menage-a-trois going around lately. Or maybe she and Cherry don't go for that sort of thing and decide to duke it out with a good old-fashioned bout of jello-wrestling, cherry flavored of course. With Blueblood sitting as guest of honor and tickets at the door going for 20 bits a seat. I should stop now before I brainstorm a few dozen more, shouldn't I?
Well, some decent set-up. Nice bit of familial tension and foreshadowing with Blueblood & Golden Bit; I approve.
I really like that you seem to be going with my idea of how mares & foals would interact in a herding environment. All mares would need to be "mothers" to each foal or it would breed discontentment and rivalry between the mares, essentially playing favorites with their own foals.
Now this thing with Flutters... That seriously seems to have come out of nowhere. I'm happy that Fluttershy won't die alone, but the sex (while very short was still decent) really just seemed to happen without any reason or buildup. Not that I feel Pinkie nor Dash would say no to Flutters, but "My friend is sad and having nightmares... I know lets have sex!" seems a bit too out there even for our little pink ball of randomness. You might think about expanding the buildup just a bit so it doesn't seem quite so jarring.
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Regarding Applejack and Rarity.
Check out A Roll In The Hay
As noted in its description its a same-universe prequel.
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Darn. For some reason, I suspected as much. That puts the kibosh on my little Rarity-Blueblood gambit, at least not without putting in an LD50 load of angst. It was so well done, too, that I'd hate to screw with such a relationship even though it was only written in 3000 words. Though it does give Rarity a better reason for heading out to Dodge. Hmm. I suppose AJ could have possibly had a "That Summer" moment with Cherry. And now Twilight's put herding ceremonies back in the public consciousness. And another line of crops isn't a bad investment. Maybe it's not as ruined as I thought.
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I think this fits better and ties in with Owloicious...
Yeah, I know there where clues in the dialog, but it still leaves some confusion when you start the chapter. Even if it's just one of the first things a character says, so you can avoid using a timestamp.
Am I the only one who is wondering about how Golden Bit is planning to break up Twilight's herd? Immediately after that bit we learn that Parliament is requesting that the wonderbolts deploy to the frontier. I think that's kind of suspicious.
More plot development and minor world building with a Dash of Shypie.
I like it.
Post-script:
Do the Sausage Lollies have all the bugs and kinks worked out? (I know it said 'inert' but that's what Cheerilee was told last time )
Or will Flutters be the next dam in this series?
You know what I want to see? That plot exposition room that Nyx and Onyx has. It would seem like a good puzzle to solve, what with red herrings (this one belongs to someone else), old prophecies already completed but forgotten about, piecing where what prophecy goes when... Yeah, I want access to that room so badly now.
Speaking of prophecies, this current one basically says "Status quo on what certain people expect? Yeeaah, no. Your world is gonna come crashing down now." I'm pretty much done guessing what is what as I can't remember enough of this story to put together the subtle clues anymore But I'm definitely gonna stick around for the ride!
oicwutudidthar
Suddenly Fluttersex! There needs to be a side story for the other characters relationships. (And sex lives. )
Poor Nyx.
I have a bad feeling about Spits. Gets deployed, sometime after explicitly trying to get Twi preggers. No sad tag, but...this story is almost over. I foresee a "Something to remember her by"...
Hmm...
respect for blueblood +75 wow, you just got me to respect blueblood. nicely done
I know everyone's kind of latching onto "ERMEGERD Spitfire's gonna die now that Twi is getting preggers because DEPLOYMENT" but really i'm unconcerned. In reality Deployments aren't all as dangerous as hollywood cares to imply, even if a unit is sent to a "hot zone." Military leaders don't just set their troops out like a hat on a stick to see if there's a trigger-happy baddie out in yon hills. That's not to say that things don't happen and people don't die, it's just quite a bit overplayed in the media. And like you said the Griffo-Mino forces are just probing to see if Equestria is weaker with Luna sharing the reins now. Attacking an Equestrian military unit IN Equestrian territory, even if it's near the boarder, constitutes an act of war. That goes a fair ways beyond just probing for weakness. On top of that Spitfire is on an elite fast response shock trooper squadron. That means she'll be idealy deployed BEHIND equestrian lines to provide support in case something pops off.
so ... moral of this story ... "SPITFIRE BETTER NOT DIE"
I feel a bit concerned about Fluttershy. It sounds like she's trying to get some space and sort through her own emotions away from the source of her grief. Also (if i remember correctly) none of the other Mane 6 have been shown to know about the whole Lunashy situation, on top of that i think only Twilight would know about Luna's dreamwalking. All of this to say it seems like Pinkie's "Flutters had a bad dream ... lets sex" seems a bit out of character. I am interested to see how this newly formed love-quadrangle plays out
Loved the new chapter, can't wait for more!
That was a great Chapter and I love on how you brought Fluttershy, Rainbow, and Pinkie together But what about Applejack How is her relationship doing with Rarity From what I am gathering it looks like either all of the main six will ascend or they are all parts of one alicorn that got split up in the elements of harmony. I do hope it is the former cause I like them all to be separate but equal I WANT MOAR SOON If that is alright by you
Is it bad that I feel such pleasure in Golden Bit's plans falling apart like ash?
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I wasn't aware that anyone other than some Abbot and Costello fans even knew it existed. Have you ever seen any of their other routines, like the math one or learning to drive?
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Wow, that's some setup you got there. A shame it won't work as someone pointed out.
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It would seem to be the smart way to go with the herding. Raising children is a tough job, so having an extra adult around is always helpful. As for the Fluttershy thing, I have to balance just how much information I give out very carefully, or risk tipping my hand too soon, and just have the final result dangling overhead like a second shoe. What's got Fluttershy so upset will be revealed soon, and as you saw in TSW, sex seems to be Dash's answer to everything, and it may be rubbing off on Pinkie a little.
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Ah, I miss Animaniacs. There hasn't been a show like it since.
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He pretty much shot his bolt with that law, so now he has to scrabble for whatever advantage he can find among the wreckage of his career. Sad, really. Just hope that no innocents suffer for it. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_cry.png
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Well, they had a few months to work on them, and you can bet that a personal interest helped speed the research along at a fair clip. Suffice it to say, they are inert biologically, but very, very, very difficult to make. Those two candies account for their entire month's supply.
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I hadn't thought about it, but it is kinda like the Prophesy Room in Harry Potter, isn't it? //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_O_O.png
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I've heard war described as long stretches of boredom, broken only by a few minutes of pants-shitting terror. Unless told differently by someone who experienced it, I am not inclined to argue. As for Fluttershy, she's been going through some things in the background that I haven't been showing for plot reasons, and is in a very vulnerable place right now. She's seeking reassurance and safety in the arms of her friends, and... well, she's also more than a little horny.
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Thank you Kindly.
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I'll tackle Rarijack in the next chapter, hopefully. Also,
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Schadenfreud can be very cathartic, as long as it's not taken to extremes. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
2798726 You're shitting me. You've never seen anyone else doing "Who's the Man on First" or some variant of it? Shit, Animaniacs did a Slappy Squirrel episode with Woodstock and "The Who."
And probably, but it's been a while I"m sure.
Edit: And apparently one of your commenters actually posted that video.
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I grabbed that vid for the lols of the bumpy ride (the cackling was a bonus) and didn't even think of the room of prophecies in that universe
Seriously though, I want that puzzle room. Can I have access to your brain?
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Yeah. The real shame is that it's not really a "square peg/round hole" problem, but more of an octagon peg, you know? It looks like it'll fit at first, but then you find out it doesn't, but only just, so you try maybe whittling away a bit at the sharp edges to make it fit, and then it fits but it's all loose and wobbly because it's full of whittle marks and you'll always know it wasn't really supposed to fit.
May have to cut back on the sugar a bit.
Actually, no, I'm starting to think the sugar is good. Because after looking at my initial premise, the flaw was in trying to cram another ship in there. The whole "AJ goes to Dodge to reconnect with Cherry and Rarity tags along" thing works just fine. Hell, even the "saved by gallant Blueblood" thing works. But then, instead of her falling dramatically in love with him or something, it could just be a light-hearted bit of teasing. Stuff like how it took Cherry to finally straighten him out, Rarity offers to make Cherry's wedding dress, etc., etc. I know there's a knotted cherry stem joke in there somewhere but I can't seem to suss it out, dammit.
your
you should put a comma after that is
Since this is Twilight speaking, you should comma after I and that and should be am.
that
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comma after you~
y the hyphen?
wat
Still waiting for Blueballs and Golden Shit to die of super AIDS or mega cancer, but until then I'll hafta deal with it. I can't remember, for the life of me, what Shy's dreams were about if it was shown at all and Spitfire getting shipped off sucks. Also, I'm now rooting for Nyx to get a piece of hot Twi ass as well. You better make it happen.
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The Animaniacs skit was probably the only one I'd ever seen aside from Abbot and Costello. Sure, some people have tried to imitate it, but most fall far short of those two, and are therefor, immediately forgettable.
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Sorry, this brain holds too many secrets. Restricted access is restricted, and there are no Snowdens here. Now, please look at my flashy pen while I put these shades on for no reason whatsoever. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
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Fixed. Thanks for catching those. As for Pinkie-Pie, I do that for the same reason you use Apple Jack instead of Applejack. I used the hyphen before I knew that there was no hyphen, so now I'm stuck with it until I can go back through all 50+ chapters and correct each instance. Regarding Fluttershy's dreams, I never wrote them into the story, because it would be too much of a tip off. Don't worry though, because they are discussed next chappie. In fact, I'm working on that scene as I type this. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Derpy_dealwithit.png
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Did you just...? I KNOW YOU DID NOT JUST TRY TO FLASH ME WITH THE NEURALIZER! I got ways around that; from the glaringly obvious antiscribe.files.wordpress.com/2011/10/wedding-of-river-song-6.jpg (ah the eye drive, the one thing that allows us to remember the silence) to the simple fact that my brain is constantly streaming my memories to several secure terminals linked only to my head (the surgeries were a bitch, but I could essentially download myself into another blank copy if I die), so don't you think that will work on me! (Are we really having this conversation? please tell me we really are)
...perfectly content to wait though (or I could just hack your brain...)
Finally got to read this chapter! Stupid WiFi was being a bitch. Let's see... loved that threesome, even though I would have loved it a hell of a lot more if it were with Flitter and CC. Glad to see Bluey being awesome. Can't wait to see more.
~SolidFire
Commence read.
Ha to Godiva.
A magical bit reference. Hm.
Now to ponder unto Fluttershy's case.
I think that this story is addicting.
2812812 i like how the chapter names are the titles or lines from a song, and i must say you have excellent taste
Dude... so. much. shipping.
Twi/Fire, Twilight/Trixie, Twi/Cheerilee (And the other 5 or so combos), Lim/Plain Sight, PinkieDash, (earlier) LunaShy, PinkieShy, FlutterDash
And that's not even counting all the cannon ships, and the one-shots that have appeared randomly throughout the series. The ship master is here!
I like this Blueblood.
Poor Flutters