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Crysis Commander


You do you the best you can do.

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As a housecarl, Lydia must defend her Thane, the Dragonborn, with her very life. After the Dragonborn defeated Alduin, he became cocky, arrogant, and an overall unpleasant fellow to deal with, especially to Lydia. Though he made her carry all of his items, made her fight all of his battles - for which he took all the credit, and tormented her every day with his words and his fists, Lydia stayed true to her oath. After a battle with a rogue mage, however, Lydia has found herself in a colorful new world where horses can talk. Now, with the help of her new companions, can she find a way back to Skyrim?

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Comments ( 54 )
Comment posted by Alex Wadegrove deleted Jul 17th, 2013

Poor Lydia... Oh well. Colourful land of friendly ponies, ho!

This will be interesting.

I am sworn to carry your burdens. SIGH:facehoof:

Ooh, a very, very nice job! I kinda thought Lydia's reaction would be more of Dibella instead of Stendarr, mostly because Dibella is the god of women...although Stendarr is the god of merciful rule in which she's ruled over by Dovahkiin...I'm thinking out loud. I did very much enjoy the story. Can't wait what's going to happen next. :raritystarry:

I almost feel bad for Lydia when I stabbed her in the back when I caught her eating my bread. Almost

Oooh humans exist in Equestria wonderful stuff

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Thank you very much. It's comments like this that make continuing all the more worth it. :rainbowkiss:

Liking it so far! Keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:

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Good to know people such as yourself are enjoying it so far. :rainbowkiss:

By the divine, you have done Lydia justice!

"Little did Lydia know that Sovngarde was not the land that awaited her." Gee I thought I wasn't in FiMFiction for a second there.

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Judging by his combat prowess and level, I don't think he'd last very long even in Equestria. :derpytongue2:

2923119 Unless he's been improved, my Faendal has enchanted Deadric armor with an fire enchantment deadric sword.

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I just have a question out of curiosity: why would you give a lightly armored archer daedric armor and a sword?

2923581 I give all my followers deadric armor, they can't handle it, they gotta deal with it. Plus the sword I didn't need, I installed the lightsabers mod so blah.

2923936 yeah. The only console mods I know of are for Xbox. Jeeze you talking of PS3 reminded me I have skyrim for it too lol. I don't even remember what race I am on it.:derpytongue2:

2924137 just started it up and checking what it is... LOL ITS A DUNMER LEVEL 2 i now have good reason to join the ebonheart pact when elder scrolls online comes out cuz on PS3 as you know is Dunmer, On my xbox im Nord and on PC im Argonian lol:rainbowlaugh:

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Very diverse race choices. Grey-Mane or Battle-Born? :rainbowkiss:

2924208 Grey-Mane, those battle-borns think someguy down south knows whats best for skyrim? Ulfric is a power hungry devil but hes the devil i know! good enough for ya?

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Then I say well met, friend. Unfortunately, I'm afraid Lydia doesn't share our views.

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Since she's the focus of the story, killing her off would bring this fic to a premature demise. She shall live...for now.

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Maybe. Maybe not. Only I currently know the answer to that.

2924604 and the answer is yes, i know it

2890570 And that is why im allways nice to Lydia in Skyrim and give her days off :U

I treat Lydia as a Great Friend and give her days off in skyrim :P Weeks off to tell the truth >:P allways heal her...

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Then you are truly worthy of being a Dovahkiin. :rainbowkiss:

2975540 Naw man my Chars name is Gordon Freeman HE is truly worthy...

Meadow of Murder. What's next, the District of Disaster? Taiga of Tickling? River of Rapids? Snowlands of Snuggling? But in all seriousness, good chapter, awaiting the next in anticipation of what happens next.

Hiya, Dances. Again, I'm reviewing your story on behalf of the Good Grammar Directory, a comprehensive directory of grammatically correct stories on FIMFiction. This doesn't quite make it, although it's quite close. Here are just a few things you can fix to make it more readable, as well as eligible for addition into the Directory.

Under his horned iron helmet, the Dragonborn stared into Lydia's eyes with the intensity and rage that only he could portray

Yeah, that's not what portray means. "Convey," maybe?

At this, Lydia smile faltered.

*Lydia's
Harmless little typo.

Lydia felt the brawny hand of the Dragonborn impact with her face

This is more of a stylistic thing, but is there any reason you're not just saying "hit her face," or, barring that, "impact her face"?

You are but a lowly servant girl; an expendable resource.

"An expendable resource" does not stand by itself as a sentence. Subsequently, don't use the semicolon, but do use a colon.

I'm the slayer of Alduin, the World-Eater

Just for clarity's sake, you should probably remove the comma there to make it obvious that Alduin is the World-Eater.

Let me know when you've gotten around to fixing these, and I'll be happy to add your story into the Directory.

in my game Lydia died by a giant that looks like Osama bin laden

My Lydia tried to rush three frost trolls at once at Labyrinthian. It would almost be redundant to say that she died.
Good times, good times.

In my game lydia died by jumping off a cliff at a steam centurion. I stood by and watched thinking
"nope":eeyup:

Wow the dragonborn in this story is a total dick.

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