• Member Since 26th Mar, 2012
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Life as a filly isn't always easy. Making friends, trying not to be weird, living with the hard times of your past. But when a new filly comes to town stealing Scootaloo's attention and other ponies start to disappear, well, what do you blame?

A dark tale following Scootaloo and her friends as she tries to unravel the mystery surrounding the newcomer, the missing ponies, and the nightmares that accompany them.

(Special thanks to Razorbeam, my professional heckler, and Aziraphael, my crossout artist for their help editing the later chapters.)

Chapters (5)
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Please be kind to Scootaloo for she is best crusader !:scootangel:

Off to a great start! I like how you write the children. I'm psyched to find out what's going on with Scootaloo. And bluebell seems really cool. I love that doll. (And you even let Twist into your story. Was that hard?:pinkiehappy:)

1838872 I'm dying on the inside

Do you just ponify one of my favorite pen&paper rpg? :rainbowwild::rainbowwild:

1840489 I ponify a lot of things to make stories happen...

Great job on this! You definitely deserved that EQD feature. :pinkiehappy: I like Bluebell, those CMC are being mean. :fluttershysad: Dinky really knows how to throw out insults, as well.

Something tells me diamond tiara is first on the kill list

New to fanfics... But this one is turning out really good so far! It was fun, varied and well-written. Can't wait to see what happens next! Keep it up :) :moustache:

*Alondro loads his massive arsenal of caster guns, soul arc guns, and regular guns; arms his huge supply of nuclear bombs, spirit bombs, and chemical explosive bombs; and sharpens his broad swords, enchanted swords, singing swords, rune swords, keyblades, and energy swords.*

Ok, now I'm ready to slaughter everything involved with hurting/killing foals. :flutterrage:

*Alondro doesn't get scared. He gets even.*

This got my interest..... Now for one rule and one rule only..... DON'T KILL THE CRUSADERS!!!! I will ask nicely :fluttershysad: I will give you the benefit of a like, :heart: But should you finish this story and I realize that something traumatizing or boring as a death for Scootaloo or her friends.... well kindly bring your attention to Cupcakes or stories like Harvest. :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

I know things are rather weird right now :pinkiecrazy: Torture them emotionally, injure them, have them on the brink of death, but don't have them cross it :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy: I have a picky, picky meany pants rule that says a story has to be complete in order for me to read it. But I will focus on this story as it looks good. Hell I will even accept coma fates. The everyone rating is nothing. Trauma or death can still occur.

Have a super :pinkiehappy: awesome day!

Have a Cupcake I made it myself :pinkiehappy:

Probably not as good as it should be, but a promise is a promise, and here it is. Chapter 2 of Monsters...

The next one won't take 3 months, I promise.

Oh, and it's not an April Fool's joke. That was a coincidence.

Why does Nightshade remind me of Oogie boogie...

The tendrils and eye minus the teeth make me think of the Daedric prince of Knowledge Hermaeus Mora whose sphere is the scrying of the tides of Fate of the past and future but he is just a blob but that what first cam to my mind when described nightshade.


Its very intersting so far. I like it ^ ^ keep up Shy!

So, uh, did Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon die?

I dunno. They have certainly disappeared.

Monsters that kill fillies, even bullies, must be destroyed.

And as for monsters being 'invincible'... many things have made that claim... until I killed them. :pinkiecrazy:

It leans forward, its icy breath washing over her, before one word exits its mangled lips. “Scream.”

Immediate thought:

The monster must be exterminated with extreme prejudice.

And then Bluebelle. Those touched by the Darkness cannot be pardoned. They must be burned with fire until only ashes remain, lest another devil attach to their wicked hearts.


No offense, dear author, but I will remove this from my favorites and place it on my Read Later. Nothing against the quality of your work, it's just that the very sporadic updates are a hassle. When completed, I'll get to it.
I'm not blaming you, though.

2355968 Well, you were right. It hasn't taken 3 months.

It's been 3 1/2. :trollestia:

2845277>>2845248 I know, I know... I am horrible with updates, but now that I'm out of my final semester of college and the show I'm currently in is opening, hopefully the next chapter won't take forever to update.

Then again, I'm sure this promise was made before, so don't mind me. Just ignore me. Most everyone does.

What if pinkie is behind all this? :pinkiegasp:

Wow, Scootaloo kicks some major flank in this chapter!:scootangel:

Deux ex much? :scootangel:

Actually, no, there is no godlike intervention, and I've been hinting at it for four chapters now.

2938671 The power reveals was just a wee bit much, honestly.

There's a difference between hinting Scoots is special and having her suddenly go Super Saiyajin Monster Slayer.

In fact, on that note, it would be like having Goku 'hinted' at having powers while never using them all the way through DBZ's beginning and then suddenly kicking Frieza's ass out of the blue.

Sudden dramatic power reveals never work well.

And your opinion is noted, but I still stand by my choice. An emotion-fueled fight with the power that she has and the first time she has used it in years will cause her to be much stronger than she normally would, and then the consequences for it will be much more severe (which you will find out about in the last chapter). I could have had her go around fighting woodland creatures or something, but that wouldn't have worked much for the story, now would it?

Sweet! Scootaloo was so awesome in this chapter. (I don't think it counts as a Deus Ex Machina, since that would be help coming from the outside. When it's up to the main character to reach within and find the strength to win, even if that strength completely overwhelms the enemy, that's a Crowning Moment of Awesome.) And of course it looks like her greatest battle is still ahead of her...

Seriously great chapter. Loved all the action scenes. The whole time that fight was going on I was like, this is what I've been waiting for! And the back and forth, where who is winning the fight seems to shift back and forth between Scootaloo and Nightshade and you can't tell who's going to emerge victorious, that was excellent.

Hoping for a happy ending for Scootaloo. (And Bluebell too.)

Awesome story! :pinkiehappy:

Really good story, I'm glad everything worked out for Scoots.

Woah bro.......... That was scary :pinkiegasp:

Great ending. Really liked the Bluebell scene, even though it was sad. :pinkiesad2:

Holy hell, this is epicness!:heart:

Thanks for the awesome story! Great characterization, really unique concept, and totally worth the wait for the updates! :scootangel:
Also, Gummy as Pinkie Pie's monster was the best thing ever! :rainbowkiss: Did not expect, but has ALL of my yes!

OMAFREAKINGOSH YOU ARE THE BEST FANFIC WRITER IN DA WOOOOOORLD!!! :scootangel: :rainbowkiss: :raritystarry: :yay: :heart:


Hey, thank all of you for reading and enjoying! I appreciate it a lot.

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE AMAZING EPIC AND HEARTWARMING STORY! You are the bomb! Best story EVAH!!! True Genius!:heart::rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy::twilightblush::twilightsmile::twistnerd::yay::scootangel::heart:

Channeling a little bit of Inigo, are we? I approve.

“SPARE ME AND I WILL GIVE YOU ANYTHING YOU WANT!” Scootaloo stopped at that, tilting her head curiously. And it was just the opening Nightshade wanted.
He leaped up at her, his advance stopped instantly by her forehooves, both holding onto the tattered edges of his gaping maw. And then, in a voice even colder than his, she spoke. “I want my friends back.”

What can I say? I kind of REALLY love that movie, and what fun is writing if you can't throw in a reference here or there?

Okay, yes, this was all awesome but... Where did Scootaloo get her powers from? It makes it sound like there was some incident way back in her childhood, and implies that Scoots knows what that incident was, but what was it?

Other than leaving me wanting to know that detail, I loved this story. Just thought I should make that clear.


Of course she knows what the incident was. She's been hiding it for the entire story.

You act as if you've never seen a prequel hook before. :twilightblush: (honestly, the incident itself wasn't nearly as interesting as the escape from the orphanage, which you got in flashback...)

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