Epilogue
It was startlingly calm in the library. The air was still and muggy outside, while the inner sanctum was cool and shaded. Not a single noise was heard, inside or out. It seemed like the world itself was in mourning, with the birds silent as stones and the crickets little more than decoration.
The ponies in town were even less bright. Each wandered around with an aimless, sluggish gait, magic silent, wings resting in mourning. Nopony cared why Twilight Sparkle had left this world, only that she had gone.
The world was a quiet place.
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Luna stared out the window, watching as the stars she strained so hard to make at night were unsympathetically obliterated by her sister's rising sun. The two Princesses had not spoken since Twilight's passing, and Luna was quite fine with that fact.
More than fine, actually.
She did not regret rebelling against her sister. She was actually pleased about that.
It was more...
Symbolic.
If they saw each other, somepony would notice their standoff. And report it to some newspony for a lot of money.
And maybe Celestia would reveal her surprising lack of feeling.
But, as luck would have it, she would probably blame it all on Luna. Because nopony cared that Luna had absorbed the Nightmare from Celestia in the first place and let herself be banished, no~oo. Of course not.
So Luna was content with being alone.
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Spike hated the gravestone with a passion. It wasn't that it marked Twilight's death, or any of that. It was how it looked.
The round stone was topped with a spire in the shape of the Element of Magic. Fine.
But on top of that, it depicted Twilight rearing up, with a set of beautiful wings of the finest violet blown glass. Which would be fine, except he knew everypony else knew that she was Celestia's student. Which meant she was being compared to Celestia for having wings. Turned into Celestia, really.
Spike was still trying to figure out how much Twilight would have mattered if she wasn't a Princess's pupil.
But he loathed the inscription.
Twilight Sparkle
Lived a life full of friendship and happiness.
Fine.
Missed by her adopted brother, Spike, and her closest friends and family
Also fine.
Always in the heart of the dear Princess Celestia, who shall mourn for the loss forever.
THAT was what he hated. Not only did he know Celestia didn't give a horse-apple, there wasn't a mention of Luna, who was actually affected.
With a decisive snarl, a thin trail of fire licked over the stone, melting the final words into a smooth, unmarked surface.
Twilight would have enjoyed it.
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Luna struggled against her sister's superior power, holding the sun on the horizon at just the right spot for an entire week.
For seven days, the heavens were lit with stars, and the sky around them was a deep purple.
The world mourned in a melodic chaos of sudden birdsong and cricket chirps, tuning themselves into a harmonic beat, somehow meeting in the middle of discordant notes, and flooding the quiet with cacophonous sound.
For seven days, a single purple unicorn was the last word on everyone's tongues, the silent end to a long reign of joy, and somehow, in that sad, broken moment...
...life had no regret.
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Epilogue complete and story finished. Thanks for reading, everyone.
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" man i could i do nothing" George Lopez quote lol
well awesome story will save for future reference and when i get depressed
and also spike was cool in the end scratched of celestias name awesome bro
Finished huh, pity . . . this story has the potential to go further.
But as it stands right now . . . not a bad job. I doubt that Celestia would be so cold about her student's death however.
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Try living more than a thousand years and see how you feel about emotions. Chances are she's had hundreds of pupils by now.
Anyways, brilliant finish to the story, was a good read.
Okay...Review Time.
I'm not good at these, but this story interested me somehow.
Very interesting characterizations.
The plot was instantly depressing, with the suicidal thoughts of Twi in her final moments and Spike's sadness after the fact, Luna's rebelling against her sister, and the all around dark tone gave me a 'it's raining outside' feeling.
Celestia's response was actually almost how I expected. My thought was that she would react that way at first. Then near the end, mourn in secrecy, showing that besides the fact that after a thousand years and many students, Twilight was like a daughter to her.
Spike's reaction was surprisingly calm. I would have at least spit fire at Celestia, but it's good to see him keep his cool.
Luna deserves the right to be angry with her sister, after all, Twilight was the one who saved her from her Nightmare Moon form. And the fact that Celestia wasn't sorry for sending her to the moon broke my heart.
The writing was almost poetic and neat. I hope to match such a way.
Overall=5 stars, Favorited, and a heart
Hope this meant something.
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I really appreciate all the feedback, criticism - which there wasn't much of - and requests of continuation. I really enjoy writing stories outside of school, and it makes me happy knowing my work is appreciated. Thank you, TotalLostCause, for your review. I hope to have more stories up like this in a while, as All We Have got similar replies. I just want you to know that I read all of these comments, and squeeed a little inside whenever I got a favorite or a track.
Thank you to everyone for your support.
~Ice
197148 Well if it's criticism you're looking for I'll be more than happy to help you out.
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I wasn't requesting any, just letting everyone know that even the low points are appreciated.
Buck Celestia, not caring and then acting like she did, good job Spike
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wait so you have lived for a thousand years?
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It's supposed to be a secret. Shhhhhhh!
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your secrets safe with me....maybe
And then Discord said, "F*ck, this world is boring", and he brought Twilight back just for fun.
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She was told to only sent one when she learned something about friendship. Her friends probably thought she was on a studying binge - wouldn't be too unlike her - and Princess Celestia's lived for how many years?
If you lost everyone you loved, hundreds of times over, would you let yourself be hurt that easily?
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He's got a point. Just admit it you wanted to write a sadfic without really caring about how plausible it was.
Which is a problem. Writing sadfics featuring existing characters is almost cheating, since the reader is approaching the story with an attachment already formed without you even trying at all. But you STILL have to keep the aforementioned character acting at least remotely in character and have a grip on the story mechanics in order to elicit the desired emotional response.
You failed pretty hard at both, so unless the reader has absolutely no standards whatsoever, the strongest emotion they'll experience throughout the fic is amusement over the wooden dialogues or vague second-hand embarrassment over the spastic excuse for a plot.
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You say that working with existing characters is cheating, but almost every OC story goes ignored because it isn't with the characters everyone knows. And also, I'm glad you took the time to read, tear apart and generally shit upon a story that's nearly two years old and nowhere near my top stories.
Congrats on dissing a story I wrote when I first joined FIMfic.
You really are... The 2436009
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You're welcome.
Arrgh. I mean... It was sad... And... And well-written in language and sentence structure, I think... But... Celestia is not cruel!!! I'm sorry, but I don't like her being portrayed as a heartless monster!
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My characterization skills and the level of characterization in the show itself now is much different than it was three and a half years ago.
6323332 I definitely agree as someone who's just finished going through all of your stories
... pleease continue Forces of Nature!!! Please? 
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Blind.