A very special holiday is coming up in Ponyville, and everyone is getting ready to spend the day with the mare or colt that they love... except for one. Poor Fluttershy is all alone. She had once been in love, to be sure, but that was back in Cloudsdale, he has been gone for a long time now, and this time of year only serves to remind her of what she once had.
But that was then, and this is now, and now she has friends who care about her and don't want to see her suffer any more. And now they are on a mission; to find the colt Fluttershy loved, and still loves, and bring him back to her, forever.
Chapters (3)
Dang! I can't wait to see what happens next!
This has potential...
More please.
tracked
Interesting. I wait with baited breath.
Man, I'm such a sucker for romance fics, tracking this to see what comes next
More!
Next chapter is being written.
All I can say, tears were shed
Now excuse me I need to go eat a bucket of ice cream
D'AWWWWWW!!!
Ok now for my real comment, great fic I only have two pieces of criticism
1) work on the difference between their vs. there.
2) the sorindash at the end felt a little forced. I would have liked some lead up to that.
But this is just nitpicky stuff. Keep writing cause its awesome.
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1) Doggone it, I did it again >_<. I know the difference, I just derped.
2) It did? Yeah probably. I might be tempted to rewrite it at some point. Maybe x3
This right here deserves to be the Heart and Hooves Episode. Not some thing about the CMC using a love potion on Big Mac and Cheerilee
CONSARNIT! STOP IT! CONFOUND THESE PONIES! THEY DRIVE ME TO FEEL!
HNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNG!
N-NO! BASTARD! YOU TOOK MY NICKNAME FOR FLUTTERSHY! (XD JK bro! AMAZING story! LOVE it! 10 star EASILY!)
kk time to do something manly after many manly tears were lost
1) play bloody games
2) listen to rock/metal while playing
3) watch war movies
4) watch action movies
5) read more MLPfics
6) cry
7) repeat...
*sheds a tear for great justice!*
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a very heartwarming end to a great fic
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Thanks man
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All my Stars. Take them. They mean nothing to me.
What...is this watery salty liquid coming from my eyes?I havent cryed since my little dashie!
I heart ripped out of my own chest and left me from the sheer amount of greatness this story presented to me, dare I say it? Cute. Loved it!
Take my stars and go in peace my son. Here take my wallet too.
Very nice ending to an amazing story! Great job.
Gosh, I didn't think the story was THIS good
Thanks you guys
"Big Macintosh put a hand on his shoulder and gave Hailstorm a warm smile"
So was that a mistake or has this been a humanified pony story all this time without me realizing it?
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Thanks for catching that, I'll go fix it
206085 DANGIT! Stop beating me to the punch at pointing out the odd error or two! *Pouts*
Erm... Could you explain this little bit though? -> Fluttershy began to cry in joy anew, a Twilight repeated the process with Hailstorm's ring. (I could easily be missing something, as I'm sick, but please humor me if it's something blatantly obvious...)
Okay, re-read, and I feel stupid. DERP DERP! I'MA MUFFIN! It's only missing an s for the 'as Twilight...'
ANYHOOF... YES! An extra scene to the story! 8D THANKS! It was LEGENDARY! /]
~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria
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Ack! Thanks for catching that. I'll go fix it right now.
And thanks for reviewing =)
206819 NP! It's a habit, unfortunately, so thanks for being a good sport! XD *Has had some yell at one for pointing out mistakes before*
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Nah it's cool, I always appreciate it when someone points out an error so I can fix it.
Especially when I forgot to proofread >.<
A manly tear was sh- OH WHO THE BUCK AM I KIDDING?! Screw manly tears!, I bawled and cried like a bitch! Very good job man!
Aside from the small spelling error or two, which have been fixed, it was all-in-all a very good, very emotional story!
You have my thanks!
awsome story man it was super touching.. i liked the part where you included posey and firefly the g1 counterpart of fluttershy and rainbow and made them their sisters.
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Thanks
corny romance story........................... BUT I LIKE IT!
though I expected more struggle
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Hey, corny romance is my favorite kind
Funny, Mac is suddenly a sister and a stallion in the same sentence. It's up in the "Best Stallion" paragraph, here's the quote:
The word 'sister' should be replaced with 'brother'. Punctuation of this story needs work; I saw periods where there should be question marks and vice versa, commas where they aren't necessary (one such example is the first comma in the aforementioned quote), and in one case, a '/' where you had probably meant to place a question mark.
You've got a good sense of vocabulary and grammar, and I already know you have improved since this story was published. It would be nice to see a cleaned up story if at all possible, and of course this is going to my favorites list considering how well the plot line and character development is done. I'll be reading what I believe to be the next story now!
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@_@ how the blue heck did that happen?
Just re-read this again, oh my god I remember why I favorited this story. Keep it up man.
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Thank you my fellow Irishman (I'm Irish-American).
That is an Irish flag in your avatar right?
To be honest I liked this story a lot. I enjoy reading anything that has to do with fluttershy, spike, or applejack. Mostly fluttershy. This brung out the feels man! I do have to admit I didn't like a few things but they were mostly my opinions that I would see a colt as. So it really doesn't matter. All in all, I will save this story in memory. Good story bro. XD
Yeah, thats not going to get you tackled if you said that in real life at all...
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Equestrian cops have common sense
Aww, this was such a sweet story, but pretty sad, too. As a Fluttershy lover, I say you did a fine job with this.